Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid hesitation and small grammar errors (e.g., "the main" → "the mail carrier" or "the neighbours").

Exemplo: When I was a child, my mother taught me how to be polite. For example, she encouraged me to help elderly neighbors and always say thank you to the mail carrier. As a result, these habits shaped my manners and made me more considerate of others.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion sentence then support it with two specific reasons linked logically. Reduce filler words (uh) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "reputation" instead of "profile").

Exemplo: Yes, I believe politeness is essential. Firstly, it improves social interactions because polite behavior helps people communicate more respectfully. Secondly, it enhances your reputation, which can open up opportunities at work and in your community.

× As a child, mom usually taught me all the different examples of being polite, one of which was helping out elderly and saying thank you to the main, uh to the neighbors.

✓ As a child, my mom usually taught me many examples of being polite, one of which was helping elderly people and saying thank you to the neighbors.

Errors: missing possessive 'my' before mom (pronoun use/article), 'all the different' is wordy so replaced with 'many' (word choice), 'helping out elderly' is missing 'people' after 'elderly' (noun usage), 'the main, uh to the neighbors' is incorrect and confusing; likely intended 'the neighbors'. Suggestions: use 'my mom' for clarity, use 'many examples' to sound natural, include 'people' after 'elderly' or use 'elderly people', and replace the garbled phrase with 'the neighbors'. Ensure prepositions are used correctly (no extra 'to').

× This has helped me shape my manners and become a better person in general.

✓ This helped me shape my manners and become a better person in general.

The original uses present perfect 'has helped' while the context refers to past teaching in childhood; simple past 'helped' is more consistent. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame described (past events -> simple past).

× Yes, definitely. I think being polite is very important and very much needed for the future, Uh, because respect, uh, can impact social interactions with other people and uh, can impact your profile for more people.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think being polite is very important and necessary for the future because respect can affect social interactions and influence how others perceive you.

Problems: 'very much needed for the future' is awkward (word choice), repetitive 'can impact' used twice (redundancy), 'your profile for more people' is unclear. Suggestions: replace with 'necessary for the future', use a single verb 'affect' or 'influence' to avoid repetition, and clarify 'influence how others perceive you' for natural expression.