Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and explains reasons, but watch grammar, redundancy, and sentence length. Use one clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting sentences with linking words. Correct small errors (e.g., “much more easier” -> “much easier”; “specially” -> “especially”) and avoid repeating the same idea about hygiene and mental health twice.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Keeping things tidy makes it easier to find my belongings and reduces stress. For example, when my desk is organized I can start work faster, which improves my concentration and mood.

Sugestão: Good direct response and explanation, but simplify and correct phrasing. Avoid wordy or awkward expressions like “manage into cleaning” and repeated statements about hygiene. Use linking words (however, but, then) to show contrast and give one specific example from childhood and one change as an adult.

Exemplo: Not really. When I was a child I shared a room with my three sisters, so toys and clothes were always mixed up. However, once I had my own room I started organizing shelves and drawers, which made it much easier to keep things tidy.

Sugestão: Your answer gives practical methods but has grammar and clarity issues. Start with a clear topic sentence (I keep my study space tidy by...), use correct nouns and prepositions (e.g., “desk organizer” and “in one place”), and avoid unclear phrases like “put them all into their spa.” Give one concrete routine and a brief reason with linking words.

Exemplo: I keep my study space tidy by using a desk organizer for pens, notebooks and chargers. Before and after each study session I put items back in their compartments, so my desk stays clutter-free and I can focus better.

Sugestão: Clear opinion but reduce redundancy and fix grammar. Use one concise topic sentence (Yes/No) and 1–2 supporting reasons linked with words like because or furthermore. Correct phrases such as “much more cleaner” (use “much cleaner”) and “gives as a first impression” (use “gives a good first impression”).

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is necessary. A tidy room reduces stress and gives a good first impression because it shows you take care of yourself, and it is also more hygienic.

× Yes I do like to keep things tidy because they help me find my things much more easier and it reduces stress, specially just by looking at a clear environment.

✓ Yes, I do like to keep things tidy because they help me find my things much more easily and they reduce stress, especially just by looking at a clear environment.

The adverb 'easier' compares adjectives incorrectly after 'more'; use the adverb 'easily' for manner. 'Much more easier' is redundant — correct is 'much easier' or 'more easily' depending on meaning. Also 'it reduces stress' mismatches referent: 'things' is plural, so use 'they reduce stress'. 'specially' is incorrect spelling/word choice; use 'especially'. Suggestion: use 'easily' to describe how you find things and keep subject-verb number consistent ('they reduce').

× Not really because I have three sisters and we used to share a room so it was really hard to manage into cleaning my belongings.

✓ Not really, because I had three sisters and we used to share a room, so it was really hard to manage cleaning my belongings.

The context refers to childhood, so past tense 'had' is appropriate instead of present 'have'. 'manage into cleaning' is ungrammatical; use 'manage cleaning' or 'manage to clean'. Suggestion: use past tense for past situations and the correct verb pattern 'manage to do' or 'manage + -ing'.

× But over time having my own room helped me tidy my stuff and have a clean environment and everything is clean and hygienic.

✓ But over time, having my own room helped me tidy my stuff and have a clean environment, so everything became clean and hygienic.

Mixing present 'is clean' with past 'helped' creates tense inconsistency. Change to past result 'became clean' to match 'helped'. Also add 'so' to clarify result. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent by describing past cause and past result together.

× I would say small desk organizer where I could place my pens, notebook, or any other stationery objects into one place and before and after my study session.

✓ I would say a small desk organizer where I can place my pens, notebooks, and other stationery in one place, and I use it before and after my study sessions.

Sentence lacks article and has unclear structure. Add 'a' before 'small desk organizer', use present tense 'can' for general habit, pluralize 'notebook' to 'notebooks', replace 'into one place' with 'in one place', and clarify 'study session' to plural or match habitual action. Suggestion: include articles, match number and tense for habitual actions, and reorder clauses for clarity.

× I love to clean everything and put them all into their spa so it's easier to manage and more helpful.

✓ I love to clean everything and put it all in its place so it's easier to manage and more helpful.

'Them' refers to 'everything' (singular concept), so use 'it' and 'its place' instead of 'their spa' (likely a wrong word). 'Spa' is incorrect word choice; 'place' or 'spot' fits. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees with antecedent and choose correct noun ('place').

× In my opinion, I prefer to have a room that's tidy, it helps with my mental health, it looks much more cleaner and it gives as a first impression of a person that they actually take care of themselves and it's just more hygienic.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer to have a room that's tidy; it helps my mental health, it looks much cleaner, and it gives a first impression that a person actually takes care of themselves; it's also more hygienic.

Use 'much cleaner' not 'much more cleaner' (double comparative). 'gives as a first impression' is incorrect word order; use 'gives a first impression that...'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'a person actually takes care' (not 'take'). Suggestion: remove redundant 'more' before comparatives, fix phrase order, and keep subject-verb agreement.