Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable and directly addresses the question, but it is repetitive and somewhat disorganized. To improve, use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one brief specific detail (e.g. time period or an example). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: No, I didn’t really make paper crafts as a child. I was more interested in playing football and spending time with friends, so I focused on outdoor activities. As a result, I never learned origami or similar paper crafts.

Sugestão: Good direct answer with a clear reason and an example, but the language is a little awkward and some phrases are unclear. Improve by choosing precise vocabulary (e.g. "official documents"), simplifying sentence structure, and using one linking word. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I still write physical letters for official matters at work. For example, when responding to requests I submit a signed, handwritten document because it is considered more formal and reliable in my country.

Sugestão: You answered the question with relevant points (legal/official use and sentimental use) but the response is disfluent and repetitive. To improve, organize points with a short topic sentence, then two clear supporting details using linking words (for example, "For official reasons..." and "For personal reasons..."). Reduce hesitations and repetitions.

Exemplo: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters. For official purposes, businesses keep signed letters as evidence or records. For personal reasons, families and friends often save letters as keepsakes and memories.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and gives a reason, but sentences are long, slightly repetitive, and contain some unclear phrases. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, using a linking phrase to introduce the reason, and giving one concise example. Use correct collocations (e.g. "writing materials") and avoid filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually carry paper and pens with me. As a student and researcher I often get ideas while away from home, so I bring a notebook and pens to write down notes immediately.

Sugestão: The answer is short and unclear with several grammatical errors and incoherent phrases. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence (what you did with paper), one or two specific supporting details, and a linking word if needed. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar.

Exemplo: As a child I mostly used paper for schoolwork and writing. I wrote short stories and school notes rather than making crafts, because we focused more on studies than on extra activities.

× Honestly, no, I don't. I don't remember that really.

✓ Honestly, no, I don't. I don't really remember that.

Word order: the adverb 'really' should come before the main verb 'remember' in this sentence to sound natural in present tense. Move 'really' before 'remember' (I don't really remember).

× But I think one of the one of the things that I didn't do that is because maybe I was, I was interested in other things playing football at that time and or hanging up with friends.

✓ But I think one of the things I didn't do was make crafts because I was interested in other activities like playing football or hanging out with friends at that time.

Run-on and incorrect verb forms: sentence is repetitive and uses wrong phrase 'hanging up' and awkward structure 'didn't do that is because'. Use past tense 'didn't do' with 'was' and correct verbs: 'was interested in other activities', 'playing football', 'hanging out with friends'. Also remove duplicated phrase.

× So now I think I didn't have that interest of making craft all different origami with with paper.

✓ So I don't think I had an interest in making crafts or different kinds of origami with paper.

Preposition and article errors: use 'interest in' not 'interest of', plural 'crafts', and 'kinds of origami' or 'different kinds of origami'. Also tense: use past 'had' to match 'didn't' earlier.

× Yes, I do write physical papers, especially when I respond your request something about work in my country.

✓ Yes, I do write physical letters, especially when I respond to requests related to work in my country.

Wrong noun and missing preposition: 'papers' is ambiguous; 'letters' is appropriate for handwritten communication. Add preposition 'to' after 'respond' and use plural 'requests' or 'a request' and correct order 'related to work'.

× So in there you we need to, if you want to communicate something which is more efficient, you need to write by using your own hand and sign it.

✓ There, if you want to communicate something officially, you need to write it by hand and sign it.

Awkward phrasing and extra words: remove 'you we need to' and 'which is more efficient'. Use 'write it by hand' and 'sign it' for clarity and correct word order.

× So yeah, I always do that.

✓ So yeah, I always do that.

This sentence is acceptable in present simple to express habitual action; no grammatical change needed.

× Yes, they do. Uh, and they depend, I think sometimes.

✓ Yes, they do, and I think it depends sometimes.

Subject-verb agreement and word order: 'they depend' is vague; use 'it depends' or 'it depends on the person'. Move adverb 'sometimes' to end for natural word order.

× So with people who for job purpose, of course, some people have keep those letters for, uh, for evidence.

✓ For people who need them for work purposes, of course some keep those letters as evidence.

Pronoun and verb form: 'have keep' is incorrect; use 'keep'. Use 'work purposes' and concise structure 'some keep those letters as evidence'.

× Uh, for example, let's say you request something, let's say money and you didn't get the money.

✓ For example, if you request something, such as money, and you don't receive it,

Tense consistency and conditionals: use conditional present/future structure 'if you request' and 'don't receive' for general example; avoid repetition 'let's say' twice.

× So you need to have that letter in your stores so that you can use it as evidence if something. Happened later in in in work,

✓ you need to keep that letter in your records so that you can use it as evidence if something happens later at work,

Preposition and noun choice: 'in your stores' is wrong; use 'in your records'. Remove stray period; 'happens' present simple for general future, and 'at work' correct preposition.

× but of course for those people, let's say who who wrote later during previous time. Listen for friends or families, always put letter for memories.

✓ but of course some people who wrote letters in the past, for friends or family, always keep letters as mementos.

Fragmented sentences and wrong verbs: combine fragments, correct 'who who' duplication, 'wrote letters in the past' and use 'keep letters as mementos' instead of 'put letter for memories'.

× Yeah, I was a student, so I always have my papers, my book and some writing tools with me.

✓ When I was a student, I always had my papers, my books and some writing tools with me.

Tense consistency: 'was' indicates past, so follow with past 'had' not present 'have'. Also plural 'books' likely.

× And I always do that because as a student who is a researcher, sometimes you got ideas when you are somewhere far away from home or from lesser learning environment.

✓ I always did that because as a student and researcher, sometimes you get ideas when you are far from home or in a less resourceful learning environment.

Tense and word choice: maintain past tense 'did' to match context. 'you got' should be 'you get' for general truth but here past context prefer 'you get' or 'you would get'; 'lesser learning environment' is unnatural — use 'less resourceful learning environment'.

× So during that time, of course, when you have idea, you get an idea about something, you need to open it down, so.

✓ So during that time, when you have an idea, you need to write it down, so

Word choice and redundancy: 'have idea' needs article 'an idea'; 'open it down' is incorrect — use 'write it down'. Remove redundant 'you get an idea about something'.

× It's very important to have those writings necessities with you whenever you call.

✓ It's very important to have those writing necessities with you whenever you go out.

Wrong verb 'call' and awkward noun phrase: replace 'call' with 'go out' to match question. 'writings necessities' should be 'writing necessities' or 'writing supplies'.

× Honestly, nothing much just for writing and just writing really.

✓ Honestly, not much—just for writing, really.

Redundancy and punctuation: simplify repetition 'just for writing' once. Use concise present tense phrasing.

× So because yeah, we didn't have a lot of play that maybe other societal that are coming to do so, but really for us was just fighting.

✓ Because we didn't have many toys or recreational activities like other societies, for us it was mostly studying.

Noun and pronoun errors: 'play that maybe other societal that are coming to do so' is unclear. Replace with 'toys or recreational activities' and correct verb 'it was mostly studying' rather than 'fighting' which seems wrong in context.

× They say schools writing letters, of course, for studying, yes.

✓ We used to write letters at school, of course, for studying.

Awkward phrasing and tense: restructure to natural past habit 'We used to write letters at school' and place 'for studying' afterward.