Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid redundant phrases and fillers (uh), and use linking words to connect ideas. Provide one or two specific examples and a brief reason why you enjoyed it.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was at school, making paper crafts was part of the curriculum, so I often made animals and decorative designs. For example, I used to fold rabbits and turtles and decorate them with colored paper, which I enjoyed because it let me be creative and develop fine motor skills.

Sugestão: Use correct grammar and be concise. State your position clearly, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid exaggeration (e.g., "takes years").

Exemplo: No, I rarely write physical letters anymore. In today’s fast-paced world, I usually send emails or make video calls because they are much quicker and more convenient than posting a letter.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and verb agreement. Answer directly, then support with specific reasons or examples. Remove hesitations and avoid vague expressions. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters as keepsakes. For example, I know friends who keep letters from relatives because reading them brings back vivid memories and emotions, so these letters have sentimental value.

Sugestão: Be more concise and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific situations when you use them, linked logically. Correct minor grammar (e.g., "a small notebook and a pen").

Exemplo: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen. For instance, I sometimes need to jot down a phone number or an address, and when my phone battery dies or there is no signal, having paper is very useful.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and hesitations. Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific examples with brief details. Use correct words ("planes" not "plain") and link ideas with words like "for example" and "also."

Exemplo: As a child, I loved making paper crafts. For example, I often folded rabbits and turtles and made paper airplanes to play with my classmates, which was a fun way to be creative and socialize.

× Yes, when I was a child, I have made several crafts with papers because that was the essential task in our school curriculum.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I made several crafts with paper because that was an essential task in our school curriculum.

Tense error: 'have made' (present perfect) is incorrect with the past time marker 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'made'. Also 'papers' should be singular 'paper' as an uncountable noun here. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed past events and treat 'paper' as uncountable.

× So we didn't have any escape.

✓ So we had no choice.

Idiomatic/quantifier issue: 'have any escape' is not natural. Use 'had no choice' to express lack of alternative in past. Suggestion: Learn common idiomatic expressions for lack of options.

× And then it was quite interesting when I saw on the television the different, uh, papers are used for a different crafts and we could make lots of designs and lots of figures as well.

✓ And then it was quite interesting when I saw on television that different papers are used for different crafts and we could make lots of designs and figures as well.

Article and sentence structure errors: Remove 'the' before 'television' in this idiomatic context. Use 'that' to introduce the clause. 'a different crafts' is wrong — use 'different crafts' (no article) and 'papers' as plural is acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'on television' and 'that' for reported content; match plural nouns with no singular article.

× No, I do not like write physical letters.

✓ No, I do not like to write physical letters.

Verb form issue: After 'do not like' use the infinitive 'to write' or the gerund 'writing'. Omit the bare infinitive. Suggestion: Use 'do not like to + verb' or 'do not like + verb-ing'.

× Now because we are in a fast-paced world, we can share our information or emails or we can do one FaceTime so we do not have to spend our time just writing letters which takes years to reach to the recipient.

✓ Now, because we live in a fast-paced world, we can share information by email or use FaceTime, so we do not have to spend time writing letters that take weeks or months to reach the recipient.

Multiple issues: 'we are in a fast-paced world' is acceptable but 'live in' is more natural. 'share our information or emails' is awkward — use 'share information by email'. 'do one FaceTime' is incorrect — use 'use FaceTime'. 'takes years to reach to the recipient' has tense and preposition problems: 'take' must agree with plural 'letters', and remove extra 'to'. Suggestion: Simplify and use natural collocations (live in, by email, use FaceTime, take weeks/months).

× So I definitely do not use physical letters.

✓ So I definitely do not use physical letters anymore.

Missing adverb: 'anymore' clarifies that this is no longer done. Suggestion: Add time-related adverbs when contrasting past and present.

× Uh, yes, I have seen several people, they keep handwritten letters as a memory because, uh, when you look back, uh, you remember those vivid moments and the memories.

✓ Yes, I have seen several people who keep handwritten letters as mementos because when you look back you remember those vivid moments and memories.

Relative clause and noun choice: Combine clauses with 'who' instead of comma + subject. 'as a memory' is awkward — use 'as mementos'. Repetition 'moments and the memories' redundant; use 'moments and memories'. Suggestion: Use 'who' for people and choose appropriate nouns.

× So I think so people are still, uh, has the special place for this paper letters in their heart.

✓ So I think people still have a special place for these paper letters in their hearts.

Subject-verb agreement and article/pronoun errors: 'people are still has' mixes plural subject with singular verb; use 'people... have'. 'this paper letters' is wrong — use 'these paper letters' and plural 'hearts'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with subjects and match demonstratives to plural nouns.

× Yes, I usually carry small notebook and the pen with me, because you never know when you have to use it.

✓ Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen with me because you never know when you will have to use them.

Articles and pronoun agreement: Add indefinite articles 'a' before 'small notebook' and 'pen'. 'you have to use it' is unclear because two items are mentioned; use 'them' and future 'will have to' for likelihood. Suggestion: Use articles with singular countable nouns and plural pronouns to match.

× It might, you might have to write somebody's number or the address.

✓ You might have to write someone's number or an address.

Redundancy and article choice: Remove repeated subject 'It might, you might'. Use 'someone's' not 'somebody's' optionally but keep 'someone's'. Use 'an address' rather than 'the address' since it's unspecified. Suggestion: Avoid redundant phrasing and choose appropriate indefinite articles.

× Sometimes the mobile phone is not accessible.

✓ Sometimes the mobile phone is not accessible.

This sentence is acceptable but 'accessible' is slightly formal; alternatively 'available' or 'working' may be more natural. No grammar correction needed. Suggestion: Consider using 'available' for everyday speech.

× Umm, so I think so it's always a good habit to keep notebook and the paper with us.

✓ So I think it's always a good habit to keep a notebook and some paper with you.

Pronoun and article issues: Remove redundant 'so', add 'a' before 'notebook', use 'some paper' (uncountable) and change 'with us' to 'with you' to match the general advice. Suggestion: Use appropriate pronouns for general statements and add articles for singular countable nouns.

× As I mentioned previously, I used to make lots of crafts and make different figures from a paper.

✓ As I mentioned previously, I used to make lots of crafts and different figures from paper.

Article and verb redundancy: 'from a paper' is incorrect; use 'from paper' or 'from a sheet of paper'. Also 'used to make lots of crafts and make different figures' repeats 'make' unnecessarily; combine. Suggestion: Avoid repeating verbs and use correct article or uncountable form for 'paper'.

× Uh, for example, I used to make rabbit and tortoise and also plain.

✓ For example, I used to make a rabbit and a tortoise and also paper airplanes.

Countable nouns and word choice: 'rabbit' and 'tortoise' need articles 'a'. 'plain' is incorrect — likely 'plane' meaning 'paper airplane'; use 'paper airplanes' for clarity. Suggestion: Use articles for singular countable nouns and precise vocabulary.

× So we used to throw planes in a classroom and we used to enjoy a lot.

✓ We used to throw paper airplanes in the classroom and enjoyed it a lot.

Article use and tense consistency: Add 'paper' to specify 'planes', use definite article 'the classroom' or 'in class'. 'we used to enjoy a lot' is awkward; 'enjoyed it a lot' is clearer. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use natural collocations like 'in class' or 'in the classroom'.