Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be more concise, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one supporting reason using a linking word. Avoid repetition like "tidy" too often.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Keeping my space tidy helps me feel more productive and less stressed, because I can find things quickly and focus better on my tasks.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently, expand slightly with a specific example and linking words to explain why, and avoid short abrupt answers. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. When I was a child I didn't understand why tidying mattered, so my parents often had to tidy my room for me, for example they would make me put away my toys every weekend.

Sugestão: Correct repetition and grammar, use clearer organization vocabulary, and use linking words to make one coherent answer. Provide a concise procedure and a specific detail or example.

Exemplo: I usually use storage boxes and shelves: for instance, I keep reference books in one box, notebooks in another, and put pens and clips in a small tray so my desk stays uncluttered.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and fillers, correct grammar (e.g. 'tidy' -> 'being tidy'), and give one specific reason with a linking phrase.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Being tidy is a good habit because a clean room creates a more comfortable and healthier environment, which helps me relax and concentrate better.

× Definitely, I think keep all the things tidy may make me feel more productive and less stressed, especially when my desk is tidy enough I can do everything efficiently.

✓ Definitely, I think keeping all my things tidy makes me feel more productive and less stressed; especially when my desk is tidy, I can do everything efficiently.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'keep' after 'think' (should use gerund); 'may make' is unnecessary modal here and conflicts with general statement, present simple 'makes' is appropriate; 'all the things' is unnatural — use 'all my things'; run-on sentence and missing comma before clause. Suggestion: use 'thinking + gerund' structures and present simple for habitual truths, and add commas for clarity.

× Actually not. When I was a child I did not realize the importance of tidying, so I always need my parents to help me keep my room tidy.

✓ Actually not. When I was a child, I did not realize the importance of tidying, so I always needed my parents to help me keep my room tidy.

Error: tense inconsistency — 'did not realize' is past, but 'need' is present. Use past tense 'needed' to match. Also add comma after introductory clause. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent within past narratives.

× Actually, I prefer to buy some boxes. I always put all all the same kinds of books in the same box and the different kinds of stationeries in the same box to look to make my desk look more tidy.

✓ Actually, I prefer to buy some boxes. I always put the same kinds of books in the same box and different kinds of stationery in other boxes to make my desk look tidier.

Errors: repeated word 'all all'; 'the same kinds of books' is fine but needs definite article 'the'; 'stationeries' is incorrect pluralization — use uncountable 'stationery'; awkward phrase 'to look to make my desk look more tidy' is redundant. Use comparative 'tidier.' Suggestion: remove repetition, correct noun form, simplify and use 'tidier' for comparison.

× And As for me, I think so. And you know, I think tidy is a is a good living habit, which means if you live in a tidy room that you live in a more suitable and comfortable environment.

✓ As for me, I think so. I believe tidiness is a good habit because if you live in a tidy room, you live in a more suitable and comfortable environment.

Errors: unnecessary repeated 'And' and capitalisation 'As'; awkward noun phrase 'I think tidy is a is a good living habit' with repetition and incorrect word order. 'Which means if...' is a run-on with unclear subject. Suggestion: remove filler 'and', use 'tidiness' or 'being tidy', correct repetition, and use clear clause connectors like 'because' and include commas for clarity.