Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “I learned politeness mainly from my parents.”), avoid filler words, use correct vocabulary (e.g., “politeness,” “customary,” “greet”), and give one or two specific examples with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: I learned politeness mainly from my parents. For example, they taught me to bow and use polite language when meeting relatives, such as my grandparents and uncles. They also corrected me if I spoke too loudly, so I learned to be respectful in family and public situations.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “polite,” “good impression,” “build relationships”). Give one clear reason and a short example, use linking words like “because” or “for example,” and avoid hesitations. Keep the response concise (1–3 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps you make a good first impression and build lasting relationships. For example, saying “please” and “thank you” often makes people more willing to help you.

× Umm, here in Japan, the pointless is kind of known for us.

✓ Umm, here in Japan, politeness is something we are taught.

The student used the incorrect noun 'pointless' instead of 'politeness' and an awkward structure 'known for us'. This is a vocabulary and sentence structure error (mapped to 'Sentence structure errors' and 'Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns'). Suggest using the correct noun 'politeness' and a natural collocation 'taught' or 'valued' to express the idea clearly. Example improvement: 'politeness is something we are taught.'

× So every time my parents teach me, uh, brightness, even when we met some, uh, relatives such as grandmother and grandfather and uncle.

✓ So my parents always taught me this, even when we met relatives such as my grandmother, grandfather, and uncles.

Errors: 'teach me, uh, brightness' uses the wrong word 'brightness' and present tense 'teach' conflicts with past context 'every time... we met'. Also 'met' is past tense but mixed with present. This is a 'Past tense issue' and 'Incorrect word choice'. Use past tense 'taught' and correct noun 'this' or 'politeness'; make plural 'uncles' and add possessive 'my' for relatives. Suggest: 'So my parents always taught me this, even when we met relatives such as my grandmother, grandfather, and uncles.'

× Yeah, I believe being poised is very important to, umm, make connection with someone.

✓ Yeah, I believe being polite is very important to make a connection with someone.

The student used 'poised' (wrong adjective) and omitted the article before 'connection'. This is 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' and 'Article errors'. Use 'polite' instead of 'poised' and include 'a' before 'connection'. Also keep infinitive 'to make' as written. Suggest: 'being polite is very important to make a connection with someone.'

× It's make someone you meet get the impo impression on you and, uh, keep the connection more effective for us.

✓ It helps the people you meet form a good impression of you and keeps the connection stronger.

Multiple issues: 'It's make' is incorrect verb form (should be 'it helps' or 'it makes' — subject-verb agreement and verb form), 'impo' is a fragment of 'important' or 'good' and 'impression on you' is an awkward preposition use; 'keep the connection more effective for us' is unnatural. This maps to 'Third person singular issue', 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs', and 'Incorrect use of prepositions'. Use 'helps' + object 'the people you meet' + verb 'form' + preposition 'of', and replace 'keep... more effective' with 'keeps the connection stronger'. Suggest: 'It helps the people you meet form a good impression of you and keeps the connection stronger.'