Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (singular/plural, word choice) and avoid repetition (e.g., saying “which is” twice).

Exemplo: Yes — I have. I once folded an origami bird. Origami is a traditional Japanese paper-folding art, and I enjoy making animals because it is relaxing and improves my concentration.

Sugestão: This answer is unclear and contains many grammar and cohesion errors. Provide a direct topic sentence (what you liked), then one or two specific, connected supporting details using linking words. Use correct verbs and nouns and avoid fragmented phrases.

Exemplo: As a child I liked drawing on paper. My parents bought me colorful pencils, and my father taught me how to shade and sketch simple shapes, so I spent hours drawing animals and scenes.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatically correct response: state frequency, who you write to, and why. Use linking words to organize ideas and correct phrasing for occasions and expressions (e.g., “apology letter”).

Exemplo: Yes, occasionally — for special occasions. I send handwritten letters to my girlfriend for her birthday, our anniversary, and sometimes a short apology letter, because a personal note feels more sincere than a text.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clearer reasoning and vocabulary. Start with your opinion, then give clear reasons and an example using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Avoid unclear phrases like “chance stickers.”

Exemplo: I think fewer people keep handwritten letters now because most of us use smartphones and computers. For example, people usually send messages or stickers instead of writing on paper, so letters are less common.

Sugestão: Provide a concise, well-structured answer: state whether you carry them, give one clear reason, and correct vocabulary (e.g., “notebooks,” “pencils,” “restricted”). Use linking words to connect reason and consequence.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually carry a notebook and pen. For example, on flights and in places where electronic devices are restricted, I use them to take notes or sketch ideas.

× Yes, I made the bird by using papers.

✓ Yes, I made a bird using paper.

Incorrect article and plural: 'the bird' implies a specific known bird; use 'a bird'. 'Papers' is unnatural for craft material; use uncountable 'paper'. Also 'by using' can be simplified to 'using' for natural English.

× In Japan it is famous for using papers to make some things such as animals and crafts, which is called origami, which is a Japanese traditional playing one.

✓ In Japan it is common to use paper to make things such as animals and other crafts; this art is called origami, a traditional Japanese craft.

Multiple issues: 'famous for using papers' is awkward — 'common to use paper' is better and 'paper' is uncountable. 'some things such as animals and crafts' is redundant; 'animals and other crafts' is clearer. 'which is called origami, which is a Japanese traditional playing one' is ungrammatical and uses wrong words: 'art' or 'craft' fits, not 'playing one'. Also adjective order: 'traditional Japanese craft' is correct.

× I like going to the paper My father told me how to light it and my parents bought me some pencils colorful pencils so I try to use it to pick to light what I see.

✓ I liked playing with paper as a child. My father showed me how to fold it, and my parents bought me colorful pencils, so I tried to use them to decorate what I made.

Tense inconsistency and many incorrect verbs: the question asks about childhood, so past tense 'liked' and 'showed' should be used. 'going to the paper' is incorrect; likely 'playing with paper' or 'making things with paper'. 'light' is wrong verb for folding; use 'fold'. 'pencils colorful pencils' duplicate and word order wrong — use 'colorful pencils'. Pronouns and verb objects: 'use it' should match plural 'them' for pencils; 'pick to light what I see' is unclear — 'decorate what I made' conveys intention.

× Yes, a few times in New Year.

✓ Yes, a few times at New Year.

Preposition error with time expression: use 'at New Year' or 'at the New Year' rather than 'in New Year'. Also present/habitual context is fine; 'a few times at New Year' indicates occurrences during that period.

× I like the letters to my girlfriend when she when it is her birthday and our anniversary and the paper sorry letter is the best way to say her my apologies.

✓ I like writing letters to my girlfriend on her birthday and on our anniversary; a handwritten apology letter is the best way to express my apologies to her.

Run-on and incorrect word order: 'I like the letters to my girlfriend' should be 'I like writing letters to my girlfriend'. Duplicate 'when' removed. 'paper sorry letter' is ungrammatical; use 'handwritten apology letter'. 'say her my apologies' ordering is wrong; use 'express my apologies to her'.

× I think the chance stickers is because now we alm most of us own the smartphone and the personal computer.

✓ I think the reason is that now almost all of us own smartphones and personal computers.

Many issues: 'the chance stickers' is meaningless; intended 'the reason' fits. 'alm most' misspelling 'almost'. Use plural 'smartphones' and 'personal computers' without definite articles. Word order 'is because' simplified to 'is that'.

× So every day they chat on it and do not use the paper and the pencil to express their feelings.

✓ So every day they chat on them and do not use paper and pencils to express their feelings.

Pronoun reference: 'it' (singular) does not match plural devices 'smartphones and personal computers' — use 'them'. Articles: 'the paper and the pencil' is overly specific; use uncountable 'paper' and plural 'pencils' for general reference.

× Yes, of course because sometimes I am banned to use electric devices such as on the airplane.

✓ Yes, of course, because sometimes I am not allowed to use electronic devices, such as on an airplane.

Incorrect verb 'banned to use' should be 'not allowed to use' or 'prohibited from using'. 'electric devices' more natural as 'electronic devices'. Article needed: 'on the airplane' -> 'on an airplane' or 'on airplanes'.

× So I always bring the pencil and notbooks together in case to use that.

✓ So I always bring a pencil and a notebook with me in case I need them.

Article and word choice: use 'a pencil and a notebook' for singular items. 'notbooks' is misspelling 'notebook'. 'bring ... together' awkward; 'with me' is natural. 'in case to use that' incorrect; 'in case I need them' is correct and matches plural.