Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and direct: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid repetition and grammatical mistakes (e.g., 'I listened and sad music' -> 'if I listen to sad music'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' correctly. Keep answers to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and gives me energy to start the day. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs in the morning I feel more motivated and positive, whereas sad songs usually make the whole day feel gloomy.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating words and hesitations. Give a concise direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and one clear example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'made me feel' -> 'makes me feel', 'who full of bright future' -> 'who is full of hope about the future'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, it definitely does because upbeat melodies boost my motivation and confidence. For example, listening to cheerful pop songs in the morning makes me feel energetic and optimistic about the day ahead.

Sugestão: Give a clear concise statement about past experience, use correct tense and clearer nouns. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases ('education was a child'). Provide one or two specific details about what you learned and how it helped you. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' properly.

Exemplo: Yes, I took music classes as a child when my mother enrolled me to learn the guzheng, a traditional Chinese instrument. Although I wasn't very skilled, the lessons taught me basic musical concepts and gave me an appreciation for traditional music.

Sugestão: Answer directly, with a topic sentence then specific examples of activities and types of music. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I listening music' -> 'I listen to music', 'when I started in the library' -> 'when I study in the library'). Use linking words 'for example' and 'while' properly and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes, I'm a big music fan and I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, when I study in the library I play upbeat tracks to stay motivated, while during a shower I prefer calm, smooth music to relax and refresh my mind.

× Because the emotion contained in this kind of music can help me be more energetic and to help me start a day for passion.

✓ Because the emotion contained in this kind of music can help me be more energetic and help me start my day with passion.

The original sentence uses an infinitive 'to help' after 'can' and repeats the verb unnecessarily. Use parallel structure: 'can help me be... and help me start...' or omit 'to'. Also 'start a day for passion' is unnatural; use 'start my day with passion' to show manner.

× What purpose is happy music?

✓ What is the purpose of happy music?

The original word order is incorrect for asking about purpose. Use 'What is the purpose of X?' to form a correct question about function or reason.

× Uh, but I for example, I listened and sad music to start my morning, then my whole day will be gloomy and depressing.

✓ For example, if I listen to sad music to start my morning, my whole day will be gloomy and depressing.

Use conditional structure 'if I listen' for habitual or possible situations and correct verb form 'listen' (base form) after 'if'. Also 'listened and sad music' is incorrect word order; use 'listen to sad music'.

× So most of the time I avoid to listening to sad songs.

✓ So most of the time I avoid listening to sad songs.

After 'avoid' use the gerund without 'to' (avoid + -ing). 'Avoid to listening' is ungrammatical.

× As I mentioned before, happy music can help me be more motivated and made me feel I'm a I'm, I'm a ambitious young man who full of bright future.

✓ As I mentioned before, happy music can help me be more motivated and make me feel I'm an ambitious young man full of a bright future.

Parallelism: after 'can help' use base form verbs: 'be' and 'make'. 'Made' is past tense and incorrect. Use article 'an' before 'ambitious' and 'full of a bright future' needs article 'a' and remove extra 'I'm' repetitions.

× So, uh, I always choose to listen harp music in the morning to start a beautiful day.

✓ So I always choose to listen to harp music in the morning to start a beautiful day.

Add preposition 'to' after 'listen' (listen to something). Also 'harp music' is fine but needs 'to' for correct verb-object structure. Removed filler 'uh'.

× Yes, education was a child.

✓ Yes, I had music education as a child.

The original is ungrammatical. Use 'I had music education as a child' or 'I received music education as a child' to express past experience.

× My mom took me to an uh, courses set to teach kids how to play and, and, and traditional Chinese instrument named Gu Zheng.

✓ My mom took me to a course to teach kids how to play the traditional Chinese instrument called the guzheng.

Use singular 'a course' (or 'courses' with plural agreement) and 'to teach' is correct. 'Traditional Chinese instrument named Gu Zheng' should be 'the traditional Chinese instrument called the guzheng.' Also remove filler repetition and fix article use.

× But unfortunately I didn't play it very well.

✓ But unfortunately I couldn't play it very well.

While 'didn't play it very well' can be grammatical, native speakers more naturally say 'couldn't play it very well' to express inability in the past. Use 'couldn't' for past ability.

× But it really helped me to bring you some sense of music and the sense of authentic.

✓ But it really helped me develop a sense of music and an appreciation for authenticity.

'Bring you some sense of music' is unnatural; use 'develop a sense of music.' 'Sense of authentic' is incorrect; use 'appreciation for authenticity.' Also 'helped me to' can be 'helped me' without 'to.'

× Yes, it appears I'm a big music fan. I listening music.

✓ Yes, it appears I'm a big music fan. I listen to music.

'I listening music' is wrong; use present simple 'I listen to music' for habitual actions and include preposition 'to'.

× For example, when I started in the library, I like to listen some upbeat music that can make me feel energetic and motivated to finish my tasks or finish my study.

✓ For example, when I study in the library, I like to listen to upbeat music that makes me feel energetic and motivated to finish my tasks or my study.

'Started in the library' is wrong contextually; likely 'study in the library.' Use 'listen to' and do not use 'some' before uncountable 'upbeat music' optionally. Use present simple 'make'->'makes' to agree with singular 'music' or treat as general: 'that makes me.' Also 'finish my study' -> 'finish my studies' or 'finish my study' with article; changed to 'my study.'

× And while my best during my shower I will listen some smooth music that can help me refresh my mind.

✓ And while taking a shower I listen to some smooth music that helps me refresh my mind.

Use 'while taking a shower' or 'in the shower.' Use present simple 'I listen' for habitual action rather than 'I will listen.' Use 'listen to' and 'helps' to agree with singular 'music.' 'My best' is unclear and removed.