Headphones— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons. Reduce hesitation and filler words (uh, um). Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas. Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a specific example (when/where).

Exemplo: I don't use headphones regularly. However, I wear them during one‑to‑one work meetings or when there is a lot of background noise, because they help me hear conversations more clearly.

Sugestão: Open with a clear statement of the type, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like “because” and avoid incorrect vocabulary (e.g., 'small butts'). Use precise words such as 'buds' or 'earbuds' and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I usually use Apple EarPods. I prefer them because they are lightweight and comfortable, and they fit well in my ear, which helps reduce background noise.

Sugestão: Give a clear present-tense statement about when you use headphones and give one specific example. Avoid long, unclear narratives and past-tense confusion. Use linking words like “for example” and keep it to 2–3 sentences. Be specific about the activity (e.g., studying, commuting) and the benefit.

Exemplo: I often use headphones in the morning when I commute to work. For example, I listen to English podcasts which make my commute more enjoyable and help me practice listening skills.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct statement of when you avoid headphones, then explain why with a clear reason. Use correct phrasing (e.g., 'it is disrespectful') and linking words like “because” or “when”. Keep it to 2 sentences and avoid hesitation.

Exemplo: I avoid using headphones in situations such as classes or on flights when people nearby are talking, because it can seem disrespectful and prevents me from hearing important announcements.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a balanced view: a topic sentence stating your general opinion, then one specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Use linking words like “however” or “although” to show contrast and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: In my opinion, wearing headphones can be comfortable for short periods, but they become uncomfortable if worn for a long time. For example, listening with EarPods all day can cause ear pain or irritation, so I prefer to take regular breaks.

× Well, I don't use headphones regularly, but when there is any meeting or any event where any, uh, to speak to my, uh, the employer manager or the employee one to one at that moment, I use headphones, uh, and for instance, I can say when there is lot of disturbance, uh, uh, in the surrounding, so I use.

✓ I don't use headphones regularly, but I use them when I have a meeting or a one-to-one conversation with my manager or an employee, for example when there is a lot of noise around.

The original sentence has confused structure, redundant words, and unclear references ('any', 'the employer manager or the employee one to one'). Reorganize the sentence into a clear main clause and supporting clause, replace vague words with precise ones ('meeting', 'one-to-one conversation', 'manager'), and use correct noun phrase 'a lot of noise'. Suggestion: plan the sentence before speaking, remove fillers, and use clear subject-verb-object order.

× I usually prefer Earpods, Apple Earpods because I find it very convenient and comfortable wearing it as it is very lightweight, small butts which I can easily place in my ear and listen the noise without any background disturbance.

✓ I usually prefer Apple EarPods because I find them very convenient and comfortable to wear; they are very lightweight and small, so I can easily place them in my ears and block out background noise.

Errors include incorrect pronoun agreement ('it' should be 'them' for plural 'EarPods'), awkward adjective use ('small butts' is incorrect), and incorrect verb form for purpose ('comfortable to wear'). Also 'listen the noise' is wrong; use 'block out background noise' or 'reduce background noise'. Suggestion: match pronouns to plural nouns, use correct collocations (comfortable to wear), and choose precise verbs for intended meaning.

× In the morning when I was computing for the exam, I was, uh, listening to the podcast, English podcast of uh, uh, and I find it very interesting and it has been my, uh, travel more easy and uh.

✓ In the morning when I was studying for the exam, I was listening to an English podcast, and I found it very interesting; it also made my travel easier.

Mixes past and present tenses incorrectly ('was listening' then 'I find'). Use past tense consistently when referring to a past event ('found', 'made my travel easier'). 'Computing for the exam' is incorrect; 'studying for the exam' is appropriate. Also use 'an English podcast' for correct article usage. Suggestion: decide on the time frame and keep verbs in the same tense; choose correct verbs for intended actions.

× When I'm attending any class or flight and another group of people having a discussion at that moment, I don't prefer using headphones as I found it very this respectful if I use around many people.

✓ When I'm attending a class or on a flight and another group of people are having a discussion, I prefer not to use headphones because I find it disrespectful to use them around many people.

Problems: wrong preposition 'in' vs 'on' for 'on a flight', missing auxiliary 'are' for progressive present, incorrect phrase 'I don't prefer using' should be 'I prefer not to use', and 'very this respectful' is wrong word order and word choice; use 'disrespectful'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for contexts ('on a flight'), include necessary auxiliary verbs, and use natural negative preference structures ('prefer not to').

× From my opinion, I think that wearing headphones or any gadget for a longer period may have many uh, adverse effect. Umm so. And I also feel very uncomfortable if I wear the Earpods for the longer period. I sometime I get angry.

✓ In my opinion, wearing headphones or any gadget for a long period may have many adverse effects. I also feel very uncomfortable if I wear EarPods for a long time; sometimes I even get irritated.

Problems: 'From my opinion' is incorrect — use 'In my opinion'; 'a longer period' should be 'a long period' or 'for a long time'; 'adverse effect' should be plural 'adverse effects' to match 'many'; pronoun/subject repetition 'I sometime I' is redundant; 'get angry' is awkward for physical discomfort — 'get irritated' fits better. Suggestion: use standard opinion phrase 'In my opinion', ensure noun number agreement, avoid repetition, and choose vocabulary that matches the intended meaning.