Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, correct grammar (use past tense and plural forms), and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to make it coherent (e.g., “for example”, “also”). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: When I was a child, I learned politeness mainly from my parents and grandparents. For example, we always waited for the elders to start eating before we began, and we were taught to speak softly at the table. This helped me understand respect and good manners.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion, use clearer connectors and correct tense/word choice. Reduce fillers (uh, umm). Provide one reason and a brief example to support your view. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being polite is very important, especially in Chinese culture where respect for elders is valued. For example, schools and families teach children to greet older people politely, which helps maintain harmony in social relationships.

× Uh, as a child, my parents and my grandparents, uh, will teach me, uh, many social behaviors like when we Chinese eating, uh, around the table, we usually, uh, wait for the elderly's come, umm, and not until, uh, everybody is.

✓ Uh, as a child, my parents and my grandparents taught me many social behaviors. For example, when we Chinese eat around the table, we usually wait for the elderly to come and do not start until everybody is ready.

The original sentence misuses 'will' for habitual past actions; use past simple 'taught' (Modal verb usage ID 4 and Past tense issue ID 5). 'Will' implies future intent, not past habitual teaching. Also corrected 'when we Chinese eating' to 'when we Chinese eat' (present simple for general habit) and 'wait for the elderly's come' to 'wait for the elderly to come' using correct infinitive structure. Combined fragmented clauses into clearer sentences to fix sentence structure and verb forms. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past actions, present simple for habitual facts, and use 'wait for someone to do something' construction.

× Yes, of course it's always a umm. Moral thing to do in Chinese culture and uh, especially to the elder ones, uh, you always should be polite and respectful.

✓ Yes, of course it's always a moral thing to do in Chinese culture, and especially toward the elders, you should always be polite and respectful.

Original has word order and modal placement errors and awkward noun phrase 'elder ones'. 'You always should be' places adverb incorrectly; correct is 'you should always be' (Third person singular issue ID 2 and Incorrect adverb placement ID 20). Also 'elder ones' is nonstandard; use 'elders' or 'older people', and 'toward' or 'to' is more natural (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11). Suggestion: place adverbs after auxiliary verbs and use common collocations like 'toward the elders'.

× Umm, because that uh, was what we taught in school.

✓ Umm, because that was what we were taught in school.

The passive idea requires past passive 'were taught' rather than active past 'taught' when the subject 'we' received the teaching (Past tense issue ID 5 and Incorrect passive voice ID 21). 'Was what we taught' implies 'that taught others' which is incorrect. Suggestion: use passive 'were taught' to show that 'we' were the recipients of teaching.