Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 「I hope」はこの質問への回答として不自然なので、「Yes, I have」または「Yes, I did」を使いましょう。また、「I really I used to」の重複を避け、「When I was a child, I used to...」のように正確に述べてください。2文目では、動物を作ったことと、それが楽しかった理由をリンクワード「because」でつなぐと、より自然で効果的です。

Exemplo: Yes, I have. When I was a child, I used to make paper animals such as dogs and horses. I enjoyed it because it was a fun and creative way to spend my free time.

Sugestão: 質問には直接答えられていますが、「aircrust」はおそらく「aircraft」の誤りで、「make aircraft out of paper」または「make paper airplanes」が自然です。また、2つの活動を「I also」でつなぐだけでなく、どちらが好きだったか、なぜ好きだったかを具体的に加えると内容が充実します。

Exemplo: When I was a child, I enjoyed making paper animals, especially dogs and horses. I also liked making paper airplanes because I could decorate them and see how far they could fly.

Sugestão: 「Not at all luxury」は意味が伝わらないため、「Not really」または「No, I don't」と答えましょう。「SNS apps」は「messaging apps」、「line and instagrams」は「LINE and Instagram」のように表現します。さらに、「It is a quick and easy way to...」という正しい文の形を使い、手紙を書かない理由を明確に説明してください。

Exemplo: No, I don't write physical letters very often. I prefer using messaging apps such as LINE and Instagram because they are much quicker and more convenient. I can send photos and get an immediate reply from my friends.

Sugestão: 最初の意見は明確ですが、「handwriting letter」は「handwritten letters」、「their feeling」は「their feelings」とする必要があります。「I've heard」だけでなく、手書きの手紙を保管する具体的な理由や例を加えると、より説得力が増します。また、理由の前に「because」を置き、文を適切に区切ってください。

Exemplo: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters. They may value them because handwritten messages can express feelings more sincerely than digital messages. For example, people often keep letters from close friends or family members as special memories.

Sugestão: 直接的な回答に加えて、持ち物と理由が具体的に説明されており、基本構成は良好です。「notes」は意味が曖昧なので「notebooks」または「a notebook」、「pens, notes and textbooks」は「a few pens, a notebook, and my textbooks」のようにすると自然です。最後の「So」は前文と重複するため、「That is why...」に置き換えるか、削除するとより洗練されます。

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I usually carry a few pens, a notebook, and my English textbooks because I often study at a café. These items are useful for taking notes and reviewing vocabulary while I am there.

× Oh, yes, I hope.

✓ Oh, yes, I have.

The question uses the present perfect form, “Have you made...?”, so the answer should use “I have,” not “I hope.” Use “Yes, I have” to confirm a present-perfect experience.

× When I was a kid, I really I used to make paper animals such as dogs and horses it was a fun and creative way to spend my time.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to make paper animals such as dogs and horses. It was a fun and creative way to spend my time.

The subject “I” is repeated unnecessarily, and two independent clauses are joined without punctuation. Remove the second “I” and separate the clauses with a full stop.

× When I was a child, I really enjoyed making paper animals like dogs and horses and I also liked making aircrust with papers.

✓ When I was a child, I really enjoyed making paper animals like dogs and horses, and I also liked making aircrust with paper.

“Paper” is generally an uncountable noun when referring to the material, so it should not normally be made plural. Use “paper,” not “papers,” in this context.

× Not at all luxury, I prefer using SNS apps such as line and instagrams when I send a message to my friends it very easy and quick way.

✓ Not at all. I prefer using SNS apps such as Line and Instagram. When I send a message to my friends, it is a very easy and quick way to communicate.

“Luxury” is a noun and cannot be used here as an adverb. Use “Not at all” as the response, and use “easy” and “quick” as adjectives to describe “way.”

× Not at all luxury, I prefer using SNS apps such as line and instagrams when I send a message to my friends it very easy and quick way.

✓ Not at all. I prefer using SNS apps such as Line and Instagram. When I send a message to my friends, it is a very easy and quick way to communicate.

The clause “it very easy and quick way” is missing the verb “is” and the article “a.” A complete structure is “it is a very easy and quick way to communicate.”

× Not at all luxury, I prefer using SNS apps such as line and instagrams when I send a message to my friends it very easy and quick way.

✓ Not at all. I prefer using SNS apps such as Line and Instagram. When I send a message to my friends, it is a very easy and quick way to communicate.

Several clauses are joined without appropriate punctuation, making the sentence difficult to follow. Separate the main ideas into sentences and use a comma after the introductory “When” clause.

× Yes they do. I've heard that some people still prefer handwriting letter because they can express their feeling more sincerely.

✓ Yes, they do. I've heard that some people still prefer writing letters by hand because they can express their feelings more sincerely.

“Letters” and “feelings” should be plural because the sentence refers to letters and emotions in general. Add the plural ending “-s” to both nouns.

× Yes they do. I've heard that some people still prefer handwriting letter because they can express their feeling more sincerely.

✓ Yes, they do. I've heard that some people still prefer writing letters by hand because they can express their feelings more sincerely.

“Letter” is a singular countable noun, so it would need an article such as “a.” Since the sentence discusses letters in general, the natural correction is to use the plural form “letters,” which does not require an article.

× Yes they do. I've heard that some people still prefer handwriting letter because they can express their feeling more sincerely.

✓ Yes, they do. I've heard that some people still prefer writing letters by hand because they can express their feelings more sincerely.

A comma is needed after “Yes” to separate the response from the main clause. The phrase “writing letters by hand” is also a clearer and more natural sentence structure.