Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., “make myself more cheer up” → “cheer myself up”).

Exemplo: I prefer both happy and sad music. For example, I usually play upbeat songs when cooking or exercising because they cheer me up and boost my energy. However, when I’m alone and about to sleep, I tend to listen to slow, sad songs to relax and reflect.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, then support it with one clear, specific reason and a brief example. Use correct collocations (e.g., “cheer me up” not “cheers me up for my work”) and reduce redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited. For instance, listening to lively pop songs while I clean helps me stay motivated and finish chores faster.

Sugestão: Organize the response: state your current situation, then give past experience with clear tense use. Use linking words like “however” or “when I was a child” and specify what you did in the music club to add detail.

Exemplo: I haven’t taken formal music classes, but when I was a child I joined a music club where I learned basic singing and played simple instruments. Nowadays I mostly listen to music and sometimes play tunes with my friends.

Sugestão: Begin with a concise topic sentence, then provide one or two specific activities and explain how music helps using correct grammar and fewer repeated words. Replace vague phrases like “feel free” with clearer benefits.

Exemplo: Yes, I listen to music almost all day, especially while commuting and doing housework. It lifts my mood and helps me feel more energetic and focused during tasks.

× Basically I prefer both.

✓ Basically, I prefer both.

Minor punctuation: add a comma after 'Basically' for natural flow. This is not a tense change but improves sentence clarity.

× When I when I am cooking or exercising or cleaning my house, that time I use happy music so I can make myself more cheer up and make more refresh.

✓ When I am cooking, exercising, or cleaning my house, I listen to happy music so I can cheer myself up and feel more refreshed.

Problems: repetition ('When I when I'), incorrect verb choice ('use' -> 'listen to'), incorrect reflexive placement and form ('make myself more cheer up' -> 'cheer myself up'), wrong adjective form ('make more refresh' -> 'feel more refreshed'). Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'listen to' for music, place reflexive pronoun correctly, and use past participle/adjective 'refreshed'.

× But when I am going to sleep but I am living alone, that time I used to hear sad music.

✓ But when I was going to sleep and was living alone, I used to listen to sad music then.

Mix of present continuous and past habit: 'am going' and 'am living' should be past ('was going', 'was living') to match 'used to'. Also 'hear' is less natural than 'listen to' for active listening. Reorganize 'that time' to 'then' for fluency.

× Yes, always happy music fills me feel more excited.

✓ Yes, happy music always makes me feel more excited.

Incorrect verb constructions: 'fills me feel' is ungrammatical. Use 'makes me feel' or 'fills me with' (e.g., 'fills me with excitement'). Also move 'always' to natural position before verb.

× Also it cheers me up for my work, for my cleaning home, also everything.

✓ It also cheers me up when I work, when I clean my home, and in many other situations.

Preposition 'for' is incorrect here; use 'when' to introduce situations. 'Cleaning home' should be 'clean my home'. Use parallel structure and add 'many other situations' for 'everything'.

× Basically I don't take any music classes but when I was child I was used to go to music club.

✓ Basically, I haven't taken any music classes, but when I was a child I used to go to a music club.

Tense and article issues: 'don't take' should be present perfect 'haven't taken' to indicate experience up to now. 'When I was child' needs article 'a child'. 'was used to go' is incorrect; use 'used to go' to describe a past habit. Add 'a' before 'music club'.

× Also I listen music and also play music with my friends.

✓ I also listen to music and play music with my friends.

Verb + preposition: 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Remove redundant 'also' or place it once ('I also').

× Almost every single time in my day I love to listen music.

✓ Almost every single time during my day, I love to listen to music.

Preposition 'in' should be 'during' for 'my day', and 'listen' needs 'to'. Add comma for natural pause. Placement of adverbial phrase 'almost every single time' is acceptable but adjust preposition.

× Of course it's helps me to give more cheer up also it makes me feel feel free and fresh and more energetic also.

✓ Of course, it helps cheer me up; it also makes me feel free, fresh, and more energetic.

Remove contraction error: 'it's helps' should be 'it helps'. 'to give more cheer up' is incorrect; use 'helps cheer me up'. Remove duplicate 'feel'. Use commas in a list and place 'also' appropriately. This fixes article/verb and word order issues.