Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific examples with brief details. Avoid unclear words (e.g., “Diawan”) and reduce redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes, I often make paper crafts. For example, I fold paper planes and origami stars, which I give to my friends as small gifts.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then add one or two specific memories. Avoid hesitations and ambiguous phrases (e.g., 'fold them into a store'). Use linking words to organize details (for example, 'also' or 'sometimes').

Exemplo: As a child, I often made paper planes and origami stars. I used to keep many of the stars in a jar and sometimes gave them to friends as presents.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain why with one specific reason and an example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'print more meaning' → 'add more meaning'). Keep it concise and avoid repeating the same idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I still write physical letters because they feel more personal and meaningful. For example, I often write short notes to close friends on special occasions, and I treasure the letters they send me.

Sugestão: Start with a clear general statement, then contrast with your own habit. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'boxes' not 'bows') and provide a specific example of why you keep them. Use linking words like 'however' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Some people may not keep handwritten letters anymore, but I do. I store mine in a box and read them occasionally to remember special moments and the affection expressed by friends.

Sugestão: Give a direct and complete answer, then add a brief explanation with a linking word. Use a full concluding sentence. Avoid trailing off at the end.

Exemplo: It depends: I carry paper and a pen when I expect to need them, for example for notes or sketches, but I usually don't bring them when I'm simply meeting friends.

× Yes, I like to do Diawan things so I use papers to make creative things like paper plane or stars and get it to my friends.

✓ Yes, I like to do Diawan things, so I use paper to make creative things like paper planes or stars and give them to my friends.

'Papers' is incorrect when referring to paper as a material; use the uncountable noun 'paper' (quantifier issue). 'Paper plane' should be plural as 'paper planes' to match 'or stars' and the implied plurality. 'Get it to my friends' is incorrect verb choice and pronoun number; use 'give them to my friends' to correctly indicate giving multiple items. Suggestion: use uncountable 'paper', pluralize countable objects, and match verbs/pronouns for number.

× I don't really remember because it had been a long time, but I think I made a lot of paper planes and paper stars.

✓ I don't really remember because it has been a long time, but I think I made a lot of paper planes and paper stars.

The past perfect 'had been' is unnecessary and awkward here; the present perfect 'has been' connects past time to the present context (I still don't remember now). Use 'has been' for an action/state that continues to the present. Suggestion: use present perfect when referring to a period extending up to now.

× You know those long strings and you can fold them into a store and I made a lot of stores and kept them in a bottle and sometime I gave it to my friends and sometimes I just keep it for myself.

✓ You know those long strips and you can fold them into a star, and I made a lot of stars and kept them in a bottle. Sometimes I gave them to my friends and sometimes I just kept them for myself.

Several lexical and preposition errors: 'strings' should be 'strips' for paper strips; 'fold them into a store' is likely 'star' (word choice). Use consistent tense: switch to past 'kept' to match 'made' and 'gave'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Pronoun/number: 'it' should be 'them' to match plural 'stars'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('strips','star'), maintain past tense consistency, and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× Yes, I think physical letters are more romantic and I think it prints a more meanings to what you are writing.

✓ Yes, I think physical letters are more romantic and I think they convey more meaning in what you are writing.

'It prints a more meanings' is ungrammatical: 'it' disagrees with plural 'letters' and 'a more meanings' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use 'they' for plural subject and 'more meaning' (uncountable) or 'more meaning(s)' appropriately. Also 'convey' or 'express' is a better verb than 'print' in this context. Suggestion: use correct pronoun agreement, avoid incorrect articles with uncountable nouns, and choose suitable verbs.

× So yeah, I love physical letter.

✓ So yeah, I love physical letters.

'Letter' should be plural 'letters' when speaking generally about the category. Use plural for countable nouns when referring to them in general. Suggestion: use 'letters' to indicate the general preference.

× I love to give them to my friends and I also happy if someone gave me a physical letter.

✓ I love to give them to my friends and I am also happy if someone gives me a physical letter.

Missing verb 'am' after 'I' and tense/sequence mismatch: use present 'am' and present simple 'gives' for general preference. 'Gave' (past) is inconsistent. Suggestion: include the correct auxiliary and use present simple for habitual or general statements.

× I'm not sure about other people, but for me, yes, I keep them. I keep them in bows and I read them from time to time when I want to remember how love, how much love I am.

✓ I'm not sure about other people, but for me, yes, I keep them. I keep them in boxes and I read them from time to time when I want to remember how much I was loved.

'Bows' is incorrect; likely 'boxes'. The phrase 'how love, how much love I am' is ungrammatical: to express remembering past affection, use 'how much I was loved' or 'how much someone loved me'. Also 'read them from time to time' is fine. Suggestion: correct noun to 'boxes' and rephrase to a grammatically clear structure expressing past feeling of being loved.

× That would depend. If I have to go somewhere that I would need paper and pens, I will bring them.

✓ That depends. If I have to go somewhere where I will need paper and pens, I will bring them.

'That would depend' is conditional and sounds tentative; 'That depends' is the normal present response. In the subordinate clause 'somewhere that I would need' use 'where I will need' to express a future necessity. Using 'would' here is incorrect modal choice. Suggestion: use present simple 'depends' and future 'will need' for a clear conditional about future actions.

× But if I just go out to hang out with my friends, I wouldn't

✓ But if I just go out to hang out with my friends, I wouldn't bring them.

The sentence is incomplete; 'I wouldn't' requires a verb phrase. Add 'bring them' to complete the conditional meaning. Also choice of 'wouldn't' is acceptable in conditional result clause. Suggestion: complete the sentence with the omitted verb phrase to convey the intended meaning.