Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief, specific supporting details connected with linking words. Fix grammar (verb agreement, articles) and remove hesitations. Use concrete examples (who taught you, a specific situation) to make the answer vivid. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my mother showed me how to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher praised students who used respectful language, which encouraged me to copy their behaviour. Also, I spent time with well-mannered classmates, which helped me develop polite habits.

Sugestão: Give a direct opening sentence stating your view, then add two clear reasons with linking words and a short concrete example. Improve cohesion by using linking words such as “first,” “for example,” and “as a result.” Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences; use precise vocabulary (e.g., respectful, communicate, build trust). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe being polite is essential because it helps you communicate effectively and build mutual respect. For example, if you ask for something politely at work or school, people are more willing to help, and this creates a friendly atmosphere. As a result, polite behaviour often leads to better relationships and cooperation.

× I think the best thing I did was just to listen to elders and do what they says in a good way.

✓ I think the best thing I did was just to listen to elders and do what they say in a good way.

The verb 'say' must agree with the plural subject 'elders'; use base form 'say' after 'do' (do + base verb). Also 'do what they say' is the correct sequence; keep verbs consistent.

× And of course to reflect what they have they say or they say during that time on the actual life that I had.

✓ And of course to reflect what they said during that time in my actual life.

Pronoun and verb forms are mixed and redundant ('they have they say or they say'). Use past tense 'said' to match 'during that time' and replace 'the actual life that I had' with natural 'my actual life'. Also simplify pronoun use.

× And the other thing that I did to be polite was.

✓ Another thing I did to be polite was spend time with people who behaved well.

The original is a sentence fragment ending with 'was.' Complete the clause by stating what followed; combine with the next idea to form a full sentence.

× Chances to to be with people or other children who are good.

✓ I had chances to be with people or other children who were good.

The fragment lacked a subject and correct verb form. Use 'had chances' plus infinitive 'to be' and past tense 'were' to match narrative past timeframe. Also remove duplicate 'to'.

× So if I find the bad person a bad child, I always run away from that.

✓ So if I found a bad child, I always ran away from them.

Narration is in past habitual context; use past 'found.' Also 'person a bad child' is awkward—use 'a bad child.' Use 'them' as a gender-neutral object pronoun. 'Run away from them' is natural.

× Yes, being polite is very important really, because if you use good language you can talk to anyone and everyone can respect you and you can respect them too.

✓ Yes, being polite is really important, because if you use polite language you can talk to anyone, and everyone will respect you and you can respect them too.

Word order: place 'really' before 'important.' 'Good language' is better as 'polite language.' Use future/modal consistency: 'everyone will respect you' or 'can respect you'—'will' is clearer for result. Added commas for clarity.

× So for example also when you are using good language which is more respectful, you can ask things to people and people can.

✓ For example, when you use polite language, which is more respectful, you can ask people for things and they will respond positively.

Original ends abruptly ('and people can.'). Complete the thought: specify what people can do (respond positively). Use 'ask people for things' instead of 'ask things to people.' Maintain tense consistency and clear object placement.

× And in a positive way.

✓ This creates a positive interaction.

Fragment 'And in a positive way.' should be integrated into a full sentence that explains the effect. 'This creates a positive interaction' clearly states the outcome.

× And that of course creates a good environment between you and and those on those partners that you speak with.

✓ And that, of course, creates a good environment between you and the partners you speak with.

There are repeated words ('and and', 'on those') and awkward phrasing. Use 'the partners you speak with' or 'those you speak with.' Add commas around 'of course' for clarity.