Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct basic mistakes (stuffs → stuff, environments → environment), avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a brief reason and one specific example using a linking word (e.g., because, so, for example).

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I prefer a clean environment because clutter makes me feel distracted and irritated, so I tidy up regularly. For example, I always put clothes in the wardrobe and clear my desk after studying.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence then add a clear supporting detail and one brief example. Correct word choice errors (loom → room; Hulu toys → heaps of toys or just toys). Use a linking word like 'so' or 'because' to connect cause and effect. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I wasn’t very tidy as a child because my room was full of toys and textbooks. As a result, my mother often scolded me and made me spend time cleaning and organizing it at the weekend.

Sugestão: Use clear, simple language and one or two concrete actions. Fix unnatural phrases (make it allude → try to, we use → I use, objects or stuff → items). Start with a topic sentence describing your routine, then give a specific example and a linking word (for example, also).

Exemplo: I keep my study space tidy by putting items away immediately after I use them. For example, I always return books to the shelf and throw away scraps of paper; I also try to keep only essential items on my desk.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons joined by linking words (because, otherwise). Avoid grammatical errors (we might lose our important items or will not be able → we might lose important items or be unable). Provide a short example or consequence.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it’s necessary because being tidy helps you find things quickly and prevents loss. For example, if my keys are kept in a fixed place, I never waste time searching for them when I’m leaving the house.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I like the clean environments.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I like clean environments.

The noun 'environments' is fine, but the definite article 'the' is unnecessary here. Use the plural noun without 'the' to express a general preference. Suggestion: drop 'the' or say 'a clean environment' if singular is intended.

× When I see stuffs messed up on the floor, I sometimes get irritated to see that that is due to my nature.

✓ When I see stuff messed up on the floor, I sometimes get irritated because that is due to my nature.

'Stuffs' is not correct; 'stuff' is an uncountable noun. Also 'to see that that is due' is awkward; use 'because that is' or 'since that is'. Suggestion: use 'stuff' and replace the second 'to see' with 'because'.

× So I always keep things organized.

✓ So I always keep things organized.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× No, I wasn't very tidy as a child.

✓ No, I wasn't very tidy as a child.

Sentence is correct as written; included for completeness.

× My loom was Hulu toys and textbooks, and I rarely put things away.

✓ My room was full of toys and textbooks, and I rarely put things away.

Several errors: 'loom' should be 'room', 'Hulu' is likely a typo for 'full'. Correct the nouns and word order to 'My room was full of toys and textbooks'. Suggest proofreading for typos.

× So my mother often scolded me and made me clean it and organize them on weekends.

✓ So my mother often scolded me and made me clean it and organize it on weekends.

Mixing singular and plural pronouns: 'it' refers to 'room' (singular) while 'them' refers to plural 'things'. Keep consistent reference: use 'it' for the room or use 'them' for toys/textbooks. Suggestion: choose one referent and keep pronoun consistent.

× In order to keep the environment around me tidy, I make it allude to put things away after we use that object.

✓ In order to keep the environment around me tidy, I make it a habit to put things away after I use them.

'Make it allude' is incorrect phrase; correct expression is 'make it a habit'. Also pronoun and verb tense: use 'I' instead of 'we' to match speaker and plural 'them' for objects. Suggest learning common collocations like 'make it a habit'.

× Additionally, we need to minimize the number of objects or stuff that we own.

✓ Additionally, I try to minimize the number of items I own.

Mixing 'we' with previous 'I' causes inconsistency; 'stuff' is informal—use 'items' or 'belongings'. Use 'try to' for a personal habit. Suggest keeping pronouns consistent and using appropriate nouns.

× Yes, it is necessary to organize items, otherwise we might lose our important items or will not be able to use it when necessary.

✓ Yes, it is necessary to organize items, otherwise we might lose important items or not be able to use them when necessary.

Inconsistent pronouns and modal usage: 'will not be able to use it' mixes plural 'items' with singular 'it'. Use 'not be able to use them' and avoid repeating 'items' unnecessarily. Also 'might lose our important items' is fine but 'important' should precede 'items'—keep wording concise.