Clothing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct vocabulary for fabrics, avoid repetition, and give one short example with a linking word. Fix grammar (e.g., "close merits" unclear).

Exemplo: I like wearing colorful clothes, especially shades like pink, yellow and purple. In particular, I prefer high-quality fabrics such as silk and Duchess satin because they look elegant and feel smooth. For example, when I was little my mother often bought me bright dresses made of satin, which I still enjoy wearing.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, add a linked brief reason and one specific example. Correct tense and phrasing. Avoid incomplete sentence at the end.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed. For instance, I once attended a formal event in smart clothes and felt uncomfortable, so now I choose casual outfits for most social activities.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and vocabulary ("it got a lot" and "steal my brother's tissue" unclear). Keep to two or three sentences: a direct reason and one short supporting example. Avoid irrelevant details.

Exemplo: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to wash. For example, when my father returned from a trip to the US he brought back several T-shirts for me, and I still wear them often.

Sugestão: Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition ("waste a lot of time"). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "choose" instead of "waste").

Exemplo: Yes, I often spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes because I want to look neat and appropriate for each event. For example, before a party I try on several outfits to find one that is both smart and comfortable.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, grammatical contrast between weekdays and weekends in two sentences. Use linking words ("because", "whereas") and clean up awkward phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes. During weekdays I wear a nurse's uniform because of my job, whereas on weekends I prefer comfortable, casual clothes so I can relax and do household tasks.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer, then contrast past and present using correct tense and linking words. Clarify reasons with precise language (e.g., "doesn't attract attention"). Keep to three sentences maximum.

Exemplo: At the moment I prefer black clothing because it looks calm and neutral. Five years ago I liked pink because I enjoyed watching Barbie, but as I grew older my taste changed. I also choose black because it is low-maintenance and does not attract much attention.

× I love to wear colorful clothes like pink, lemon, purple.

✓ I love to wear colorful clothes in colors like pink, lemon, and purple.

The original sentence lists color words but lacks a preposition and conjunction for clarity; also 'lemon' should be 'lemon (yellow)' or 'lemon yellow' but keeping 'lemon' is acceptable as a color label. Use 'in colors like' to show these are examples and add 'and' before the final item to follow standard English list structure.

× Also I love close merits, good fabrics such as the cutting fabric, the Duchess and also the silk material.

✓ I also love close-fitting styles and good fabrics such as tweed, duchess satin, and silk.

The original uses nonstandard phrases ('close merits', 'cutting fabric', 'Duchess') and awkward word order. 'Close-fitting' correctly describes clothing that fits closely. 'Tweed' or other fabric names replace unclear terms; 'duchess satin' is the correct term for a type of silk/satin. Use parallel structure and commas to list fabrics.

× I remembered when for example when I was little, my mom got me a lot of colourful.

✓ I remember, for example, that when I was little, my mom bought me a lot of colorful clothes.

The speaker mixed past and present incorrectly: 'I remembered' sounds odd with a continuing recollection; use 'I remember' or rephrase with past simple. Also 'got' is less precise than 'bought' and the sentence lacks the noun 'clothes' after 'colorful'. Add commas and 'that' for clarity.

× There was a time that I went for an event with my friend to dress very smart, but I felt like dressing corporate is not my thing and it's make me really.

✓ There was a time when I went to an event with my friend and dressed very smartly, but I felt that dressing formally or corporately wasn't my thing and it really didn't suit me.

Problems: use 'when' (not 'that') for time clauses; 'went for an event' should be 'went to an event'; adverb 'smartly' modifies 'dressed'; 'dressing corporate' is ungrammatical — use 'dressing formally' or 'corporately'; 'it's make me really' is ungrammatical — intended meaning is 'it really didn't suit me' or 'it didn't feel right'. Fix tense and pronoun/reference errors and word forms.

× There was a time that my dad travelled to the US for vacation and it got a lot of T-shirts for himself.

✓ There was a time when my dad traveled to the US for vacation and he bought a lot of T-shirts for himself.

Use 'when' for time clauses. 'It got a lot of T-shirts' is incorrect; the subject should be 'he' and the verb is 'bought' (past simple) to indicate purchase. Also 'traveled' and 'bought' are standard verb choices.

× I begged him and he gave me some of the T-shirts he got for himself.

✓ I begged him and he gave me some of the T-shirts he had bought for himself.

Use past perfect 'had bought' to show the purchase occurred before he gave them away, improving sequence of events clarity. 'Got' is informal and ambiguous; 'bought' is more precise.

× Even now, I still steal my brother's tissue.

✓ Even now, I still steal my brother's T-shirts.

The sentence likely intended 'T-shirts' rather than 'tissue'. Correct the noun to match context. Also maintain present simple 'steal' if describing a habitual action; consider 'borrow' if the action is not actually theft.

× Yes, I spend a lot of time in choosing clothes.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

After 'spend time' use the verb + -ing without the preposition 'in'. Remove 'in' to use the correct collocation: 'spend time choosing'.

× And I do this so that I can appear very neat, very formal and also beautiful.

✓ And I do this so that I can appear neat, formal, and beautiful.

Reduce redundancy: 'very' repeated is unnecessary. Use parallel adjectives separated by commas and include the final 'and' for a proper list.

× So I think that's one of the main reasons why I waste lot of times when selecting clothes.

✓ So I think that's one of the main reasons why I waste a lot of time when selecting clothes.

Correct quantifier is 'a lot of time' (singular 'time' for amount) and include the article 'a' before 'lot'. 'Times' is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, and this is because during weekdays I work as a registered nurse, so I'm mostly on my uniform at work.

✓ Yes, and this is because during weekdays I work as a registered nurse, so I'm mostly in my uniform at work.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'uniform' to indicate wearing clothing. 'On my uniform' is incorrect.

× Why? As weekend I'm free, I'm at home, so I just like to wear something very comfortable and something very relaxed so I can carry out my daily choice.

✓ On weekends I'm free and at home, so I like to wear something very comfortable and relaxed so I can carry out my daily chores.

Use 'On weekends' (or 'At the weekend') and combine clauses with 'and'. 'Daily choice' is unclear — likely intended 'daily chores' or 'daily routine'. Use plural 'weekends' for habitual action.

× I love black clothes now, but if I was asked this question about five years ago, I would have pick.

✓ I love black clothes now, but if I had been asked this question about five years ago, I would have picked pink.

This is a third conditional: use past perfect 'had been asked' in the if-clause and 'would have picked' in the result clause. Also complete the thought by specifying 'pink' as the color.

× I would have picked pink because I love watching Barbie and Barbie is pink.

✓ I would have picked pink because I loved watching Barbie and Barbie was pink.

When explaining a past preference, use past tense 'loved' and 'was' to match the hypothetical past context. Alternatively keep present if implying a continuing preference, but to match the conditional past, past tense is clearer.

× But now as I transition into adulthood, I just love black because it is calm and it is neutral.

✓ But now, as I transition into adulthood, I just love black because it is calm and neutral.

Remove the repetitive 'it is' and use parallel adjectives 'calm and neutral'. Also add a comma after 'now' for clarity.

× I also like black because it doesn't even attract.

✓ I also like black because it doesn't attract attention.

The verb 'attract' needs an object; 'attract attention' completes the meaning. 'Doesn't even attract' is incomplete and ungrammatical.