Teachers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (what she did, how it affected you). Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words (for example, because) to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: Yes. My favorite teacher was my first-grade teacher because she was very patient and encouraging. For example, she stayed after class to help me with reading, which made me much more confident in school.

Sugestão: Answer directly and organize chronologically: state your current position first, then briefly explain past influence and the reason for the change. Remove hesitations and repeated phrases. Use linking words like however or but to show contrast.

Exemplo: No, I don't want to be a teacher now. Although my mother was an elementary teacher and I admired her when I was a child, my interests have changed; for example, I prefer working with technology rather than teaching.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher or subject, then explain specifically how they helped you with one or two concrete examples. Use linking words (for instance, because) to connect causes and effects and avoid vague filler phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember my high school history teacher because she respected my opinions and challenged me to think critically. For instance, she encouraged class debates and gave me extra reading materials, which improved my confidence and grades.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer (yes or no) and give one clear, relevant reason without irrelevant self-deprecating comments. Use one linking word (because) and keep to two or three sentences max.

Exemplo: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I tend to be introverted and felt too shy to reconnect. However, I would like to contact them someday to thank them.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement of how they helped you, then give one concise specific example of support and its result. Avoid vague wording and indirect phrasing; use linking words like for example or therefore to connect points.

Exemplo: She supported me emotionally during a serious argument with classmates. For example, she listened to my side, spoke to other students and their parents on my behalf, and as a result I felt understood and the conflict was resolved.

Sugestão: Answer directly and briefly whether you prefer one group or not, then give one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid vague, repetitive statements and use linking words like because or so to show logic.

Exemplo: I don't compare them because each group helped me in different ways. For instance, my primary teachers made learning fun, while my high school teachers pushed me to think more critically.

× Yes. Like when I was in elementary school, I I have a female teacher at my first grade and she used to be so nice and like, very tolerant, but not like, yeah.

✓ Yes. When I was in elementary school, I had a female teacher in my first grade who was very nice and tolerant.

The original combines present and past improperly ('I have' vs past context) and repeats words ('I I'); it also uses informal fillers ('like', 'yeah') and a run-on structure. Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was', replace 'at my first grade' with 'in my first grade', and combine clauses with a relative pronoun for clarity. Remove filler words for formal grammar.

× OK so my mom was a my mom was a teacher in elementary school but I've never been taught by her.

✓ My mom was a teacher in elementary school, but I was never taught by her.

Mixes past simple and present perfect awkwardly and repeats phrase 'my mom was a'. Use past simple 'I was never taught' to match the past time frame and remove repetition for clarity.

× But since when I since I was a little child I look up to look up at her and I was like I would like to be a teacher when I was older but turns out now I did not want to be a teacher.

✓ Since I was a child, I looked up to her and wanted to be a teacher when I was older, but it turned out I did not want to become one.

Tense inconsistencies ('since I was' with present 'I look up', then past and present conflict 'turns out now I did not'). Use past tense 'looked up' and 'wanted' for past intentions, and 'it turned out' to indicate a later change. Replace 'become one' to avoid repetition. Remove redundant phrases.

× Yeah, when I was in high school, I was like one of the Northeast how to say no, I'm I was not naughty, but I was like, I have my own opinions and I don't always follow all the rules.

✓ When I was in high school, I was not naughty, but I had my own opinions and I did not always follow the rules.

Contains disfluencies and unclear phrase 'one of the Northeast how to say'. Replace informal fillers ('like') and correct tense: use past 'had' and 'did not' to describe past behavior. Simplify 'all the rules' to 'the rules' for natural English.

× And at that time my teacher helps me a lot and I really appreciate it.

✓ At that time my teacher helped me a lot and I really appreciated it.

Mixes present tense 'helps' with past context 'at that time'. Use past simple 'helped' and 'appreciated' to maintain consistent past narrative.

× Snow I did not have any like remain communication with my like with my past teachers because I'm like kind of introverted and I'm always like the naughtiest kind of fat student.

✓ No, I did not remain in contact with my past teachers because I am rather introverted and was too shy to reconnect.

'Snow' likely intended 'No'; phrase 'remain communication' is incorrect—use 'remain in contact' or 'stay in touch'. Avoid excessive 'like' fillers. 'Naughtiest kind of fat student' is unclear and inappropriate; change to 'was too shy' to express reluctance. Maintain tense consistency: past action with past explanation.

× So I was a bit shy to reconnect.

✓ So I was a bit too shy to reconnect.

Missing modifier 'too' makes sentence slightly awkward; adding 'too' clarifies degree. Tense 'was' is correct for past explanation.

× I remember once I was like having a very serious uh argument with my classmates.

✓ I remember once I had a very serious argument with my classmates.

Use simple past 'had' instead of progressive 'was having' for a single past event when telling a story. Remove filler words for clarity.

× So their parents were like, she was right.

✓ So their parents said their child was right.

Original 'so their parents were like, she was right' uses colloquial 'were like' and unclear pronoun 'she'—use 'their child' or specify gender. Use 'said' instead of 'were like' for formal grammar.

× Like expressing like their child was right.

✓ They expressed that their child was right.

Replace informal filler 'like' and restructure to a full clause 'They expressed that...' for grammatical correctness.

× But turns out it's hurtful and my teacher does support me.

✓ But it turned out to be hurtful, and my teacher supported me.

Tense inconsistency: 'turns out' and 'does support' (present) conflict with past narrative. Use past 'turned out' and 'supported'. Also replace 'it's hurtful' with 'to be hurtful' for clarity.

× Well, I did not put them in comparison.

✓ Well, I do not compare them.

Original 'did not put them in comparison' is awkward. If speaking generally, use present 'do not compare them'. If referring to past, 'I did not compare them' would be acceptable; choose tense based on context. Here present fits the habitual action.

× So also it's like I observe any, I observe people by my view and my view and they live like treating me in a very different way, but I can feel.

✓ I observe people from my own perspective, and I can feel that they treat me differently.

Original is repetitive and contains filler 'like' and unclear phrases. Use 'from my own perspective' and simplify to one clear clause. 'They treat me differently' is the correct phrasing. Maintain present tense for general statement.