Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 전반적으로 문장이 비문법적이고 중복되는 말(uh, so yeah 등)이 많습니다. 먼저 주제문을 명확히 하고 과거와 미래 시제를 정확히 사용하세요. 불필요한 망설임음을 줄이고, 한두 개의 구체적 이유나 계획을 덧붙여 답변을 확장하세요. 예: "I haven't made paper crafts since this is my first year at university"처럼 명확한 진술 후에 "but I plan to try origami at a club next semester" 같은 구체적 계획을 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: I haven't made any paper crafts yet because I'm a first-year university student and I've been busy settling in. However, I plan to try origami in a student club next semester, since it seems creative and relaxing.

Sugestão: 답변은 의사 전달이 가능하지만 문법과 어휘 선택, 구조가 불안정합니다. ‘by my hands’ 대신 ‘by hand’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 비교 문장을 연결어로 매끄럽게 연결하면 좋습니다. 예: 이유 제시 후 예시(특정 상황)를 하나 더 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I still write letters by hand because handwritten notes feel more personal and emotional to the recipient. In contrast, messages on smartphones are convenient but seem less thoughtful.

Sugestão: 문법 오류(주어-동사 일치, 대명사 사용)와 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 간결한 주제문으로 시작하고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예: ‘Most people don’t keep letters because they prefer digital messages’라고 말한 뒤 이유(편리함, 저장성 등)를 덧붙이세요. 또한 ‘unofficial’는 맥락에 맞지 않으니 다른 표현을 쓰세요.

Exemplo: Nowadays people rarely keep handwritten letters because most prefer instant messages on smartphones, which are more convenient and easier to store. However, some people still save special letters for sentimental reasons.

Sugestão: 많은 발음/단어 선택 오류('cherry'→carry)와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 주제문을 간결히 말하고 이유를 두세 개의 구체적 세부사항으로 설명하세요. 연결어(if needed)나 목적을 명확히 하여 문장을 정리하세요. 예: ‘I carry a notebook and pen to lectures because it helps me take quick notes and remember key points’

Exemplo: Yes, I always carry a notebook and a pen to lectures because it helps me take quick and clear notes. Writing by hand makes it easier for me to remember important points and review later.

Sugestão: 답변이 단절되고 문법시제가 섞여 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 과거시제로 명확히 시작하고 활동을 구체적으로 묘사하며 이유나 감정을 덧붙이세요. 예: ‘I used to draw trees, houses and dragons because it made me happy and stimulated my imagination’

Exemplo: As a child, I used to draw pictures of trees, houses and imaginary dragons because drawing made me happy and helped me express my imagination.

× I haven't made any craft with paper because I am freshman of the school and this is my first, uh, university.

✓ I haven't made any crafts with paper because I am a freshman at the school and this is my first university.

The word 'craft' should be plural 'crafts' after 'any'. 'Freshman' needs the article 'a' and the preposition 'at' is correct for place. Also 'first university' is acceptable but 'first, uh, university' is smoothed to 'first university'. Suggestion: Use 'any' + plural for countable nouns (any crafts), include articles for singular countable nouns (a freshman), and use 'at' for institutions (a freshman at the school).

× maybe I will made a craft with paper afterwards, but not now.

✓ maybe I will make a craft with paper afterwards, but not now.

The modal 'will' must be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'made' is incorrect; use 'make'. Suggestion: After 'will' always use the base verb (will make).

× Yeah, I still write physical letters by my hands because, uh, physical letters, uh, can give emotions to who who got the letters.

✓ Yeah, I still write physical letters by hand because physical letters can give emotions to the people who receive them.

'By my hands' is unnatural; use the idiom 'by hand'. Repetition 'who who' is incorrect. Use 'the people who receive them' for clarity and correct relative clause. Suggestion: Use set expressions (by hand) and proper relative clauses (the people who receive them).

× Yeah, just type in the words by smartphone. Uh, that's too.

✓ I also just type words on my smartphone sometimes.

Fragment and awkward phrasing: 'type in the words by smartphone' is unidiomatic. Use 'type words on my smartphone' and combine with 'sometimes' or 'also' to connect to previous idea. Suggestion: Use natural verb-preposition combinations (type on a smartphone) and avoid fragments; make a full sentence.)

× Not quite often, because, uh, people is really.

✓ Not very often, because people generally do not.

'People' is plural, so 'is' is incorrect. The original sentence is also incomplete; supply a verb phrase to finish the thought. 'Not very often' is more natural than 'not quite often'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with plural subjects and complete the clause with a verb (people do not).

× Usually take a smartphone and send a message by him or her, but uh, uh, writing a physical letters actually is really unofficial.

✓ They usually take a smartphone and send messages via it, but writing physical letters is actually becoming uncommon.

Missing subject; use 'they'. 'Send a message by him or her' is incorrect pronoun usage; use 'via it' or 'on it'. 'A physical letters' mixes singular article with plural noun; correct to 'physical letters' or 'a physical letter'. 'Unofficial' is not the intended meaning; 'uncommon' fits better. Suggestion: Always include the subject, match pronouns to their referents, and match articles to singular/plural nouns; choose correct vocabulary (uncommon vs unofficial).

× Yeah, I cherry paper and pens when I go to schools and listening to teacher lectures, it's more faster and convenient to me to noting what the lectures meaning and it's and I'm Yeah.

✓ Yeah, I carry paper and pens when I go to school and listen to teachers' lectures; it's faster and more convenient for me to note what the lectures mean.

'Cherry' is a wrong verb; use 'carry'. 'Go to schools' should be 'go to school' (general habit). Use base verbs after 'and' for parallel structure: 'listen'. Possessive 'teachers' lectures' needs apostrophe. 'More faster' is redundant; correct is 'faster' or 'more convenient'. 'To me to noting' is ungrammatical: use 'convenient for me to note'. 'What the lectures meaning' requires 'what the lectures mean'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs, ensure parallel structure, avoid double comparatives (more faster), use correct infinitive forms (to note), and possessive forms for nouns (teachers' lectures).

× What did you like to do with paper as a child?

✓ What did you like to do with paper as a child?

This sentence is already grammatically correct for past tense question form. No change needed. Suggestion: N/A.

× I like to do. Uh, drawing the pictures of the tree or houses, yeah, like and imagination Dragons at the child because that was my only happy.

✓ I liked drawing pictures of trees, houses, and dragons when I was a child because that made me happy.

The answer is about past habit, so use past tense 'liked'. Remove fragment 'I like to do.' Use plural 'trees' and 'houses'. 'Imagination Dragons at the child' is incorrect—express as 'dragons'. 'That was my only happy' is ungrammatical; use 'that made me happy'. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame (past for childhood), use plural forms for general nouns, and form complete clauses to express emotions (made me happy).