Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 你直接回答了问题，也提供了具体经历，但句子较长，出现多处停顿和不自然的表达，如“draw on six squares on paper”和“paper model TNT”。结尾的“but I thought it was so”没有说完。建议用更准确的词描述正方体展开图，并用完整句子说明失败后的感受。

Exemplo: Yes. In primary school, I once drew a cube net on paper, cut it out, and folded it into a model of TNT. I even tried to sell it to my classmates, but nobody bought one. I still remember it because I thought the idea was funny.

Sugestão: 回答提到了用纸做手工，但没有直接说明你最喜欢做什么；“many expansion of three-dimensional objects”和“make a graft”表达不准确，且填充词较多。建议先明确说喜欢制作立体纸模型，再用“展开图”“剪下来”“粘起来”等具体步骤展开。

Exemplo: As a child, I liked making three-dimensional paper models. I would draw a net of a simple object, such as a cube, and then cut it out and glue the sides together. It was fun to see a flat piece of paper turn into something solid.

Sugestão: 你表达了偏好电子通信的观点，但“letters was have”和“have never wrote”有明显语法错误；“widchets”也不是合适的词。建议直接回答是否写信，并用“handwritten letters”“messages”以及一个清楚的理由来组织答案。

Exemplo: No, I don’t write physical letters. I’ve never really needed to, because emails and messaging apps are much faster and more convenient. I usually use them to keep in touch with friends.

Sugestão: 你给出了自己的观察和具体的平台例子，但开头的“There are”指代不清，而且“writing any paper letters”没有准确回应“保存手写信”。“I'm QQ and WeChat”也应改成“use QQ and WeChat”。建议先回答人们是否会保存，再补充有些人可能会珍藏有纪念意义的信。

Exemplo: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they have sentimental value. However, most people I know communicate through apps like QQ and WeChat instead. So, keeping letters is probably less common than it used to be.

Sugestão: 回答内容切题，并通过过去和现在的对比提供了细节。表达中有较多填充词；“electronic device”应使用复数或加冠词，而且“take notes on something that I want to record every time”不够自然。建议简化句子，说明现在通常用平板记笔记。

Exemplo: I used to carry a pen and some paper, but I don’t usually do that now. I take my iPad and Apple Pencil instead, so I can jot down reminders or ideas whenever I need to. It’s more convenient for me.

× I tried to draw on six squares on paper.

✓ I tried to draw six squares on paper.

“draw”后面直接接所画的内容，不需要在“six squares”前加“on”。可以说“draw something on paper”，其中“on paper”表示在纸上。

× I was familiar with many expansion of three-dimensional objects.

✓ I was familiar with many expansions of three-dimensional objects.

“many”后面要接可数名词复数，因此“expansion”应改为“expansions”。建议检查“many、few、several”等数量词后面的名词是否用了复数形式。

× Paper seemed to be something that can be used to make crafts.

✓ Paper seemed to be something that could be used to make crafts.

这句话描述的是过去的想法（“seemed”），后面的情态动词也应与过去语境协调，因此将“can”改为“could”。

× And so that I can draw several faces and glue them to make a craft.

✓ So I could draw several faces and glue them to make a craft.

这里讲的是小时候能够做的事情，应使用过去形式“could”，而不是“can”。此外，“so that”后通常接目的从句；此处表达结果，用“so”更自然。

× I don't think physical letters was have any useful aspects nowadays.

✓ I don't think physical letters have any useful aspects nowadays.

主语“physical letters”是复数，谓语应使用“have”。原句中的“was have”不能连用；表达现在的情况时，直接用“have”即可。

× I have never wrote them.

✓ I have never written them.

现在完成时的结构是“have/has + 过去分词”。“write”的过去分词是“written”，不是“wrote”（过去式）。

× I prefer sending emails or sending widchets so that it can send faster.

✓ I prefer sending emails or sending widchets so that they can be sent faster.

前面提到的是复数事物，因此应使用复数代词“they”，不能用单数“it”。选择代词时，要确保它与所指名词的单复数一致。

× I prefer sending emails or sending widchets so that it can send faster.

✓ I prefer sending emails or sending widchets so that they can be sent faster.

这里表达的是这些内容“被发送得更快”，所以应使用被动语态“can be sent”，而不是主动语态“can send”。被动语态的结构是“be + 过去分词”。

× For example, I'm QQ and WeChat.

✓ For example, I use QQ and WeChat.

“I’m QQ and WeChat”把主语和平台名称直接用系动词连接，句意不成立。要表达使用这些平台，应使用动词“use”，构成完整的主谓宾结构。

× I did not have electronic device at that time.

✓ I did not have an electronic device at that time.

“device”是单数可数名词，前面需要冠词。“electronic”以元音音素开头，因此使用“an”，而不是“a”。