Paper— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и структурированно: начните с основной мысли, затем добавьте 1–2 подробности. Избегайте повторов и междометий «uh». Уточните примеры (какие именно фигуры вы делали) и используйте связку для плавности (for example, such as).

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I made many paper crafts, especially origami. For example, I often folded cranes and frogs, which I gave to my friends. I enjoyed the creative process and liked trying new models every week.

Sugestão: Говорите в одном времени и правильно используйте формы глаголов. Начните с краткого ответа (No/Not really/Yes), затем объясните причину и добавьте план на будущее. Избегайте разговорных слов 'vibe' без контекста и уменьшите количество запинок.

Exemplo: Not really — I have never written a proper handwritten letter, but I would like to in the future because I appreciate the personal touch and atmosphere. I think a handwritten note feels more meaningful, so I plan to send letters to close friends on special occasions.

Sugestão: Используйте правильное время и избегайте неточных чисел (например, '100 letters'). Дайте чёткое мнение и подкрепите его конкретными причинами или примерами. Уберите лишние 'uh' и повторения слов 'keep'.

Exemplo: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters because they serve as personal mementos. For example, older generations often save letters from family members since these notes remind them of important events and relationships.

Sugestão: Используйте глаголы 'carry' и 'have' правильно, избегайте 'wear' для предметов в сумке. Дайте прямой ответ и приведите 1–2 конкретных примера ситуаций, когда вы ими пользуетесь.

Exemplo: Yes, I always carry a small notebook and a pen in my bag. I use them to jot down ideas, write shopping lists, or record someone's phone number when I meet new people.

Sugestão: Сформулируйте ответ более связно: начните с утверждения, затем опишите конкретные примеры (какие животные или модели) и почему вам это нравилось. Уберите повторы и междометия.

Exemplo: As a child I loved making paper crafts, especially origami. I often folded animals like cranes and frogs, and sometimes boxes. I enjoyed it because it was creative and relaxing, and I liked seeing simple paper turn into a shape.

× I really enjoyed this hobby and I made a lot of different, uh, crafts.

✓ I really enjoyed this hobby and I made a lot of different crafts.

The sentence is grammatically correct; remove the unnecessary comma before 'crafts' for fluency. Use of 'made' is past tense which matches 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: avoid filler words and extra commas to improve clarity.

× Honestly, I can't say that I've ever write a physical letter by myself, but I really, uh, like to do it in the future because I really like the atmosphere and the vibe of writing letters by yourself, by your hand and sending, uh, to your friends or relatives.

✓ Honestly, I can't say that I've ever written a physical letter by myself, but I would really like to do it in the future because I really like the atmosphere and the vibe of writing letters by hand and sending them to friends or relatives.

Use the past participle 'written' after 'have' (present perfect). Change 'like to do it in the future' to 'would really like to do it in the future' for natural modal use. 'By your hand' is unnatural; use 'by hand'. 'Sending to your friends' needs an object: 'sending them to friends'. Reduce fillers for clarity.

× I believe that there were a lot of people still keep, uh, 100 letters because, uh, it's a big part of their memories, especially for elderly people.

✓ I believe that a lot of people still keep many letters because they are a big part of their memories, especially for elderly people.

Mix of tenses: 'were' is past but context is present; use present 'a lot of people still keep'. '100 letters' is oddly specific; use 'many letters' or 'old letters'. 'It's' should agree with plural 'letters': use 'they are'. Remove filler words.

× Uh, I think that, uh, they can keep, uh, really touching and, uh, uh, sensitive letters for them, uh, in their homes.

✓ I think that they can keep really touching and personal letters in their homes.

Redundant and incorrect pronoun 'for them' after 'they' is unnecessary. 'Sensitive letters for them' is awkward; 'personal' or 'sentimental' is more natural. Remove fillers and duplicate words for clarity.

× Yes. For me, it's one of my essentials that I have to wear all with myself in my bag.

✓ Yes. For me, it's one of my essentials that I always carry in my bag.

Incorrect verb 'wear' for objects; use 'carry'. 'All with myself' is ungrammatical — use 'always' to express frequency. 'In my bag' is correct preposition.

× I usually, uh, wear the same, uh, notebook, uh, and the same pane with me, uh, if I want to uh, make a note or write a someone's number and so on.

✓ I usually carry the same notebook and the same pen with me if I want to make a note or write someone's number, and so on.

Use 'carry' not 'wear'. Correct spelling 'pen' not 'pane'. 'Write a someone's number' is incorrect article/pronoun use; use 'write someone's number'. Remove fillers and extra commas.

× When I was a young child, I used to make a different, uh, handcrafts, uh, with paper, specially origami, uh.

✓ When I was a young child, I used to make different handcrafts with paper, especially origami.

'A different handcrafts' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use 'different handcrafts' without 'a'. Spelling: 'specially' should be 'especially'. Remove fillers.

× It was fascinating process for me to umm, make different animals or, or things from paper.

✓ It was a fascinating process for me to make different animals or things from paper.

Missing article 'a' before 'fascinating process'. Remove repeated filler 'umm' and duplicate 'or'. Maintain infinitive 'to make' which is correct; just clean structure.