Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and informal filler words like 'you know'.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually like to keep my home tidy. However, I find it difficult to maintain because after cleaning, clutter often returns within two or three days. Therefore, I have to clean regularly, which can be tiring.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and then support it with a clear specific example. Correct pronoun and tense errors and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words like 'however' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, I was quite tidy as a child. However, my parents still frequently reminded me to clean my room and desk, for example by telling me to put toys away every evening.

Sugestão: Structure your answer: state a method, then give a specific example. Use correct verb forms and clearer descriptions. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also'.

Exemplo: I try to keep my study space organised by assigning a place for each item. For example, I keep pens in a cup, documents in a folder, and a small bin beside me for rubbish, so I can quickly return items to their place.

Sugestão: Answer directly then explain with specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' and avoid awkward phrasing. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Exemplo: I think the importance of tidiness depends on the person. For me, I prefer to keep my bed and living area clean because it affects my rest, but I don't spend much time making my workspace perfect because that would be too time-consuming and tiring.

× Yes, most of the time I do, but you know, it is hard to keep things always being a tidy period.

✓ Yes, most of the time I do, but you know, it is hard to keep things tidy all the time.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words ('being a tidy period'). The phrase 'always being a tidy period' is ungrammatical. Use 'all the time' to indicate continuous frequency and place 'tidy' after 'keep things'. Suggestion: simplify to 'keep things tidy all the time.'

× Sometimes I just clean the room and maybe it can't spend too long time, maybe two or three days it become dirty again.

✓ Sometimes I just clean the room but it doesn't stay clean for long; after two or three days it becomes dirty again.

Errors: incorrect modal/auxiliary 'can't spend too long time', wrong tense and verb forms ('become' -> 'becomes'). Use present simple for habitual facts: 'it doesn't stay clean for long' and 'it becomes dirty again.' Also use proper phrasing 'for long' and semicolon or conjunction to join clauses.

× I need to clean it again. Tired.

✓ I need to clean it again. I feel tired.

'Tired' alone is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Add subject and verb ('I feel tired') to form a complete sentence.

× Yes I guess so. I believe I was a tidy man when I was a child but my parents seems not very agreed with that.

✓ Yes, I guess so. I believe I was a tidy boy when I was a child, but my parents did not really agree with that.

Multiple issues: 'parents seems' should be 'parents seem' (subject-verb agreement) or better 'did not really agree' to indicate past disagreement. 'Tidy man when I was a child' is odd; 'tidy boy' is appropriate. Use past simple 'did not agree' for past time.

× He al she always told me that clean up your room, clean up your desk and such as this.

✓ He or she always told me, 'Clean up your room, clean up your desk,' and things like that.

Original mixes pronouns 'He al she' and lacks proper reporting punctuation/structure. Use 'He or she' or 'They' and present reported speech needs quotes or 'to' + infinitive: 'told me to clean up...' Suggestion: 'They always told me to clean up my room and desk.'

× Well, I have tried so many times to keep my desk clean but it didn't work.

✓ Well, I have tried many times to keep my desk clean, but it didn't work.

Minor redundancy 'so many times' -> 'many times' is preferable; comma before 'but'. Grammar otherwise acceptable.

× For example, I just put some things in a regular ways and every time I get things I just go that place or sometimes I just puts the garbage can besides me that.

✓ For example, I just put some things away in regular places, and every time I need something I go to that place. Sometimes I just put the garbage can beside me.

Problems: 'a regular ways' incorrect quantifier/number and phrase; 'go that place' needs 'go to that place'; 'puts' wrong verb form; 'besides me that' ungrammatical. Use 'regular places', 'go to', 'put' and 'beside me'.

× Do you think that it is necessary to be tidy?

✓ Do you think it is necessary to be tidy?

Remove 'that' after 'think' for natural spoken English: 'Do you think it is necessary to be tidy?' Not a strict grammar error but improves fluency.

× I think it varies from person to person. As for me it is no need to make everything entirely.

✓ I think it varies from person to person. For me, there is no need to make everything perfectly tidy.

'It is no need' is ungrammatical; use 'there is no need' or 'I don't need to make everything...'. Also 'entirely' misplaced; use 'perfectly tidy' or 'completely tidy.'

× For example, I just want to make my bed clean but I don't need my workplace very tidy that that cost a lot of time to clean everything up.

✓ For example, I just want to make my bed clean, but I don't need my workplace to be very tidy because that would cost a lot of time to clean everything up.

Errors: missing 'to be' after 'workplace', repeated 'that', wrong tense/modal: use 'would cost' to indicate consequence, and add conjunction 'because' to link reasons. Also add comma for clarity.