Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 「paper craft」の質問に対して、最初の文で具体的な作品を明確に答えられている点はよいですが、“make clay using paper” は不自然で、paper clay などの表現が必要です。また、“Then I was literally overseas to visit” は文脈に合わず、意味が伝わりません。祖父から作り方を教わったという具体的な情報を活かし、最後に作品を作った結果や感想を加えましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, I used to make paper clay when I was a child. My grandfather taught me how to make it, and we often made small figures together. I really enjoyed it because it was creative and inexpensive.

Sugestão: “double on the pictures” と “my mom or teachers spoke” は意味が不明確なので、紙で何をしていたのかを正確な動詞で説明しましょう。例えば、“draw pictures” や “colour pictures” が適切です。まず好みを直接答え、その後に使った色や、家族・先生から褒められた経験を linking word でつなげると、自然で具体的な回答になります。

Exemplo: As a child, I liked drawing and colouring pictures on paper. I used bright colours, especially blue and yellow, because they made my pictures look cheerful. My mother and teachers often praised my drawings, so I felt proud of them.

Sugestão: “No” と答えた後に理由を述べる構成はよいですが、“physical theaters” は質問と反対の意味に聞こえ、“physical letters” または “handwritten letters” が必要です。また、“using errors advantage tooling” は不自然で意味が伝わりません。スマートフォンやメールの便利さを、“faster” や “more convenient” などの適切な語で説明し、冗長な表現を避けましょう。

Exemplo: No, I rarely write physical letters anymore. These days, I usually send emails or messages on my smartphone because they are much faster and more convenient. However, I sometimes write a handwritten card for a birthday or a special occasion.

Sugestão: 意見を述べようとしている点はよいですが、“handle light litters” と “sick to electronic letters” は意味が伝わらず、“keep handwritten letters” と “prefer electronic messages” などに置き換える必要があります。また、“today” の繰り返しや “most of people” の誤りを避けましょう。手書きの手紙を保管する人もいるが、多くの人は電子メッセージを使うという対比を、具体的な理由とともに明確に述べてください。

Exemplo: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially letters from family members or close friends. They may value them as personal memories and keep them in a box. However, most people now prefer electronic messages because they are quicker and easier to store.

Sugestão: “No” と答えた後にスマートフォンを使う理由を説明しようとしていますが、“carry a land,” “smart horn,” “care unlined” など、多くの表現が質問の意味に合っていません。現在の習慣には現在形を使い、“I don’t carry paper and pens” と答えましょう。紙とペンの代わりにスマートフォンでメモを取るという内容を、短く明確に説明してください。

Exemplo: No, I usually don’t carry paper and pens when I go out. I use my smartphone to take notes, check my schedule, and make quick reminders. It is more convenient because I always have it with me.

× Yes, I used to make clay using paper when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to make clay from paper when I was a child.

The preposition from is used to indicate the material or substance used to make something. Using paper is understandable, but make clay from paper is more grammatically precise.

× Then I was literally overseas to visit.

✓ Then I went overseas to visit my relatives.

The sentence describes a completed event in the past, so the past-tense verb went is needed. Was overseas does not correctly express the action of traveling overseas.

× When I was a child, I really liked to double on the pictures with many colours.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked drawing on pictures with many colours.

After liked, both to draw and drawing can be used, but liked drawing is natural when describing a regular childhood activity. The verb double is incorrect in this context; draw means to make pictures or marks.

× Then I'm really proud my mom or teachers spoke.

✓ Then I was really proud when my mother or teachers praised me.

The answer refers to a past childhood experience, so am must change to was. The past-tense verb praised is also needed for an action that happened in the past.

× No, I really like physical theaters because these days we have advanced technology like smartphones and applications that I can email swiftly.

✓ No, I do not really like physical letters because these days we have advanced technology, such as smartphones and applications that allow me to send emails quickly.

The relative clause applications that I can email is incorrectly structured because people send emails using applications; they do not email the applications. The structure applications that allow me to send emails is grammatically correct.

× So using errors advantage tooling it's such easy.

✓ So, using this technology is much easier.

Using this technology is a gerund phrase functioning as the subject of the sentence. The phrase such easy is incorrect because easy is an adjective; much easier is the appropriate comparative form in this context.

× From my perspective, or the generalization still do handle light litters even today today, but most of people are already sick to electronic letters.

✓ From my perspective, people in general still handle handwritten letters even today, but most people have already switched to electronic letters.

Most people is correct; most of people is not normally used without a determiner such as the or these. The phrase people in general is also the correct structure for making a general statement.

× No, I did not carry a land with me because I literally used them for now.

✓ No, I do not carry a pen with me because I use my smartphone now.

The question asks about a current habit, so the present tense do not carry and use is required. The phrase for now does not fit this sentence as naturally as now.

× No, I did not carry a land with me because I literally used them for now.

✓ No, I do not carry a pen with me because I use my smartphone now.

Pen is singular, so it must be referred to with the singular pronoun it, not the plural pronoun them. In the corrected sentence, the pronoun is avoided by repeating smartphone, which makes the meaning clearer.

× Then I think my smart horn is already covered so it was raw.

✓ Also, I think my smartphone is enough, so I do not need to carry paper and pens.

The answer describes the student's current situation, so the present-tense form do not need is appropriate. The past-tense form was does not match the present meaning.

× So I always care unlined my smartphones instead.

✓ So I always carry only my smartphone instead.

The adverb only should be placed before the noun phrase it modifies, my smartphone. This clearly means that the speaker carries a smartphone and nothing else.