Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrasing and grammatical mistakes (e.g., "taught by my teachers in school" not "in my schools").

Exemplo: Yes. I made simple paper crafts as a child, especially paper boats taught by my school teachers. For example, my teacher showed us how to fold a boat during art class, and I practiced making several of them at home.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer then explain briefly with a clear reason. Correct grammar and avoid repetition (e.g., "we have to leave notes" once). Use a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I still write physical letters to my parents because our schedules are very hectic. Therefore, I often leave short handwritten notes at home to update them about my plans or important messages.

Sugestão: Clarify your point and use precise language. Begin with a general statement, then give a specific example. Fix grammar (e.g., "in most cases" "handwritten letters" "people"). Avoid vague phrases like "we have to" repeated.

Exemplo: Yes, people still keep handwritten letters in many situations. For example, in my country official complaints or requests to government offices often require a handwritten letter, so people continue to write by hand for formal matters.

Sugestão: Answer directly and simplify. Use correct collocations ("in my bag" not "in my back") and avoid filler words. Add one short reason with a linking word like "because".

Exemplo: Yes, I usually carry a pen and a notebook in my bag because I need to take notes for classes or record ideas when I am out. This helps me remember important information quickly.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and use linking words. Correct small grammar issues (capitalize sentence start, say "ask for a pencil").

Exemplo: As a child, I loved drawing pictures and making simple paper crafts with help from my parents or teachers. For instance, whenever I got paper I would ask for a pencil and spend an hour sketching animals or folding decorations.

× I learned to make paperboard in my childhood which was very much fun and it was taught by my teachers in my schools that to make paper boat very easily.

✓ I learned to make paper boats in my childhood; it was very fun, and my teachers at school taught me how to make paper boats easily.

Errors: incorrect noun form 'paperboard' (likely 'paper boats'), awkward clause order, unnecessary passive 'it was taught by my teachers in my schools that to make paper boat very easily.' Correction uses active voice 'my teachers at school taught me how to make paper boats easily.' Suggestion: use plural for countable hobby items, prefer active voice, and use 'how to' + base verb for instructions. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× Yeah, I write physical letters to my parents because our time schedule is famous hectic.

✓ Yes, I write physical letters to my parents because our schedule is very hectic.

Errors: unnatural adverb 'famous hectic' and repeated words. Use 'schedule' without 'time' and 'very hectic' to modify it. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('very hectic schedule') and avoid redundancy. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So due to that we have to we have to leave some notes and papers in the house so

✓ So because of that we have to leave notes and papers around the house.

Errors: repetition 'we have to we have to', redundant 'in the house so' and sentence fragment. Correction removes repetition and completes the thought. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases and finish sentences clearly. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yeah, in most of the case we have to write letters from the hands.

✓ Yes, in most cases we have to write letters by hand.

Errors: 'most of the case' should be 'most cases' and 'from the hands' should be 'by hand'. Suggestion: use correct plural form and the idiom 'by hand' for handwriting. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× For example whenever we have to say something to government we must have to write letters with our hand in paper.

✓ For example, whenever we need to communicate with the government, we have to write letters by hand on paper.

Errors: 'must have to' is redundant; use 'have to' or 'must'. 'to government' needs an article or 'the government'. 'with our hand in paper' is incorrect preposition and phrase. Suggestion: use 'have to' for obligation, 'the government', and 'by hand on paper'. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× So that is why nowadays also still peoples keep writing

✓ So that is why even today people still keep writing.

Errors: 'peoples' is wrong plural of 'people' and word order 'nowadays also still' is awkward. Also sentence is incomplete—add 'still keep writing' with proper placement. Suggestion: use 'people' and place adverbs in natural order: 'even today people still'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Yes, sure as being a student I probably have my pen and one copy in my back so that I can easily take some notes in it, input notes on it.

✓ Yes, of course, as a student I usually have my pen and a notebook in my bag so I can easily take notes in it.

Errors: 'as being a student' is awkward; use 'as a student'. 'one copy' should be 'a notebook' or 'a copy'; 'in my back' should be 'in my bag'. 'input notes on it' is unnatural. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct pronouns/possessives. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× So yeah, whenever I go out I mostly carry pen and papers with me.

✓ So yeah, whenever I go out I usually carry a pen and some paper with me.

Errors: missing article before 'pen' and incorrect plural 'papers' when referring to loose paper; 'mostly' replaced with 'usually' for naturalness. Suggestion: use 'a pen' and 'some paper' for uncountable noun. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× So I like to draw some pictures on paper and make some crafts with it by asking my parents or teachers.

✓ I liked to draw pictures on paper and make crafts with it when I was a child, asking my parents or teachers for help.

Errors: tense mismatch: question asks about childhood ('What did you like'), so use past tense 'liked' not 'like'. Also word order improved and 'by asking' clarified to 'asking... for help'. Suggestion: match past context and clarify actions. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× whenever I get papers, I just take asks for pencil and I start drawing in it.

✓ Whenever I got paper, I would ask for a pencil and start drawing on it.

Errors: tense inconsistency and wrong verb use 'take asks for pencil'; 'papers' should be 'paper' or 'sheets' and preposition 'in it' should be 'on it'. Suggestion: use past habit 'would' or simple past 'asked', correct verb phrase 'ask for a pencil', and 'draw on paper'. Grammar problem type ID: 12