Teachers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류와 중복 표현(예: "she's she's")이 있습니다. 단수·복수 일치 오류("persons")와 어순 문제도 보입니다. 질문에 대한 명확한 주제 문장 뒤에 간단한 이유를 추가하세요. 연결어(so, because)를 적절히 사용하고 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Exemplo: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school art teacher because she was friendly and very energetic. She encouraged creativity and made classes enjoyable, so I looked forward to her lessons.

Sugestão: 의도가 불분명하고 문법과 어휘 선택이 크게 부정확합니다("such as like", "very looks so special persons", "very cruel"). 의미 전달을 위해 간단하고 명확한 표현을 사용하세요. 왜 교수직을 원하는지 이유와 감정(예: 존경, 영향력)을 구체적으로 제시하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to be a university art professor because I enjoy teaching advanced students and researching art. I believe being a professor would let me share my passion and guide young artists.

Sugestão: 문장 구조가 혼란스럽고 불필요한 반복과 잡음(uh) 때문에 의미가 흐려집니다. 시간 표현을 명확히 하고, 교사의 특징과 구체적인 예를 1~2문장으로 정리하세요. 형용사 활용도 정확히 하세요 (friendly, kind, good at teaching).

Exemplo: Yes. I remember a teacher from elementary school who taught me at a medical academy program. She was very kind and an excellent teacher who explained difficult topics clearly and patiently.

Sugestão: 의사 전달은 되지만 문법(‘teachers number’, 시제, 비교 표현)과 어휘 선택이 어색합니다. 이유를 논리적으로 연결해서 간결하게 말하세요. 전화번호가 없다는 표현은 "contact details" 또는 "their phone numbers"로 고치세요.

Exemplo: Not really. I don't have my primary teachers' contact details, so I haven't kept in touch. Also, it's hard to remember many details because it was so long ago.

Sugestão: 표현이 파편적이고 문법이 틀렸습니다("My favorite artistic", 동사 형태, 명사구). 구체적인 도움의 예를 명확한 문장으로 정리하세요(예: 기술, 피드백, 과제). 연결어로 순서를 매기면 더 좋습니다.

Exemplo: My favorite teacher taught me practical skills, such as how to hold a paintbrush and mix colors to create value and shape. She also gave helpful feedback that improved my drawing and composition.

Sugestão: 비교 표현이 어색하고 이유 제시가 불명확합니다("special moment in primary school teachers"). 단순한 비교 문장으로 시작하고 구체적 이유(더 많은 연락, 기억에 남는 경험 등)를 이어서 설명하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer my high school teachers because I had more memorable experiences with them and I still keep in touch with several of them. They supported my artistic development and stayed involved after graduation.

× Of course, my favorite teacher is my art teacher in my high school because she's she's very friendly and very energetic persons.

✓ Of course, my favorite teacher is my art teacher from high school because she is very friendly and very energetic.

The word 'persons' is incorrect when describing a single teacher; use singular adjective forms. Remove the duplicated 'she's'. Suggestion: use 'she is' and describe one person with adjectives (friendly, energetic). Ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid redundant words.

× Yes, I want to be a teacher at university such as like art professor because very looks so special persons and very cruel.

✓ Yes, I want to be a university teacher, such as an art professor, because art looks very special to me and sometimes feels strict.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and word choice. Use 'a university teacher' or 'a teacher at a university' and article 'an' before 'art professor'. 'Because very looks so special persons and very cruel' is ungrammatical; clarify meaning (I assume the student means art seems special and professors can be strict). Improve word order and use appropriate adjectives and nouns.

× Yes, when I went to the Med Academy, uh, when I was elementary school, she was very friendly and kindly first a good at teaching for students.

✓ Yes, when I went to the Med Academy and when I was in elementary school, she was very friendly and kind and very good at teaching students.

Multiple issues: missing preposition 'in' for 'in elementary school', incorrect adverb 'kindly' should be adjective 'kind', and awkward phrase 'first a good at teaching for students' should be 'very good at teaching students'. Clarify sequence and use correct forms (adjective vs adverb), and remove filler words.

× Not really because I don't have any primary school teachers number so I couldn't contact to them and then I couldn't remember well because it's very younger.

✓ Not really, because I don't have any primary school teachers' phone numbers, so I couldn't contact them, and I don't remember well because it was a long time ago.

Use possessive form 'teachers'' for 'teachers' phone numbers' and plural 'numbers'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'contact'. 'It's very younger' is ungrammatical; use 'it was a long time ago' or 'I was very young'. Maintain consistent tense.

× My favorite artistic always teaching to you know, like how to use the paintbrush and then how to use in value and shape. How do I contrast the art skill?

✓ My favorite art teacher always taught me, you know, how to use the paintbrush and how to use value and shape to create contrast in my art skills.

'Artistic' is the wrong noun; use 'art teacher' or 'art' context. Use past tense 'taught' to match 'always' in past context, or present simple if ongoing. 'Always teaching to you know' is incorrect; use 'always taught me'. 'How to use in value and shape' should be 'how to use value and shape'. 'How do I contrast the art skill?' should be rephrased to 'how to create contrast in my art skills'.

× I really like my high school teachers more because I don't have any special moment in primary school teachers. So now that I always contact to high school teachers.

✓ I really like my high school teachers more because I don't have any special memories with my primary school teachers. So now I always keep in contact with my high school teachers.

'Primary school teachers' requires possessive 'with my primary school teachers' and 'moment' should be 'memories'. 'Always contact to' is incorrect; use 'keep in contact with' or 'always stay in touch with'. Ensure consistent pronoun use and prepositions.