Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 「Now, yes I hope」は不自然なので、「Yes, I did, especially when I was in elementary school」のように直接答えましょう。「dog, holes no animals」は意味が不明確です。作ったものを正確に述べ、「such as」を使って具体例を加えてください。また、過去の習慣には過去形を使い、文を2〜3文に整理すると明瞭になります。

Exemplo: Yes, I did, especially when I was in elementary school. I used to make simple paper animals, such as dogs and horses. It was a fun and creative way to spend my free time.

Sugestão: 質問に対して「I enjoyed making...」と直接答えられていますが、同じ語の繰り返しや言い直しを減らしましょう。「dog or holes」は「dogs or horses」など、正確な名詞を使ってください。最後の文が未完成なので、追加する場合は具体的な理由や結果まで述べましょう。

Exemplo: When I was a child, I enjoyed making paper animals, especially dogs and horses. I also liked decorating them with colored pencils. It was enjoyable because I could create different designs by myself.

Sugestão: 「Yes, I am」ではなく「Yes, I do」と答えます。「physical writer」は「physical letters」または「handwritten letters」が適切です。理由はよく述べられていますが、「show attitude to person」は不自然なので、「express my feelings to someone」のように言い換えましょう。繰り返しを避け、理由を2つまで簡潔にまとめてください。

Exemplo: Yes, I do, although I do it less often than I used to. I like writing handwritten letters because they feel more personal and memorable. They also allow me to express my feelings more sincerely.

Sugestão: 最初に「Yes, some people do, but...」のように、質問へ直接答えてから対比を示しましょう。「write physical writer」は「write or keep handwritten letters」、「bust」は「but」、「sending email graduate」は「sending emails is much more common」と表現できます。手書きの手紙とメールの普及を比較し、理由や具体例を1つ加えると内容が明確になります。

Exemplo: Some people still keep handwritten letters, especially those with sentimental value. However, sending emails and messages is much more common because it is faster and more convenient. People may keep old letters from family members or close friends as special memories.

Sugestão: 「Yes, I do」と明確に答えられています。言い直しや「I'm」の繰り返しを減らし、「pens」を正確に発音・使用してください。「because... then... Then...」の連続は、「since」や「so」を使って1〜2文にまとめると自然です。カフェで英語を勉強するという具体的な理由は良いので、持ち物を正確に列挙しましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I usually carry a couple of pens, some paper, and my English textbook because I study at a café almost every day. I use them to take notes and review new vocabulary.

× Now, yes I hope when I was in elementary school I used to make some craft with paper like dog, holes no animals.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was in elementary school, I used to make some crafts with paper, such as dogs, horses, and other animals.

Craft is a countable noun, so it should be plural after some. The examples should also be plural because the speaker is referring to multiple paper creations.

× Now, yes I hope when I was in elementary school I used to make some craft with paper like dog, holes no animals.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was in elementary school, I used to make some crafts with paper, such as dogs, horses, and other animals.

The original answer combines several ideas without appropriate punctuation or sentence boundaries. Separate the direct answer from the explanation, and use a complete sentence for each main idea.

× Now, yes I hope when I was in elementary school I used to make some craft with paper like dog, holes no animals.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was in elementary school, I used to make some crafts with paper, such as dogs, horses, and other animals.

Use such as to introduce examples clearly. When referring to general examples, plural nouns are more natural than singular nouns without articles.

× Oh when I was a kid I I enjoyed making dog or holes with paper.

✓ Oh, when I was a kid, I enjoyed making dogs or horses out of paper.

The nouns should be plural because the speaker is describing a general activity involving more than one possible creation. Also, out of paper is the natural expression for something made from paper.

× Also I got into making

✓ I also got into making other paper animals.

The original phrase is incomplete because making has no object or completed idea. Add what the speaker made so that the sentence expresses a complete thought.

× Yes, I am. Yes, I do. I like writing physical writer because it's memorable and and I can show attitude to person.

✓ Yes, I do. I like writing physical letters because they are memorable, and I can show my attitude to a person.

The question uses do, so the answer should be Yes, I do rather than Yes, I am. The repeated and should be removed, and the ideas should be joined in one correctly structured sentence.

× Yes, I am. Yes, I do. I like writing physical writer because it's memorable and and I can show attitude to person.

✓ Yes, I do. I like writing physical letters because they are memorable, and I can show my attitude to a person.

Letters is plural, so it requires the plural pronoun they rather than it. Pronouns must agree in number with the nouns they refer to.

× Yes, I am. Yes, I do. I like writing physical writer because it's memorable and and I can show attitude to person.

✓ Yes, I do. I like writing physical letters because they are memorable, and I can show my attitude to a person.

A singular countable noun such as person normally needs an article or another determiner. Use a person here because the person has not been identified previously.

× I think so people tend to write in the write physical writer bust and the sending email graduate is more common.

✓ I think so. People tend to write physical letters, but sending emails is more common.

The original answer contains several ideas joined without clear sentence boundaries. Use a period after I think so and use but to contrast writing letters with sending emails.

× I think so people tend to write in the write physical writer bust and the sending email graduate is more common.

✓ I think so. People tend to write physical letters, but sending emails is more common.

After the conjunction but, the two contrasted ideas should have parallel structures. Sending emails is a gerund phrase functioning as the subject, so it is grammatically parallel to writing physical letters.

× I think so people tend to write in the write physical writer bust and the sending email graduate is more common.

✓ I think so. People tend to write physical letters, but sending emails is more common.

Write physical letters does not require the preposition in. Use write something when referring to the object being written.

× Oh yes I am I yes I do because I'm I'm studying English every day, then I usually go to cafe.

✓ Oh, yes, I do, because I study English every day and usually go to a café.

The answer contains repeated and incorrectly connected clauses. Use Yes, I do to match the question, and join the two habitual activities with and instead of using then inside the same because clause.

× Oh yes I am I yes I do because I'm I'm studying English every day, then I usually go to cafe.

✓ Oh, yes, I do, because I study English every day and usually go to a café.

The simple present is normally used for regular habits with expressions such as every day. I study is therefore more natural than I am studying in this context.

× Oh yes I am I yes I do because I'm I'm studying English every day, then I usually go to cafe.

✓ Oh, yes, I do, because I study English every day and usually go to a café.

Café is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article in this sentence. Use a café when referring to any café rather than a specific one.