Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase. Avoid short fragments and grammar mistakes (e.g., use gerunds and articles correctly).

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it boosts my energy and motivation. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs while commuting, I stay positive and focused for the day.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (use present simple and correct verb forms). Give one clear reason and one brief example connected with a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music makes me feel more energetic because its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics lift my mood. For example, I usually listen to lively tracks while commuting, which helps me feel motivated.

Sugestão: Be precise and grammatically correct. Use clear time references and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'violin lessons', 'how to hold the bow', 'basic history'). Avoid fillers and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I took violin lessons when I was 11. During the lessons I learned how to hold the violin and the bow, and I also learned a little about the instrument's history.

Sugestão: Answer directly, remove fillers, and fix grammar (use 'prefer' not 'refer', correct contractions and subject-verb agreement). Provide one linked supporting detail and a specific example of a song or routine.

Exemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while commuting or running because I prefer pop music for its catchy, uplifting lyrics. For instance, I usually play an energetic pop track in the morning to help me wake up and feel motivated.

× I prefer happy music because it keeps my energy and motivation up.

✓ I prefer happy music because it keeps my energy and motivation up.

No correction needed for pronouns; sentence is correct. However 'keeps my energy and motivation up' is acceptable. No change required.

× For example, listen to upbeat songs while commuting helps me stay positive.

✓ For example, listening to upbeat songs while commuting helps me stay positive.

The sentence incorrectly uses the base verb 'listen' where a gerund is required as the subject. Use the gerund 'listening' to function as a noun phrase subject. Suggestion: use 'listening to...' when describing an activity that helps.

× Positive and focus.

✓ They make me feel positive and focused.

Fragment lacking a verb and incorrect adjective form. Replace fragment with a full sentence, using 'feel' as the verb and 'focused' (adjective) to describe mental state. Suggestion: avoid fragments and ensure subject and predicate are present.

× Yes, uh choose phone music make me feel more energetic.

✓ Yes, choosing music on my phone makes me feel more energetic.

Incorrect verb forms and subject-verb agreement. 'choose phone music' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'choosing' as the activity and 'makes' to agree with singular subject. Also add possessive 'my' and natural word order.

× Uh, it's a bit lyrics and fast tempo can improve my mood.

✓ The lyrics and fast tempo can improve my mood.

Original uses 'it's a bit lyrics' which is ungrammatical. Remove 'it's a bit' and make a clear subject 'The lyrics and fast tempo'. Alternatively, 'Their lyrics and fast tempo...' Ensure proper noun/pronoun agreement and clarity.

× For example, I usually listening lively tracks while commuting, it's help me more energetic and motivation.

✓ For example, I usually listen to lively tracks while commuting; they help me feel more energetic and motivated.

Use base verb 'listen' after 'usually'. Replace comma splice with semicolon or period. 'it's help' is incorrect; use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'tracks' and 'help me feel' plus adjective 'motivated'. Suggestion: ensure verb forms match auxiliaries and pronouns.

× I took a violin lesson, uh, last summer when I was 11 and I learned, I learnt how to hold the instruments and bow robbery, uh, and I uh, learner a little knowledge about the violin history.

✓ I took violin lessons last summer when I was 11, and I learned how to hold the instrument and the bow, and I learned a little about the history of the violin.

Multiple issues: 'lesson' -> plural 'lessons' fits context; inconsistent past tense 'learned/learnt' unify to 'learned'. 'instruments' should be singular 'instrument' and 'bow robbery' is nonsensical; replace with 'the bow'. 'learner a little knowledge about the violin history' is incorrect word choice and word order; use 'learned a little about the history of the violin'. Use past simple consistently.

× Do you listen to music while doing other things?

✓ Do you listen to music while doing other things?

Sentence is correct in present simple for habitual action. No change needed.

× Of course, uh, I usually uh, listen to music while commuting and running and I refer pop music because of it's catchy and uplifting lyrics.

✓ Of course, I usually listen to music while commuting and running, and I prefer pop music because it's catchy and has uplifting lyrics.

Use 'prefer' not 'refer'. Remove filler 'uh'. 'it's' contraction is fine but 'because of it's catchy' is wrong structure; use 'because it's catchy' or 'because of its catchiness'. Also add 'has' before 'uplifting lyrics' for clarity.

× It's make me feel more energetic.

✓ It makes me feel more energetic.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It' requires third person singular verb 'makes'. Replace 'make' with 'makes'.

× So umm. For instance, I usually listen to a beatbox song in the morning to start.

✓ For instance, I usually listen to a beatbox song in the morning to start my day.

First fragment 'So umm.' is filler and incomplete; remove it. Add object 'my day' to clarify 'to start'. Suggestion: avoid fillers and complete the thought.