Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct minor grammar errors, use linking words to connect ideas, and give one or two specific examples. Keep it within 3–4 sentences to sound natural.

Exemplo: Yes. I made many paper crafts as a child, such as small models and paper bags decorated with coloured paper. I especially enjoyed making paper flowers because they were simple but looked attractive; my parents encouraged me by buying coloured paper and glue.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer, correct repetition and awkward phrasing, and add a brief reason with linking words. Mention frequency or a recent example to be specific.

Exemplo: No, I don't usually write physical letters now because most communication is done by phone or email. However, I do keep a daily journal and often write short diary entries in the evenings to record my thoughts.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitations and small errors; state the opinion clearly, use a linking phrase to explain why, and give a specific reason or brief example to support your view.

Exemplo: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they find them more personal and emotional. For example, people often save letters from family members as keepsakes since the handwriting and personal notes make them special.

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and natural: give one clear statement, then add 1–2 specific examples using linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., 'collect junk') to more precise vocabulary like 'mementos' or 'tickets'.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually take a small journal and a pen when I go out. For instance, at the beach I often jot down my thoughts and later paste mementos like ticket stubs or photos into the journal.

Sugestão: Answer directly in the past tense and avoid repetition. Give one clear activity and explain briefly how it helped your skills, using linking words like 'so' or 'which helped'.

Exemplo: As a child I loved drawing and colouring on paper. I practised different subjects every day, which helped me improve my drawing and colouring skills over time.

× Yes I have made mini graft in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I made a mini craft in my childhood.

Use of article 'a' is required before singular countable noun 'mini craft'. Also 'have made' with 'in my childhood' is not ideal; simple past 'made' fits a finished time period. Suggestion: use 'a mini craft' and simple past for past time expressions.

× I was so enjoying it and it was an engaging task.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot; it was an engaging activity.

'Was so enjoying' is an incorrect progressive form for a past habit or feeling—simple past 'enjoyed' is appropriate. 'Task' is not the best collocation here; 'activity' fits better. Use 'a lot' or 'very much' as adverbial phrase.

× Also I used to make a bag paper plain then flowers etcetera using colour paper and my parents also support me by buying those items.

✓ Also I used to make plain paper bags, then flowers, etc., using colored paper, and my parents also supported me by buying those materials.

Word order and prepositions are incorrect: 'bag paper plain' should be 'plain paper bags'. 'Colour paper' in American English is 'colored paper'. 'Support' should be past 'supported' to match 'used to'. Use 'materials' or 'supplies' instead of 'items'. Commas improve clarity.

× No, I don't write physical letters nowadays because nowadays we have form to send message just towards people.

✓ No, I don't write physical letters nowadays because we have other ways to send messages to people.

Redundant 'nowadays' twice; 'have form to send message just towards people' is ungrammatical. Use 'have other ways' or 'other forms' and 'send messages to people'. Ensure plural 'messages'.

× But I like to write diary and journaling.

✓ But I like to keep a diary and journal.

'Write diary' is not natural; 'keep a diary' or 'write in a diary' is correct. 'Journaling' is a gerund; better to use 'journal' as a noun or 'journal entries'. Use article 'a' before diary.

× That is what I love to do.

✓ That is what I love to do.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (No error from the provided list.)

× Yes, P There are people who love to keep and written letters.

✓ Yes. There are people who love to keep handwritten letters.

Remove stray 'P'. Use 'handwritten letters' (adjective) rather than 'keep and written letters'. 'Written' needs to be 'handwritten' as adjective before noun.

× It is because handwritten letters consist of emotions that we can get from it that we won't be feeling from a mobile test or any other kind of messages.

✓ This is because handwritten letters contain emotions that we don't get from a mobile text or other kinds of messages.

Awkward phrasing: 'consist of emotions' -> 'contain emotions'. Pronoun agreement: use 'we don't get' rather than 'we won't be feeling'. 'mobile test' should be 'mobile text'. Use plural 'messages' and simplify sentence.

× Yes, I would carry my journal journaling book and then whenever I go outside for example to beach, I would write down whatever I felt that time to that book.

✓ Yes, I carry my journal, and whenever I go outside, for example to the beach, I write down whatever I feel at that time in it.

Use present simple 'carry' and 'write' for habitual actions instead of 'would' or past forms. 'Journaling book' is awkward; 'journal' suffices. Use article 'the beach' and preposition 'in it' for writing in the journal.

× And also I would collect junks such as the things I ate or the tickets etcetera and I will paste into that and also the photo also.

✓ I also collect junk, such as food wrappers or tickets, and I paste them into it, along with photos.

'Junks' is incorrect; 'junk' is uncountable or use 'pieces of junk'. Use 'food wrappers' rather than 'the things I ate'. Match pronouns: 'paste them into it'. Remove redundant 'also'.

× In my childhood, I will use the paper to draw different things.

✓ When I was a child, I used paper to draw different things.

For past habits use 'used to' or simple past 'used'; 'I will use' is incorrect. 'In my childhood' is less natural than 'When I was a child' or 'As a child'.

× I love to draw and I like to color them.

✓ I loved to draw and I liked to color them.

Because the context is past (childhood), change present 'love/like' to past 'loved/liked'. Also consistent tense with previous sentence.

× And also by doing it I had improved my drawing and colouring capabilities.

✓ And by doing this I improved my drawing and colouring abilities.

Past perfect 'had improved' is unnecessary when simple past 'improved' suffices in a sequence of past actions. 'Capabilities' is acceptable but 'abilities' is more natural. Use 'this' instead of 'it' for clarity.