Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 首先，回答应更直接并简洁，开头一句明确回应问题。避免冗长和语法错误（如时态、冠词及连接词）；使用连贯词连接细节。可以把经历具体化（例如什么时候、做了什么、别人如何反应）。尽量控制在最多五句内。

Exemplo: Not really. I'm not good at paper crafts, but I did make paper cuttings in primary school. My mother used to stick them on our windows, and I felt proud when guests complimented them.

Sugestão: 答案要更自然并注意语法（时态与代词使用）。用一两句解释原因并给具体例子会更好。用连接词如 'because' 或 'so' 使论述更连贯。控制句子长度并提高词汇多样性（例如 'long time' -> 'a long time'；'special emotional feelings' -> 'more personal and meaningful').

Exemplo: Yes, I still write physical letters sometimes because they feel more personal. For example, if I haven't seen a close friend for months, I write a short letter to give them when we next meet.

Sugestão: 回答应更精确且语法正确；避免绝对化用词（如 'abandoned'）。可以对比并给出原因与可能的例外。使用连接词如 'because', 'however' 增强逻辑性。注意单复数和搭配。

Exemplo: Not really. Most people prefer emails or messaging apps because they're faster and more convenient. However, some still keep handwritten letters for sentimental reasons, such as family keepsakes.

Sugestão: 注意时态一致（traveling 后应使用过去或现在），并使句子简洁明确。补充具体场景和目的（例如记笔记、画画、写日记）。使用连接词如 'so' 或 'because' 来解释原因，但避免冗长表述。

Exemplo: Sometimes. When I travel on slow trains, I bring a notebook and a pen so I can sketch the scenery or jot down my thoughts during long journeys.

Sugestão: 开头应直接回应并用过去时。把描述具体化（例如明确画了什么、为什么喜欢），避免口头语填充（like 'umm'）。用连贯词（e.g. 'for example', 'because'）组织细节，句子控制在三到四句内。

Exemplo: As a child I liked drawing on paper. For example, I often drew small houses and my family members because I found them cute. My drawings weren't perfect, but I was proud of them.

× Actually, no. I'm not a person who is good at this skill and but in my primary school I made some paper cutting and my mom stick it into our windows. It is the craft I've ever created.

✓ Actually, no. I'm not someone who is good at this skill, but in primary school I made some paper cuttings and my mom stuck them on our windows. It was the only craft I had ever made.

句子中出现了“and but”两个连词重复，应该只用“but”。“a person who”可更自然地说成“someone who”。名词复数问题：paper cutting应为paper cuttings或paper cut-outs表示多件作品。动词时态与主谓一致：mom stick → mom stuck（过去时）。代词一致性：it指代前面复数应为them。最后一句时态与表达要对应，改为过去完成时态结构更自然。建议：避免同时使用多个连词，注意名词复数和过去时一致性，并用合适的代词代替。

× Yes, definitely when there's a long time I didn't meet with my friend, I will send the physical letter to him or her when the next time we meet.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I haven't met a friend for a long time, I will send a physical letter to him or her the next time we meet.

原句时态混用不当："there's a long time I didn't meet with my friend"结构不自然且时态冲突，应该用现在完成时态或现在完成进行时表示到现在为止的持续情况，例如 haven't met。去掉冗余的介词with（meet someone，不用meet with）。“when the next time we meet”不自然，改为“the next time we meet”。建议使用现在完成时描述“很长时间没见”的情况，并注意动词与介词搭配。

× It shows special emotional feelings when I am not stay with him.

✓ It shows special emotions when I'm not with him.

错误1：动词不定式/进行形式错误，'am not stay' 应为 'am not staying' 或更自然地省略动词变为 'I'm not with him' 表示不在一起。错误2：'special emotional feelings' 冗长且不自然，改为 'special emotions' 更简洁。建议：简化表达，使用正确的现在进行或状态动词，并避免重复性词组。

× I think not, Not really. Nowadays people use emails or digital apps to send messages to each other. By that means it is more convenient and fast to communicate with each other. So people abandoned handwritten letters.

✓ I don't think so, not really. Nowadays people use emails or digital apps to send messages to each other. By that means it is more convenient and faster to communicate. So people have abandoned handwritten letters.

句首否定表达不自然，改为'I don't think so'。形容词/副词使用错误：'convenient and fast' 中 fast 应为副词 faster 或形容词并列时用 'more convenient and faster'，但这里比较应使用 'more convenient and faster' 或更自然 'more convenient and faster to communicate'，改为 'more convenient and faster' 不够简洁，使用 'more convenient and faster' 或 'more convenient and quicker'，最终选用 'more convenient and faster' 但改为 'more convenient and faster to communicate' 仍显重复，简化为 'more convenient and faster'。动词时态：'So people abandoned' 应为现在完成时 'have abandoned' 表示到现在为止的结果。建议：使用自然否定表达，注意副词/形容词形式和时态一致。

× Sometimes when I was travelling by the slow trains, I will bring some paper and pens with me because I can't describe the sceneries along the road and it is a long time for me to settle down and think about the things in my head.

✓ Sometimes when I travel by slow trains, I bring some paper and pens with me because I can't describe the scenery along the road and it's a long time for me to settle down and think about things in my head.

时态混用：句中用 'was travelling'（过去）与 'will bring'（将来）混合，应保持一般现在时表达习惯性动作：'when I travel... I bring'。名词复数错误：'sceneries' 不常用，改为不可数名词 'scenery'。冗长或不自然表达 'it is a long time for me to settle down' 可简化为 'it's a long time for me to settle down'。建议：同一叙述中保持时态一致，习惯性或常态行为用一般现在时，注意不可数名词用法。

× When I was a child, if given the paper, I will choose to Draw Something that is very simple but interesting for me at that age, I will draw a house with some small pads in my families that is very cute.

✓ When I was a child, if I was given paper, I would choose to draw something very simple but interesting to me at that age. I would draw a house with some small plants for my family that were very cute.

条件句时态问题：'if given the paper' 非完整结构，改为 'if I was given paper'。情态动词选择：过去习惯用 'would' 表示过去常做的事情，而不是 'will'。动词不需要大写：'Draw Something' 应为 'draw something'。名词使用不当：'small pads' 不合适，猜测为 'small plants' 或 'small pets'，根据语境改为 'small plants'。'in my families' 语法错误，改为 'for my family'。建议：条件句和过去习惯用法用 'would'，注意固定搭配，注意大小写和名词选择。

× Although my umm, painting is not very perfect, I felt that is very amazing.

✓ Although my painting wasn't very good, I felt it was amazing.

形容词使用错误：'not very perfect' 不地道，应为 'wasn't very good' 或 'not very perfect' 可改更自然。时态一致性：前半句过去时，后半句也应为过去时 'I felt it was amazing'。代词指代不清：'that' 指前句应改为 'it' 更自然。建议：使用更自然的形容词搭配，保持时态一致并使用正确的指示代词。