Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition and unnatural phrasing (e.g., “invoke my happy emotions” and “involve emotion within us”).

Exemplo: I prefer happy music. For example, upbeat pop songs lift my mood and make me feel energetic, so I often choose them when I want to relax or socialise.

Sugestão: Clarify vocabulary and structure. Use correct words and one clear example. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’ correctly. Avoid mispronounced or wrong words (e.g., “Applebee”, “life”, “extra”, “going down”).

Exemplo: Yes, it does, because the strong rhythm and catchy melody energise me. For example, when I listen to upbeat pop before going out, I feel more energetic and optimistic.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence, correct tense and natural phrasing. Give one or two specific details about lessons and what you gained. Avoid awkward expressions (e.g., “I'm easily to get the music better”).

Exemplo: Yes, I took music lessons when I was a child. For example, I learned piano and violin and had vocal training, which helped me understand rhythm and improved my singing.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a topic sentence and give specific situations using linking words (e.g., ‘when’, ‘while’, ‘so’). Avoid asking rhetorical questions in Part 1; instead give examples to clarify.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while studying or cooking. For example, I prefer instrumental or classical music when I study to stay focused, but I choose upbeat pop when I exercise or clean.

× Actually in my opinion I prefer happy music cause music can involve emotion within us and I enjoy immersing myself in a joyful atmosphere so the happy music can invoke my happy emotions and that is why I like it.

✓ Actually, in my opinion, I prefer happy music because music can involve emotions within us and I enjoy immersing myself in a joyful atmosphere, so happy music can evoke my positive emotions, and that is why I like it.

Errors: incorrect conjunction 'cause' (use 'because'), noun count/word choice 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions', unnecessary definite article 'the happy music' (use 'happy music'), wrong verb 'invoke' in this context better as 'evoke', and repetitive phrase 'happy emotions' better as 'positive emotions'. Also punctuation and sentence flow improvements. Suggestion: use 'because' in formal speech, match singular/plural for countable nouns, avoid unnecessary articles, choose verbs appropriate to emotion context (evoke), and simplify repetitive adjectives.

× Yes, Applebee music really makes me feel more excited because the rhythm and melody invoke happy feelings in me.

✓ Yes, upbeat music really makes me feel more excited because the rhythm and melody evoke happy feelings in me.

Errors: 'Applebee' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'upbeat' (adjective). Use present simple 'makes' is fine. 'Invoke' is less natural than 'evoke' for feelings. Suggestion: choose correct adjective 'upbeat' and prefer 'evoke' when speaking about causing feelings.

× For example, when I listen to life and pop song, when I extra or getting ready to go down, I feel more energetic and and optimistic.

✓ For example, when I listen to lively pop songs, or when I am getting ready to go out, I feel more energetic and optimistic.

Errors: 'life' should be 'lively' (adjective), 'song' should be plural 'songs' (singular/plural issue), duplicated 'when', ungrammatical fragment 'when I extra' unclear — likely 'or when I am getting ready to go out'. Incorrect verb form 'getting' needs auxiliary 'am'. Double 'and and' typo. Suggestion: use correct adjectives, match plural forms, include necessary auxiliary verbs for progressive forms ('I am getting'), and avoid duplicated words.

× Yes, I did. When I was younger I really enjoyed music so I took formal music lessons such as piano, guitar, violin and the vocal training so I'm easily to get the music better.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was younger I really enjoyed music, so I took formal music lessons such as piano, guitar, violin and vocal training, which helped me improve my musical skills easily.

Errors: awkward phrase 'the vocal training' — article unnecessary, 'so I'm easily to get the music better' is ungrammatical (incorrect use of 'I'm' and 'to get' and comparative). Correct tense remains past; recast to 'which helped me improve my musical skills easily'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles for general nouns, avoid incorrect 'to get' structures after 'easy', and use clear phrasing like 'helped me improve'.

× Yes I do and I often listen to music while doing other things, sometimes a lot of music and sometimes pop music depending on the situation.

✓ Yes, I do, and I often listen to music while doing other things: sometimes classical music and sometimes pop music, depending on the situation.

Errors: phrase 'a lot of music' is vague and unnatural; likely meant a genre (e.g., 'classical music') or 'lively music'. Punctuation needed. Suggestion: specify music types instead of 'a lot of music' and use commas or colons to clarify lists.

× What situation make me listen to what music?

✓ Which situations make me listen to which music?

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'situation make' should be 'situations make' or 'situation makes', incorrect word order for a question. Suggestion: use 'which' for choices and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct question word order for clarity.