Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a direct, coherent answer with correct word choice and simple structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no + brief info), then add one or two specific details using linking words. Pronounce or use the correct term (origami) and avoid irrelevant extra phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. In Japan we often make origami, which is the traditional art of folding paper. Many children learn it at school, and I enjoyed folding cranes and frogs when I was young.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence and provide specific supporting details. Use correct tense (past) and simple vocabulary. Link ideas with words like 'and' or 'so' and give an example of what you drew or why you liked it.

Exemplo: As a child I liked drawing on paper. I especially enjoyed sketching animals and making colorful pictures, and my mother would help me practice shapes and shading.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer (no/rarely) and explain briefly why, using coherent sentences and correct words. Avoid unrelated words and keep it to two or three sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: No, I rarely write physical letters anymore because I usually type messages on my phone. I prefer texting or emailing my family and friends since it is faster.

Sugestão: Start with a clear general opinion, then support it with specific reasons and brief examples. Use correct collocations (handwritten letters) and linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Avoid vague phrases like 'feel useful'.

Exemplo: I think most people do not keep handwritten letters nowadays because most communication is digital. For example, many people prefer email or messaging for work and family, so old letters are less common.

Sugestão: Give a clear yes/no answer, then explain concisely why and how you use them. Use correct words (pens, notebook, write notes) and logical linking words. Provide one specific instance of when you use them.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. For instance, when I go for a walk I write down ideas or things to remember because I often forget them otherwise.

× Yes, I have because in Japan it is famous that But it is called Ordami.

✓ Yes, I have, because in Japan it is famous; it is called Origami.

The sentence has awkward connectors and a misspelled word. Use punctuation and conjunctions correctly and correct the noun 'Ordami' to 'Origami'. Also remove the unnecessary 'that' and capitalize appropriately. Suggestion: 'Yes, I have, because Origami is famous in Japan.'

× It's made from paper and also the children run from around school so they can do it.

✓ It's made from paper, and children around the school make it.

The original uses 'run from around school so they can do it' which is unclear and awkward. Use present simple for habitual actions and a clearer verb 'make' rather than 'do'. Also remove unnecessary 'the' before 'children'.

× When I was child, I prefer to draw in on paper and also my mother likes to draw likes like to the shape act drawing the preparation.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred to draw on paper, and my mother liked to draw too, especially shapes and preparatory sketches.

Multiple tense and article errors: use 'a child' and past tense 'preferred' and 'liked' to match 'When I was a child'. The original has repeated and incorrect words; replace with clear nouns 'shapes' and 'preparatory sketches'. Suggestion: simplify and keep consistent past tense for past habits.

× Editionally I So I don't eat because I usually type on my phone and I take it to my father and my friends also my husband.

✓ Actually, I don't write letters because I usually type messages on my phone and send them to my father, my friends, and my husband.

The sentence is confused with wrong words ('Editionally', 'eat') and missing structure. Use correct adverb 'actually', 'don't write' to negate the habit, and specify 'type messages' and 'send them to' to make sense. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× So I don't write fitcar letters.

✓ So I don't write physical letters.

'Fitcar' is a meaningless or misspelled word. Replace with 'physical' to convey handwritten or paper letters. Keep present simple for habitual action.

× Most of people do not keep high writing reds today because most people feel useful to send an email to coworkers and their families and friends so they don't have opportunities.

✓ Most people do not keep handwritten letters today because they find it more convenient to send emails to coworkers, family, and friends, so they don't have the opportunity to keep letters.

Errors include 'Most of people' (should be 'Most people'), 'high writing reds' (nonsense; means 'handwritten letters'), and awkward phrasing 'feel useful'. Use 'find it more convenient' and correct quantifier usage. Keep present simple for general truth.

× Yes I actually prefer plans which when I go out especially when I go to walking I definitely harvest plants on the notes because I forget everything immediately so I have to keep taking notes.

✓ Yes, I actually prefer to bring a notebook when I go out, especially when I go walking. I definitely jot down plans and notes because I forget things immediately, so I keep taking notes.

Many pronoun and word choice errors: 'plans which when' is incorrect; 'go to walking' should be 'go walking'; 'harvest plants on the notes' is incorrect—use 'jot down' or 'write' plans. Use 'bring a notebook' for clarity and maintain present simple habitual tense.