Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体例子，但时态和搭配错误较多。讲过去的经历时，应使用过去时，例如“used to fold”和“used to draw”；“fold in a lot of shapes”应改为“fold paper into different shapes”；“draw on the paper”可以更自然地说成“draw pictures on it”。建议用“直接回答+具体例子+感受”的结构，并避免重复使用“always”。

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I used to fold paper into different shapes, such as rabbits and cats. I also enjoyed drawing pictures on it because it was a fun and creative way to spend my free time.

Sugestão: 回答包含重复内容，且没有清楚说明你喜欢做什么。“when I was a child”重复了两次，应保留一次；过去经历要用过去时，如“used”和“made”。“My grandfather always make kids, use paper with me at the spring”表达不清，可以改为“My grandfather used to make paper crafts with me in spring”。建议先直接回答喜欢的活动，再补充祖父陪伴你的细节和原因。

Exemplo: I liked making simple paper crafts, especially animals and flowers. My grandfather used to make them with me in spring, so I really enjoyed this activity. It was a relaxing way for us to spend time together.

Sugestão: 回答没有明确说明现在是否仍然写信，开头应直接回答“Yes, I do”或“No, I don’t”。“physical light letters”应为“physical letters”或“handwritten letters”；谈过去时应使用“didn’t know”和“wrote down the things”。同时，“this things”应改为“the things”。建议清楚区分过去和现在，并用一个具体原因解释写信的好处。

Exemplo: No, I don’t write physical letters very often now. When I was in secondary school, however, I used to write handwritten letters to my parents because I sometimes found it difficult to talk to them directly. Writing helped me express my feelings more clearly.

Sugestão: 回答观点基本相关，但句子没有完整结束，且表达不够自然。“a little people”应改为“only a few people”；“hardwriting letters”应为“handwritten letters”；“at the mountain”可以说“in mountainous areas”，“at the countryside”应为“in the countryside”。建议使用“虽然……但是……”的逻辑连接，并补充现代人更常使用短信或电子邮件这一对比。

Exemplo: Yes, but only a few people still keep handwritten letters, especially older people or those living in rural areas. However, most people now prefer text messages and emails because they are faster and more convenient. Some people still keep old letters because they have sentimental value.

Sugestão: 回答能够进行场景对比，但句子没有完整结束，且条件句和情态表达错误较多。“if I was go”应改为“if I go”；“I maybe will carry”应改为“ I might carry”；“if I will go”应改为“if I go”。建议先直接回答，再分别说明学习场景和社交场景，并在结尾完整总结。

Exemplo: It depends on where I’m going. If I’m going to school or studying, I usually carry a pen and some paper in case I need to take notes. However, I don’t take them when I’m going to a party or meeting friends because I probably won’t use them.

× Yes, when I was a child, I always use paper to fold in a lot of shapes like rabbits or cats and I also always draw on the paper.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I always used paper to fold a lot of shapes like rabbits or cats, and I also always drew on paper.

句子描述的是童年时期的习惯，因此应使用一般过去时。use 应改为 used，draw 应改为 drew。

× Yes, when I was a child, I always use paper to fold in a lot of shapes like rabbits or cats and I also always draw on the paper.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I always used paper to fold it into a lot of shapes like rabbits or cats, and I also always drew on paper.

表示“把纸折成某种形状”时，应使用 fold something into a shape，而不是 fold in。paper 表示纸这种不可数材料时，通常说 draw on paper，不需要 the。

× When I was a child I always use paper to make the paper craft when I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I always used paper to make paper crafts.

when I was a child 表明是在过去发生的事情，所以 use 应改为 used。paper crafts 表示多种纸艺作品，比单数形式更合适。

× When I was a child I always use paper to make the paper craft when I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I always used paper to make paper crafts.

这里谈论的是一般性的纸艺作品，不是某一个特定作品，因此 craft 应使用复数 crafts。

× My grandfather always make kids, use paper with me at the spring.

✓ My grandfather always made paper crafts with me in the spring.

原句中的 make kids 结构不完整且意思不清楚。表达“和我一起制作纸艺”时，应使用 make paper crafts with me。

× My grandfather always make kids, use paper with me at the spring.

✓ My grandfather always made paper crafts with me in the spring.

句子描述过去的童年经历，所以 make 应改为过去式 made。

× My grandfather always make kids, use paper with me at the spring.

✓ My grandfather always made paper crafts with me in the spring.

表示“在春天”通常使用 in the spring，而不是 at the spring。

× Actually at when I was at secondary school I used to write physical light letters because sometimes I don't know how to talk with my parents, but I will write down this things I want to talk with them.

✓ Actually, when I was in secondary school, I used to write physical letters because sometimes I didn’t know how to talk to my parents, but I would write down the things I wanted to talk about with them.

when 前面不需要 at。表示“在学校阶段”时，通常说 in secondary school。表达“和某人交谈”时，talk to 比 talk with 更自然；表达“谈论某事”时，应使用 talk about something。

× Actually at when I was at secondary school I used to write physical light letters because sometimes I don't know how to talk with my parents, but I will write down this things I want to talk with them.

