Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word choice, and give one or two specific examples with linking words. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes. I often made paper crafts when I was a child. For example, I used to fold paper to make small animals and handmade jewelry, which I would trade with my classmates. It was a fun and creative hobby that kept me entertained after school.

Sugestão: Be more specific and use correct pronouns and verbs. State who you write to and why, then add one concise supporting reason using a linking word (e.g., because, so).

Exemplo: Yes, I still write physical letters to close friends and sometimes to future partners. I enjoy writing by hand because it feels personal and more meaningful than messages, so I often send letters on special occasions.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: start with a clear opinion, then give a specific example and a brief explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb forms.

Exemplo: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters. For example, I saw an Instagram post where a boyfriend gave a handwritten note with a flower, which shows these gestures are still valued. Because they feel personal, such letters remain popular on social media.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly why and provide a specific example. Avoid filler words and correct tense. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Not usually. I think carrying a pen and paper is useful for jotting down ideas or phone numbers, but I often forget to bring them. When I do remember, I keep a small notebook in my bag for notes.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence about your childhood habits, then give two specific activities with linking words. Use correct past tense and precise vocabulary.

Exemplo: As a child, I loved making and using paper in different ways. For instance, I wrote letters to my friends and made paper jewelry, animals, and flowers to decorate our classroom, which we often exchanged during break.

× Uh, OK, yes. And in my childhood are you, I get used to made, I made a lot of crap crafts like uh, jewelry and other animals, making animals with papers and it was so amazing.

✓ Uh, OK, yes. In my childhood I used to make a lot of simple paper crafts like jewelry and animals; making them was very enjoyable.

The original sentence has several sentence structure problems: incorrect word order ('are you'), wrong tense/form ('I get used to made'), and run-on fragments. Use 'used to' to express habitual past actions, use the base verb 'make' after 'used to', and combine ideas with proper punctuation to form a clear sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× Also inter inter entertainment for me and that's all.

✓ They were also entertaining for me.

'Inter inter' is incorrect and 'entertainment' should be the adjective 'entertaining' to describe the crafts. The sentence should be concise and use the correct adjective form. Grammar problem type ID: 13.

× Uh, yes, I still write physical letters to my ideas also friends and I want to I want to write physical letters to my future husband and the boyfriend like that.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters to friends, and I want to write physical letters to my future husband or boyfriend.

Use simple present 'write' for habitual action. Remove redundant words ('I want to I want to') and correct 'ideas' to 'friends'. Use 'or' for alternatives and simplify phrasing for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6.

× And this is our this is so amazing and entertainment activity to me.

✓ I find this activity very enjoyable and entertaining.

The phrase 'amazing and entertainment activity' is ungrammatical. Use adjectives 'enjoyable' or 'entertaining' and correct word order: subject + verb + complement. Grammar problem type ID: 13.

× I guess some people still write handwritten letters.

✓ I guess some people still write handwritten letters.

This sentence is acceptable in present tense and needs no change. It correctly uses simple present to describe a general truth. Grammar problem type ID: 6.

× I recently saw a story on the social media and like Instagram and a boyfriend.

✓ I recently saw a story on social media, on Instagram, about a boyfriend.

Use 'saw' for past action (correct) but fix word order and articles: 'on social media' not 'the social media', and clarify the prepositional phrase 'about a boyfriend'. Grammar problem type ID: 5.

× A boyfriend who write a handwritten letter and give and he give.

✓ A boyfriend who wrote a handwritten letter and gave it to her.

Use past tense 'wrote' and 'gave' to match 'recently saw'. Also include the object 'it' and recipient 'her' for clarity. The original repeats fragments and uses present 'write' incorrectly. Grammar problem type ID: 5.

× He gave it with a flower.

✓ He gave it with a flower.

This sentence is already correct: past tense 'gave' and clear meaning. No change needed. Grammar problem type ID: 5.

× Also such letters are popular on the social.

✓ Such letters are also popular on social media.

Use 'on social media' rather than 'on the social'. Place 'also' correctly and use the standard phrase 'social media'. Grammar problem type ID: 11.

× I know because I heard about it. It, it was, It is very useful for, uh, theory and, uh, everyone's mind.

✓ I know because I heard about it. It is very useful for brainstorming and for everyone's ideas.

Original is disfluent and uses 'theory' incorrectly. Use 'brainstorming' or 'note-taking' and 'everyone's ideas' for clarity, and keep consistent present tense if stating a general truth. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× And I should, uh, keep, I should carry papers and pens with me, but I can't always.

✓ I should carry paper and pens with me, but I cannot always do so.

Use modal 'should' correctly with base verb 'carry'. 'Can't' is fine colloquially but expand to 'cannot' for formality; 'do so' completes the idea. Also use 'paper' (uncountable) not 'papers' unless referring to specific sheets. Grammar problem type ID: 4.

× I slipped it my mind and I forgetting about it.

✓ I forget sometimes and it slips my mind.

Mix of past and present progressive is incorrect. Use simple present for habitual problem: 'it slips my mind' and 'I forget sometimes'. If referring to a single past moment, use 'it slipped my mind'. Grammar problem type ID: 5.

× In my childhood I get used to with the paper.

✓ In my childhood I used to use paper a lot.

'Get used to with' is wrong; use 'used to' for habitual past. 'Paper' is uncountable here. Adjust verb to 'used to use' to express past habit. Grammar problem type ID: 1.

× I always write an letter to my friends and a class with my classmates and also I made a crowds like jewelry, ringgit and also other.

✓ I always wrote letters to my friends and to my classmates, and I made crafts like jewelry, rings, and other items.

Use 'letters' plural, not 'an letter'. For past habitual use 'wrote' or 'used to write'. 'Class' should be 'classmates' with 'to my classmates'. 'Crowds' is wrong; use 'crafts'. 'Ringgit' is a currency; likely meant 'rings'. Correct article and noun choices. Grammar problem type ID: 22.

× I made animals, flowers and also I.

✓ I made animals and flowers, too.

The phrase 'and also I' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use 'too' or 'also' at the end to indicate addition and complete the list. Grammar problem type ID: 26