Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'child' -> 'childhood', 'need and' -> 'neat and').

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a clean environment helps me concentrate. For example, during my childhood I always kept my room and school uniform neat, which made me feel organized and confident.

Sugestão: Answer directly, reduce hesitations and correct common errors. Use past tense consistently ('when I was a child') and replace vague phrases ('it is my weakness') with clearer reasons. Limit to two or three sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because I liked everything in order. For instance, I cleaned my room every weekend so that guests would feel comfortable when they visited.

Sugestão: Be specific about methods and use clear sentence structure. Mention concrete actions (e.g., organizing files, removing clutter daily) and use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' to make the response coherent. Avoid awkward phrases and ensure subject-verb agreement.

Exemplo: I keep my work and study space tidy by clearing my desk at the end of each day and organizing documents into folders. For example, at G Hawks I only keep essential items on the table so I can focus without distractions.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and support it with a concise reason. Avoid filler words and unclear generalizations. Use correct vocabulary ('depends on the person', 'living conditions') and one linking word like 'however' or 'because' to connect the idea and reason.

Exemplo: I think being tidy is generally necessary because it improves productivity and hygiene. However, it can depend on a person's circumstances — for example, someone living in a crowded or poor area may find it harder to keep things tidy.

× Yes, I like to keep things ready because I believe that if I keep the things neat and clean then everything is clean.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I believe that if I keep them neat and clean, everything will be in order.

The sentence misuses the article 'the' before 'things' and repeats 'clean'. Replace 'the things' with the pronoun 'them' for natural reference, and use 'tidy' instead of 'ready'. Also add 'will be' to show result; keep wording concise.

× For example when I was at the child then I need to keep the my room need and clean and when I was at the school my uniform always neat and clean and my shoes as.

✓ For example, when I was a child I needed to keep my room neat and clean, and when I was at school my uniform and shoes were always neat and clean.

Use 'a child' not 'at the child' (article error and preposition misuse). 'Need' should be past 'needed' to match past tense. Remove extra 'the' before 'my room'. Use plural agreement and proper verb 'were' for 'uniform and shoes'.

× Yes, I used to keep my room umm tidy as a child.

✓ Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child.

'Used to' is fine but add 'when I was a child' for clarity and remove filler 'umm'. Keep past reference consistent.

× When I was at the child, I always need and clean my room because it is a my weakness.

✓ When I was a child, I always needed to clean my room because it was a personal weakness of mine.

'At the child' is incorrect; use 'a child'. 'Need and clean' is ungrammatical—use 'needed to clean'. Remove unnecessary article 'a' before 'my weakness' and rephrase to 'a personal weakness of mine' for clarity.

× Uh, because I believe that if I need and clean the room then everything is good.

✓ I believe that if I clean the room, everything will be better.

Avoid beginning with 'because' after 'uh'; restructure sentence. Use present simple 'clean' in conditional 'if' for general truth, and 'will be' or 'is' for result. 'Need and clean' is incorrect; use 'clean'.

× If anyone come in my home then they appreciate me as well for example.

✓ If anyone comes to my home, they appreciate it and compliment me, for example.

Use third-person singular 'comes' (subject-verb agreement). Use preposition 'to' with 'come', and 'appreciate me' is awkward—better 'appreciate it and compliment me'. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, I keep my work and study space tidy because I believe that where I do the work the area is very neat and clean and ends as well where I do the job at the G Hawks company where I just focus on the things and I not too much thing on my table because I don't like it.

✓ Yes, I keep my work and study space tidy because I believe that the area where I work should be neat and clean. At G Hawks company, I focus on the tasks and do not keep many things on my table because I don't like clutter.

Original has incorrect and missing prepositions and poor sentence structure. Use 'where I work' not 'where I do the work'. 'Ends as well' is unclear and removed. 'Do not keep many things on my table' corrects grammar and meaning. 'Clutter' is a clearer noun.

× Uh, I think so that it is necessary, but it's depend on the, uh, person because most of the people are not to become, uh, uh, tidy because he just, uh, he just live in the bad area.

✓ I think it is necessary, but it depends on the person; many people are not tidy because they live in poor conditions.

Use 'depends' (subject-verb agreement) instead of 'depend'. Remove filler words. 'Are not to become tidy' is wrong—use 'are not tidy'. Replace 'he' with plural 'they' to match 'many people'. Use 'poor conditions' instead of 'bad area'.

× So it's depend on the personal and personality.

✓ So it depends on the person and their personality.

Use 'person' instead of 'personal'; 'depends' for subject-verb agreement. Use 'their' as a gender-neutral possessive pronoun. 'Personality' is fine but must pair correctly.

× Uh, most of the people are just like to think that it is a very necessary.

✓ Most people think that being tidy is very necessary.

'Are just like to think' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'think'. Remove filler 'uh'. Use gerund 'being tidy' as subject. 'A very necessary' needs a noun—use 'very necessary' with gerund.