Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答基本切题，但表达不自然。应直接说“I have made...”或“I once made...”，并将“the craft of paper”改为“a paper craft”。可以补充制作过程或送礼对象，使答案更具体。

Exemplo: Yes, I have. I once made a paper gift card for my mother on Mother’s Day. I decorated it with colorful paper and wrote a heartfelt message inside, so she was really happy.

Sugestão: 答案有明确观点，但时态和搭配错误较多。“like”应改为过去式“liked”，“draw the paper”应改为“draw on paper”。避免重复使用“because”和自我更正；可补充具体绘画内容及带来的感受。

Exemplo: When I was a child, I liked drawing on paper, especially pictures of animals and cartoon characters. It helped me relax and made me feel happy because I could use my imagination freely.

Sugestão: 回答过短且第二句含义不清。“the messenger”应改为“messaging apps”，而“treat others”不符合语境。建议先明确否定，再说明通常通过短信或即时通信联系他人，并给出原因。

Exemplo: No, I don’t. I usually use messaging apps such as WhatsApp or WeChat because they are much faster and more convenient. I only write physical letters on special occasions, such as birthdays.

Sugestão: 回答包含观点和原因，但语法及词汇搭配需要改进。“older people”后应使用“are”，“handwriting letters”应改为“handwritten letters”。此外，原因不应只局限于老年人，也可以提到纪念价值和情感意义。

Exemplo: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters. Older people may prefer them because they are less familiar with smartphones, while younger people often keep letters because they have sentimental value and remind them of important moments.

Sugestão: 回答切题，并提供了例子，但存在语法和指代问题。“need to writing”应改为“need to write”，“they can't use cell phone”中的主语不清，建议改为“we are not allowed to use our phones”。可使用“for example”连接细节，并说明纸笔的具体用途。

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I carry them because I may need to write down important information. For example, in class, we are sometimes not allowed to use our phones, so I use a pen and notebook to take notes.

× I made the craft of paper like a gift card for Mother's Day.

✓ I made a craft of paper like a gift card for Mother's Day.

“Craft”在这里是第一次提到的可数名词，不能使用定冠词“the”，应使用不定冠词“a”。

× I made the craft of paper like a gift card for Mother's Day.

✓ I made a craft out of paper like a gift card for Mother's Day.

表示“用纸制作”时，通常使用“make something out of paper”，而不是“make something of paper”。

× When I was a child, I like to draw the paper because when I draw it I will I would feel happy.

✓ When I was a child, I liked drawing on paper because it made me feel happy.

“When I was a child”说明是在过去谈论童年经历，因此“like”应改为过去式“liked”。后面的“made”也使用过去式，与过去时间保持一致。

× When I was a child, I like to draw the paper because when I draw it I will I would feel happy.

✓ When I was a child, I liked drawing on paper because it made me feel happy.

动词“like”后面可以接动名词，表达“喜欢做某事”时使用“like doing something”。因此，“like to draw”在这里可以改为“liked drawing”。

× When I was a child, I like to draw the paper because when I draw it I will I would feel happy.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to draw on paper because it made me feel happy.

表示“在纸上画画”时，应使用介词“on”，即“draw on paper”，而不是“draw the paper”。

× I think the answer is yes, because the older people is not good at using cell phones, so maybe they can write the handwriting letters.

✓ I think the answer is yes, because older people are not good at using cell phones, so maybe they can write handwritten letters.

这里的“older people”表示一般的老年人，不是特定的一群人，因此不需要使用“the”。

× I think the answer is yes, because the older people is not good at using cell phones, so maybe they can write the handwriting letters.

✓ I think the answer is yes, because older people are not good at using cell phones, so maybe they can write handwritten letters.

“People”是复数名词，后面的be动词应使用复数形式“are”，不能使用单数形式“is”。

× I think the answer is yes, because the older people is not good at using cell phones, so maybe they can write the handwriting letters.

✓ I think the answer is yes, because older people are not good at using cell phones, so maybe they can write handwritten letters.

“Handwriting”通常表示“书写”这一行为或书写内容，不能直接用来修饰“letters”。表示“手写的信”应使用形容词“handwritten”。

× I think the answer is yes, because the older people is not good at using cell phones, so maybe they can write the handwriting letters.

✓ I think the answer is yes because older people are not good at using cell phones, so they may write handwritten letters.

同一个句子中同时使用“because”和“so”会造成连接重复。可以使用“because”说明原因，或使用“so”说明结果，但不要把两者重复组合使用。

× Yes I do because when I need to writing something I can use them.

✓ Yes, I do, because when I need to write something, I can use them.

情态或助动结构“need to”后面应接动词原形，因此应说“need to write”，不能说“need to writing”。

× For example when I go to the classroom they can't use cell phone so I will use the paper and pens.

✓ For example, when I go to the classroom, we can't use cell phones, so I use paper and pens.

这里表示学生不能使用手机这一类物品，应使用复数形式“cell phones”。同时，“paper and pens”表示一般用途的纸和笔，不需要使用“the”。

× For example when I go to the classroom they can't use cell phone so I will use the paper and pens.

✓ For example, when I go to the classroom, we can't use cell phones, so I use paper and pens.

前文的主语是说话者自己，后面突然使用“they”会造成代词指代不清。如果说话者和同学都不能使用手机，应使用“we”。

× For example when I go to the classroom they can't use cell phone so I will use the paper and pens.

✓ For example, when I go to the classroom, we can't use cell phones, so I use paper and pens.

这句话描述的是平时上课时的习惯，而不是一次将来的行为，因此应使用一般现在时“use”，不使用“will use”。