Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答有直接回应，也提供了具体例子，但“I'm not a brilliant, I'm a master”表达不自然，且“your genius girl”不符合英语习惯。注意使用正确时态：描述过去经历时用一般过去时，如“made”“sent”“forgot”。建议删掉重复和不必要的夸张表达，并用连接词清楚地说明结果。

Exemplo: Yes, I have. When I was younger, I made a small paper box and sent it to my mother as a gift. She was really impressed, and I felt proud of myself. I haven’t made anything similar for a long time, though.

Sugestão: 回答基本切题，但“use”应改为过去时“used”，“paper”通常不可数，应用“it”而不是“them”，“homework”不可数，不能加“s”。此外，“calculate”在这里不如“do calculations”自然。可以先直接说明喜欢做什么，再补充童年作业的具体内容。

Exemplo: When I was a child, I mainly used paper for writing and doing calculations. I had a lot of homework, so I often wrote vocabulary, sentences, and maths problems on sheets of paper. I didn’t do many creative activities with it, but it was essential for my schoolwork.

Sugestão: 回答没有清楚地表达“是”还是“不是”，而且“To be honestly”和“I saw them already”用法错误。建议直接回答“No, not really”，然后说明大学生活忙碌，因此通常使用即时通讯。避免重复“busy”和“cannot”，并使用自然表达“reply to my friends’ messages”。

Exemplo: No, not really. As a college student, I’m usually very busy, so I normally send messages instead of writing physical letters. In fact, I sometimes don’t even have time to reply to my friends’ messages promptly.

Sugestão: 观点明确，也表达了手写信的情感价值，但句子过长，语法和搭配错误较多。“pay much of time and hard”应改为“spend a lot of time and effort”，“how important you are to someone”更自然，“handwrite”应作形容词“handwritten”，“I will be happiness”应改为“I will be happy”。建议使用“although”连接让步关系，并加入具体情感结果。

Exemplo: Yes, I think many people still keep handwritten letters, even though they take more time and effort to write. A handwritten letter feels personal and shows that someone really cares about you. If I received one from a close friend, I would definitely keep it as a meaningful memory.

Sugestão: 回答直接，但“some papers”应根据语境改为“some paper”或“a small notebook”，“traditional scene”不符合语境，可以说“old-fashioned habit”或“practical habit”。“will play”也不自然，因为你是在描述日常用途，建议使用“can be useful”，并举出具体场合，如记电话号码或写下临时信息。

Exemplo: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. It’s a slightly old-fashioned habit, but they can be useful if I need to write down an address, a phone number, or a quick reminder. I find them especially helpful when my phone runs out of battery.

× Yes of course I'm not a brilliant, I'm a master.

✓ Yes, of course. I'm not just good at crafts; I'm a master.

“Brilliant”是形容词，不能直接和冠词“a”连用表示一个人。可以说“I'm brilliant”，或者使用名词短语，如“I'm a master”。同时，两个完整句子之间需要用句号或分号连接。

× She said, Well, your genius girl. How can I do that?

✓ She said, “Well, you're a genius girl. How can you do that?”

“your”是物主代词，表示“你的”；这里需要使用“you're”，即“you are”。在转述妈妈对学生说的话时，应使用“you”，而不是“I”，因为妈妈是在询问学生是如何做到的。

× But sadly it has been a long time, so I nearly forget it.

✓ But sadly, it has been a long time, so I have nearly forgotten how to make it.

完成时结构是“have/has + 过去分词”，所以“forget”应改为“forgotten”。“forgotten how to make it”比“forgotten it”更清楚地表达“忘记如何制作它”。

× I always use them to calculate and write.

✓ I always used it to calculate and write.

句子谈论的是“小时候”，所以应该使用过去时“used”。“Paper”通常是不可数名词，应该用代词“it”，而不是“them”。

× I always use them to calculate and write.

✓ I always used it to calculate and write.

这里的“them”指代paper，但“paper”通常是不可数名词，因此应使用单数代词“it”。

× When I was a child, I had lots of homeworks, so I have to write words, sentences and figures on it.

✓ When I was a child, I had a lot of homework, so I had to write words, sentences, and figures on it.

“Homework”是不可数名词，没有复数形式，不能说“homeworks”。应使用“a lot of homework”或“lots of homework”。

× When I was a child, I had lots of homeworks, so I have to write words, sentences and figures on it.

✓ When I was a child, I had a lot of homework, so I had to write words, sentences, and figures on it.

因为句子描述的是过去的童年经历，“have to”应改为过去式“had to”。

× To be honestly, I saw them already because as a college student I always very busy.

✓ To be honest, I haven't written any recently because, as a college student, I am always very busy.

固定表达是“To be honest”，其中“honest”是形容词；“honestly”是副词，不能用于这个表达。另外，“busy”前需要系动词“am”。

× To be honestly, I saw them already because as a college student I always very busy.

✓ To be honest, I haven't written any recently because, as a college student, I am always very busy.

“I always very busy”缺少系动词“am”。英语中形容词“busy”不能单独作谓语，必须使用“I am busy”。

× I'm always very busy and even sometimes I cannot cannot return my friend's message in time.

✓ I'm always very busy, and sometimes I cannot even reply to my friend's message in time.

“Even”通常放在情态动词“cannot”之后、主要动词之前，因此应说“cannot even reply”。“Sometimes”放在句首或主语后会更自然。此外，“cannot cannot”是重复错误。

× Yes, of course, though it needs someone to pay much of time and hard, it can show how important you are for someone...

✓ Yes, of course. Although it takes a lot of time and effort, it can show how important you are to someone...

“Time”是不可数名词，但这里不能使用“much of time”；更自然的表达是“a lot of time”。“Hard”是形容词或副词，这里需要表示“努力”的名词“effort”。

× Yes, of course, though it needs someone to pay much of time and hard, it can show how important you are for someone...

✓ Yes, of course. Although it takes a lot of time and effort, it can show how important you are to someone...

表示“对某人来说重要”时，通常使用“important to someone”，而不是“important for someone”。

× ...and if I receive you a hand write letter, I will be happiness.

✓ ...and if I receive a handwritten letter from you, I will be happy.

“Receive”不能直接使用“you”作间接宾语。应说“receive a letter from you”，表示“收到你寄来的信”。

× ...and if I receive you a hand write letter, I will be happiness.

✓ ...and if I receive a handwritten letter from you, I will be happy.

“Handwritten”是“handwrite”的过去分词，作形容词修饰“letter”。“Hand write”不能在这里直接作定语。

× ...and if I receive you a hand write letter, I will be happiness.

✓ ...and if I receive a handwritten letter from you, I will be happy.

“Happiness”是名词，不能放在“will be”后面描述人的感受。这里需要使用形容词“happy”，因此应说“I will be happy”。

× Yes, of course I always take some papers and a pen.

✓ Yes, of course. I always take some paper and a pen.

“Paper”表示书写用纸时通常是不可数名词，因此应说“some paper”，而不是“some papers”。只有在表示不同的文件或论文时，才通常使用“papers”。