✓ Actually, when I was in secondary school, I used to write physical letters because sometimes I didn’t know how to talk to my parents, but I would write down the things I wanted to talk about with them.

整段讲的是中学时期的经历，因此 know 应改为 knew，want 应改为 wanted。will 在过去语境中应改为 would。

× Actually at when I was at secondary school I used to write physical light letters because sometimes I don't know how to talk with my parents, but I will write down this things I want to talk with them.

✓ Actually, when I was in secondary school, I used to write physical letters because sometimes I didn’t know how to talk to my parents, but I would write down these things I wanted to talk about with them.

things 是复数名词，前面的指示词应使用复数形式 these，不能使用单数形式 this。

× Maybe it's a better way.

✓ Maybe it was a better way.

前文描述的是过去在中学时写信的经历，因此 be 动词应使用过去式 was。

× I think a little people will use the hardwriting letters maybe some older people or some people at the mountain or at the countryside I mean they maybe use the letters but now many people

✓ I think few people still use handwritten letters, perhaps some older people or people in the mountains or in the countryside.

people 是可数名词复数，不能用表示不可数名词的 a little 修饰。表示“很少的人”应使用 few people。

× I think a little people will use the hardwriting letters maybe some older people or some people at the mountain or at the countryside I mean they maybe use the letters but now many people

✓ I think few people still use handwritten letters, perhaps some older people or people in the mountains or in the countryside.

表示“手写的信”应使用 handwritten。handwritten 是 write 的过去分词，可用作形容词；hardwriting 不是正确的表达。

× I think a little people will use the hardwriting letters maybe some older people or some people at the mountain or at the countryside I mean they maybe use the letters but now many people

✓ I think few people still use handwritten letters, perhaps some older people or people in the mountains or in the countryside.

表示“在山区”和“在乡下”时，通常使用 in the mountains 和 in the countryside，而不是 at the mountain 或 at the countryside。

× I mean they maybe use the letters but now many people

✓ I mean, maybe they still use letters, but now many people use digital messages.

maybe 通常放在句首，或放在情态动词前。they maybe use 的副词位置不自然，应改为 maybe they use。原句还没有完整谓语，因此补充了 use digital messages，使句子完整。

× I think a little people will use the hardwriting letters maybe some older people or some people at the mountain or at the countryside I mean they maybe use the letters but now many people

✓ I think few people still use handwritten letters, perhaps some older people or people in the mountains or in the countryside. I mean, maybe they still use letters, but now many people use digital messages.

原句包含多个意思，但缺少标点和完整的谓语，形成了句子连接不清和句子残缺。应拆分成两个完整句子，并为每个句子提供清楚的主语和谓语。

× When I go out, if I was go to the school or maybe I should study, I maybe will carry paper and pens, but if I will I will go to a party or I will play with my friends I will not

✓ When I go out, if I go to school or need to study, I will probably carry paper and pens, but if I go to a party or play with my friends, I won’t.

在含有 if 的第一类条件句中，if 从句通常使用一般现在时，不能说 if I was go 或 if I will go。应使用 if I go。

× When I go out, if I was go to the school or maybe I should study, I maybe will carry paper and pens, but if I will I will go to a party or I will play with my friends I will not

✓ When I go out, if I go to school or need to study, I will probably carry paper and pens, but if I go to a party or play with my friends, I won’t.

表示一般意义上的“去上学”时，应说 go to school，不使用 the。go to the school 通常表示去某一所特定的学校。

× When I go out, if I was go to the school or maybe I should study, I maybe will carry paper and pens, but if I will I will go to a party or I will play with my friends I will not

✓ When I go out, if I go to school or need to study, I will probably carry paper and pens, but if I go to a party or play with my friends, I won’t.

表达“可能会带纸和笔”时，will maybe 语法上可以理解，但这里使用 will probably 更自然。表达否定结果时，I will not 后面需要完整表达，缩写为 I won’t 更简洁。

× When I go out, if I was go to the school or maybe I should study, I maybe will carry paper and pens, but if I will I will go to a party or I will play with my friends I will not

✓ When I go out, if I go to school or need to study, I will probably carry paper and pens, but if I go to a party or play with my friends, I won’t.

频率或可能性副词通常放在情态动词或助动词之后、主要动词之前。I maybe will carry 的位置不自然，建议改为 I will probably carry。

× When I go out, if I was go to the school or maybe I should study, I maybe will carry paper and pens, but if I will I will go to a party or I will play with my friends I will not

✓ When I go out, if I go to school or need to study, I will probably carry paper and pens, but if I go to a party or play with my friends, I won’t.

原句有多个 if 从句和主句连续连接，缺少必要的谓语、标点和完整结构。应在两个条件从句之间加逗号，并避免重复使用 I will，使句子更清楚。