Teachers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent: open with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and provide two specific supporting details with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'support our speaking' instead of 'support our conversation').

Exemplo: My favorite teacher is my English teacher. She made lessons engaging, so I participated actively, and she always gave constructive feedback that improved my speaking. For example, she corrected my pronunciation patiently and assigned useful speaking tasks, which boosted my confidence.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer, then briefly explain the change in career preference using linking words (e.g., 'although', 'however'). Avoid repetition and hesitations; choose clearer phrasing like 'I now prefer to be a software engineer.'

Exemplo: No, I don't. Although I once dreamed of becoming a math teacher because I enjoyed working with children, I now prefer a career as a software engineer because I like problem-solving and building applications.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and more precise details (e.g., specific qualities and an example). Reduce repetition and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes. I still remember my seventh-grade math teacher because he taught geometry and algebra clearly and patiently. For example, he would explain difficult problems several times using different methods, which helped everyone understand.

Sugestão: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and use a conditional structure to describe what you would do. Keep it to two or three sentences and use natural phrasing (e.g., 'I would greet them and catch up briefly').

Exemplo: No, I'm not. We lost contact after primary school, but if I met a former teacher by chance, I would greet them and have a short conversation to catch up on how they are doing.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and be specific about the help you received. Start with a topic sentence, then give two concrete examples with linking words like 'for instance' or 'also'.

Exemplo: She helped me improve my English and my projects. For instance, she taught me web-development basics and how to present my work effectively, which made my project much more successful.

Sugestão: Provide a clear comparison with structured reasons using linking words ('because', 'while'). Avoid fillers and correct phrasing (e.g., 'didn't pay attention to my talents'). Keep it concise and specific.

Exemplo: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they gave me more freedom and helped me develop my portfolio. In contrast, my primary school teachers paid less attention to my talents and interests.

× And my favorite teacher is my English teacher since she started, uh, teaching us, uh, I started, uh, loving her lessons.

✓ My favorite teacher has been my English teacher since she started teaching us; I began to love her lessons.

Use present perfect for a situation that started in the past and continues to the present ('has been'). Also replace 'I started loving' with 'I began to love' for natural phrasing and use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses.

× I was participating actively in her lessons and so on.

✓ I participate actively in her lessons.

If the teacher still teaches and the action is habitual or ongoing, use simple present 'participate' rather than past progressive. Keep the sentence concise; avoid vague 'and so on.'

× Uh, she's very kind and uh, she understands all students and can support, uh, our conversation.

✓ She is very kind, understands all the students, and can support our conversations.

Use 'the students' for a specific group and plural 'conversations' for general ability. Also maintain consistent subject reference without filler hesitations.

× Unfortunately, no, but it was my dream to be a math teacher and uh, I loved working with students, with kids because, uh, I found it interesting.

✓ Unfortunately, no. It was my dream to be a math teacher, and I loved working with students and children because I found it interesting.

Replace the repeated 'with' structure with 'students and children' for parallelism and clarity. Use a period to separate sentences. 'Kids' is informal; 'children' fits a formal test tone.

× However, uh, now I prefer working as umm, software engineer.

✓ However, now I prefer working as a software engineer.

Include the indefinite article 'a' before 'software engineer' and use simple present 'prefer' with gerund 'working'.

× In 7th grade we had amazing teacher and it was math teacher.

✓ In 7th grade we had an amazing teacher, and he was a math teacher.

Add the article 'an' before 'amazing teacher' and 'a' before 'math teacher'. Also specify pronoun 'he' because the teacher is male in following context.

× He was teaching us geometry and algebra.

✓ He taught us geometry and algebra.

Use simple past 'taught' to describe a completed past action in 7th grade rather than past continuous unless emphasizing duration.

× We loved and appreciated how he treated us because he could understand us, he could explain something more more than three times even.

✓ We loved and appreciated how he treated us because he understood us and could explain things more than three times when necessary.

Use parallel verbs in past tense 'understood' and 'could explain' for clarity. Remove duplicate 'more' and change 'something' to 'things' and add 'when necessary' for natural phrasing.

× And we all love him nowadays even still.

✓ And we all still love him nowadays.

Place adverb 'still' correctly before 'love' and use 'nowadays' as optional; avoid redundant 'even still.'

× Actually no, because we lost connection after primary school.

✓ Actually, no, because we lost touch after primary school.

Use the idiomatic expression 'lose touch' rather than 'lose connection.' Add a comma after 'Actually.'

× However, I will always remember them and if I accidentally met someone from the primary school I would I would greet and uh have a little conversation about how are they doing and so on.

✓ However, I will always remember them, and if I accidentally met someone from primary school I would greet them and have a short conversation about how they are doing.

Use 'them' as object pronoun, remove duplicate 'I would', place 'greet them' and 'have a short conversation' in logical order, and use correct word order 'how they are doing.'

× Once my English teacher helps me to enhance my English level and even she helps me to improve my project.

✓ Once my English teacher helped me improve my English and even helped me with my project.

Use past tense 'helped' for a specific past occasion ('Once') and use 'helped me with my project' for natural collocation. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help.'

× She taught me how to create websites, how to attract people and so on.

✓ She taught me how to create websites and how to attract people.

Remove 'and so on' for clarity in a test answer; the sentence is correct otherwise. Keep parallel 'how to' structures.

× And I really appreciate that she helped me that time because I couldn't rely on other teachers and she was the only one.

✓ I really appreciate that she helped me at that time because I couldn't rely on other teachers; she was the only one who did.

Use 'at that time' for clarity, keep past tense 'couldn't rely', and add 'who did' to complete comparison. A semicolon improves sentence flow.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

Question sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× Definitely not. And high school teachers were way better than primary school teachers because they didn't, uh, give me so much pressure and helped me to, uh, to improve My Portfolio portfolio, while uh, primary school teachers, uh, didn't pay attention for my talents and my potential.

✓ Definitely not. High school teachers were much better than primary school teachers because they did not put so much pressure on me and helped me improve my portfolio, while primary school teachers did not pay attention to my talents and potential.

Replace informal 'way better' with 'much better' for formal tone, use 'put pressure on' collocation, remove redundant 'to', lowercase 'portfolio', and use 'pay attention to' (not 'for'). Use consistent past tense 'did not.'