Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体经历，但有明显的语法、词汇和表达问题。应使用过去时："When I was young"后面用"made"和"had"；"paper planes"前不需要"the"；"who planes who play further"应改为"whose plane could fly farther"。建议先直接回答，再用一个连接词补充比赛的细节，避免重复使用"often"。

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was young, I often made paper planes with my father. We even had competitions to see whose plane could fly farther, which was a lot of fun.

Sugestão: 回答包含两个活动，但时态应统一为过去时，如"liked"和"made"。"make paper plane"应改为"make paper planes"；"roll them in a little bowl"和"sling shaw"表达不清，可能想表达用纸做小球并用自制弹弓发射。不要重复"by myself"，并使用"Besides"或"Also"连接两个活动。

Exemplo: As a child, I liked making paper planes. Besides that, I made small paper balls and shot them with a homemade slingshot. It was a simple but really enjoyable way to play.

Sugestão: 回答观点明确，但句子结构和词汇需要改进。可以说"No, I don't"，然后用"Nowadays"引出原因；"social apps and other tools like we tech"应改为"social media and messaging apps"；"much easily"应改为"more easily"，"a really hard job"在此语境中不自然，应使用"time-consuming"或"inconvenient"。

Exemplo: No, I don't. Nowadays, social media and messaging apps allow me to keep in touch with people much more easily. Besides, writing physical letters is quite time-consuming and less convenient for me.

Sugestão: 回答直接，并且有观点解释，但"truths"和"fretious"用词错误，"resemble the memories of the others"也不自然。可以使用"despite the popularity of social media"进行对比，用"precious keepsake"表达珍贵的纪念品，用"remind people of special memories"说明原因。

Exemplo: Yes, I think some people still keep them. Despite the popularity of social media, handwritten letters can be precious keepsakes because they remind people of special memories and important relationships.

Sugestão: 回答回答了问题，也提供了替代物，但应使用"an iPad"而不是"a iPad"，并将"to write on to writing on"改为"to write on"。建议用"Instead"清楚地引出转折，并补充iPad的具体用途，使答案更自然有效。

Exemplo: No, I don't. Instead, I usually carry an iPad with me because I can use it to take notes, check my schedule, or write down ideas whenever I need to.

× When I was young, I often made the paper planes with my father and we often have competitions on who planes who play further.

✓ When I was young, I often made paper planes with my father, and we often had competitions to see whose plane could fly farther.

“paper planes”表示泛指的纸飞机，通常不需要使用定冠词“the”。只有在指特定的纸飞机时才使用“the”。

× When I was young, I often made the paper planes with my father and we often have competitions on who planes who play further.

✓ When I was young, I often made paper planes with my father, and we often had competitions to see whose plane could fly farther.

“When I was young”说明是在过去发生的事情，所以“have”应该使用过去式“had”。回答过去经历时，要保持全句的时态一致。

× When I was young, I often made the paper planes with my father and we often have competitions on who planes who play further.

✓ When I was young, I often made paper planes with my father, and we often had competitions to see whose plane could fly farther.

“who planes who play further”结构不完整且不符合英语表达。可以使用“to see whose plane could fly farther”，意思是“看谁的飞机飞得更远”。

× I like to make paper plane and also I like to roll them in a little bowl and shoot it out with a sling shaw that I made by myself myself.

✓ I liked making paper planes, and I also liked rolling them in a little bowl and shooting them out with a slingshot that I made myself.

“paper plane”在这里是泛指多个纸飞机，应使用复数“paper planes”。使用复数后，后面的代词也应与其保持一致。

× I like to make paper plane and also I like to roll them in a little bowl and shoot it out with a sling shaw that I made by myself myself.

✓ I liked making paper planes, and I also liked rolling them in a little bowl and shooting them out with a slingshot that I made myself.

问题问的是“as a child”，指过去的童年经历，所以“like”应改为过去式“liked”。描述过去习惯时，整句话要使用过去时。

× I like to make paper plane and also I like to roll them in a little bowl and shoot it out with a sling shaw that I made by myself myself.

✓ I liked making paper planes, and I also liked rolling them in a little bowl and shooting them out with a slingshot that I made myself.

“like”后面可以接动词不定式，也可以接动名词。为了使并列结构一致，使用“liked making, liked rolling, and shooting”更自然。并列动词应保持相同形式。

× I like to make paper plane and also I like to roll them in a little bowl and shoot it out with a sling shaw that I made by myself myself.

✓ I liked making paper planes, and I also liked rolling them in a little bowl and shooting them out with a slingshot that I made myself.

“paper planes”是复数，所以应使用复数代词“them”，不能在同一指代中使用单数“it”。代词的单复数必须和它所指的名词保持一致。

× I like to make paper plane and also I like to roll them in a little bowl and shoot it out with a sling shaw that I made by myself myself.

✓ I liked making paper planes, and I also liked rolling them in a little bowl and shooting them out with a slingshot that I made myself.

“myself”被重复使用了一次。英语中只需要说“that I made myself”，表示“我自己制作的”。

× No I don't with the social apps and other tools like we tech we can keep in touch with each other much easily.

✓ No, I don't. With social apps and other technological tools, we can keep in touch with each other much more easily.

“like we tech we can”不是正确的英语句子结构。可以改为“With social apps and other technological tools”，后面再接完整句子“we can keep in touch”。

× No I don't with the social apps and other tools like we tech we can keep in touch with each other much easily.

✓ No, I don't. With social apps and other technological tools, we can keep in touch with each other much more easily.

“easily”是副词，修饰“keep in touch”。在“much”后面表示“更容易地”时，应使用比较级“more easily”，不能说“much easily”。

× With so many social apps and truths on the market and in our lives, a handwritten letter is a very fretious treasure for people as they resemble the memories of the others.

✓ With so many social apps and other tools in our lives, a handwritten letter is a very precious treasure because it preserves people's memories.

主语是单数名词“a handwritten letter”，所以不能用复数代词“they”指代它，应使用单数代词“it”。使用代词时，要注意与先行词的单复数保持一致。

× With so many social apps and truths on the market and in our lives, a handwritten letter is a very fretious treasure for people as they resemble the memories of the others.

✓ With so many social apps and other tools in our lives, a handwritten letter is a very precious treasure because it preserves people's memories.

“a handwritten letter”是第三人称单数。如果使用动词“resemble”，应改为“resembles”。本句使用“preserves”时，也要加第三人称单数词尾“-s”。

× No I don't but I will carry a iPad with me when I go out so there's something for me to write on to writing on.

✓ No, I don't, but I carry an iPad with me when I go out, so I have something to write on.

“iPad”以元音音素开头，因此前面的不定冠词应使用“an”，不能使用“a”。判断“a/an”要根据发音，而不是只看单词拼写。

× No I don't but I will carry a iPad with me when I go out so there's something for me to write on to writing on.

✓ No, I don't, but I carry an iPad with me when I go out, so I have something to write on.

问题问的是你平时出门是否携带纸和笔，因此回答日常习惯时应使用一般现在时“carry”，而不是表示将来的“will carry”。

× No I don't but I will carry a iPad with me when I go out so there's something for me to write on to writing on.

✓ No, I don't, but I carry an iPad with me when I go out, so I have something to write on.

“to write on to writing on”出现了重复和错误的结构。表达“有东西可以写”时，使用“something to write on”即可。“to write on”中的“on”不能省略，因为表示在某个表面上书写。