Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Usa oraciones más concisas y corrige pequeños errores gramaticales y de repetición. Enfócate en una oración tema seguida de 1–2 detalles específicos y usa conectores simples (because, so, however). Evita repetir palabras y usa vocabulario variado (e.g., uplifting, energetic).

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it energizes me and helps me focus on my daily tasks. For example, upbeat songs lift my mood and make me feel motivated to exercise or work, whereas sad music tends to make me feel low and distracted.

Sugestão: Simplifica la respuesta y usa conectores para organizar las ideas. Evita muletillas y repeticiones. Corrige concordancia de sujeto y verbo (music makes, not make). Añade un ejemplo concreto para mostrar cómo te afecta la música.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because upbeat rhythms and cheerful lyrics boost my energy. For instance, when I listen to lively pop songs while getting ready, I feel more enthusiastic and ready to start the day.

Sugestão: Corrige errores gramaticales ("it is" en lugar de "is is") y evita fragmentos incompletos. Mantén la estructura: respuesta directa + razón + ejemplo. Sé más específico sobre cuándo y cómo tomarías las clases.

Exemplo: No, I haven't taken music classes, but I would like to learn the guitar because it seems fun and social. If I start lessons next year, I could play simple songs at parties and accompany friends during gatherings.

Sugestão: Bien estructurado pero reduce muletillas (umm) y repeticiones. Usa conectores para contrastar ideas (however, but) y da ejemplos más específicos sobre el tipo de música para cada actividad.

Exemplo: Yes, sometimes I listen to music while eating or washing the dishes, but it depends on my mood. For example, I play calm acoustic music when I want to relax and upbeat tracks when I need energy to finish chores quickly.

× When I am listening sad music, I feel down, but when I am listening happy music, I feel happy, relaxed and motivated.

✓ When I listen to sad music, I feel down, but when I listen to happy music, I feel happy, relaxed, and motivated.

Use the simple present 'listen' with 'to' for habitual actions; 'am listening' suggests a continuous action and is unnecessary here. Also include the preposition 'to' after 'listen' and add a serial comma for clarity.

× because happy music is like something that make you feel happy, excited and motivated and you look all around you like brilliant and and you feel with more energy.

✓ because happy music is something that makes you feel happy, excited, and motivated; you feel like everything around you is bright and you have more energy.

Use 'makes' (third person singular) instead of 'make' and avoid 'is like something that' redundancy. Use 'feel like everything around you is bright' rather than 'look all around you like brilliant'. Remove extra 'and' and correct word order for clarity.

× Yes, of course, because happy music is like something that make you feel happy, excited and motivated and you look all around you like brilliant and and you feel with more energy.

✓ Yes, of course, because happy music is something that makes you feel happy, excited, and motivated; you feel like everything around you is bright and you have more energy.

Subject 'happy music' requires the verb 'makes' (third person singular). Ensure verb agrees with subject to form correct sentences.

× No, I haven't, but I would like to take music classes because is is something new for me and I can learn to play the piano or play the guitar.

✓ No, I haven't, but I would like to take music classes because it is something new for me and I can learn to play the piano or the guitar.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'is'. Use 'it is' to introduce the idea. Also include 'the' before 'guitar' for parallelism and remove duplicated 'is'.

× I would like to play the guitar because you can. You can go to to a party.

✓ I would like to play the guitar because then I could play at a party.

Original sentences are fragmented and use second person 'you' incorrectly. Combine ideas into a single sentence expressing purpose/result: 'I could play at a party.' Remove duplicated 'to'.

× Yes, sometimes I listen to music while I am eating or washing the dishes or something like that.

✓ Yes, sometimes I listen to music while I eat or wash the dishes or do something like that.

With 'while' to describe routine simultaneous actions, use simple present ('eat', 'wash') rather than present continuous. 'Do something like that' is more natural than 'something like that.'

× Umm it depends on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Remove filler 'Umm' in formal responses. Sentence is otherwise correct.

× Sometimes I just want to stay quiet in my house but other times I I want to listen to music while I'm doing my chores.

✓ Sometimes I just want to stay quiet in my house, but other times I want to listen to music while I do my chores.

Use simple present 'do' for habitual actions with 'while'. Remove duplicated 'I' and the contraction 'I'm' for consistency in style.