Tidiness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms (e.g., "become" → "becoming").

Exemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I am an organized person. For example, a neat desk helps me find study materials quickly, which reduces stress and saves time.

Sugestão: Answer directly with correct past tense and a clear contrast. Use linking words like "when I was younger" and "now". Give a specific example of how your habits changed.

Exemplo: Not really. When I was younger I often left toys and books on the floor because I didn't care, but now I tidy my room every evening so I can study better and feel more relaxed.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, structured answer: say what you do, when you do it, and give one specific method. Use simple correct phrases instead of repeating words.

Exemplo: I tidy my study area every evening. For instance, I put away books, sort papers into folders, and wipe the desk so I can start fresh the next day.

Sugestão: State your opinion clearly and support it with one or two concise reasons using linking words like "because" or "therefore". Avoid hesitations and repeated words; use precise vocabulary (e.g., "essential", "helpful").

Exemplo: Yes, I think being tidy is essential because it helps you stay organized and reduces mistakes. For example, a tidy planner makes it easier to meet deadlines and feel less stressed.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I'm a very organized person, so I try to keep everything tidy and because it gives me a pleasure and without discipline life would be so much stuff. And I believe that become a disciplined person will help you.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because I'm a very organized person, so I try to keep everything tidy and because it gives me pleasure. Without discipline, life would be very chaotic. I also believe that becoming a disciplined person will help you.

The original uses 'a pleasure' where the uncountable noun 'pleasure' is more natural without an article; 'so much stuff' is informal and unclear, so 'very chaotic' fits meaning; 'become a disciplined person' needs gerund 'becoming' to act as a noun phrase. Suggestions: omit the article with uncountable nouns when speaking generally, use gerund after 'believe that' for a noun clause, and choose clearer adjectives for meaning.

× No, I do not use to keep my room ideas child because I was a child and I do not understood that thing much more more than when I now I'm understanding everything. But now I'm keeping everything tidy and I think it it helps me to improve myself.

✓ No, I did not use to keep my room tidy when I was a child because I did not understand that as much as I do now. But now I keep everything tidy, and I think it helps me to improve myself.

Use 'did not use to' for past habitual actions (not 'do not use to'); 'ideas child' is incorrect — likely meant 'when I was a child'; 'did not understand' uses past simple to match timeframe; 'much more more than when I now I'm understanding everything' is ungrammatical and replaced with 'as much as I do now'; 'I'm keeping' changed to simple present 'I keep' for habitual current actions. Suggestions: use 'did/didn't use to' for past habits, match verb tense to time references, and avoid redundant words.

× Whenever I'm free and I'm whenever I'm free for my study or any of my work, I looked at my things and if I think it's too much undisciplined, I make them all I in discipline and I make to try them to space study.

✓ Whenever I am free for study or work, I look at my things and if I think they are too disorganized, I tidy them up and try to organize my study space.

The original repeats phrases and mixes tenses ('I looked' past with present context). Use simple present 'I look' for habitual actions. 'Too much undisciplined' is incorrect; use adjective 'disorganized' or 'undisciplined' with 'too' appropriately. Phrases like 'make them all I in discipline' are ungrammatical; replace with 'tidy them up' or 'organize them'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, keep consistent tense for habits, use correct collocations such as 'tidy up' and 'organize my study space'.

× Yes, I think it, it is, it's, it's not necessary. It's, it is essential and it is more important. It's, it's much important to be a tidy because a tidy person never forgets is, uh, discipline. He's in, uh, in a discipline, he always, uh, in a good position and we all need to be tidy.

✓ Yes, I think it is not just necessary; it is essential and very important to be tidy because a tidy person never loses discipline. Such a person is disciplined, usually in a good position, and we all need to be tidy.

Remove repeated filler words and contractions. 'Much important' is incorrect — use 'very important' or 'much more important' in comparisons. 'To be a tidy' is wrong; 'tidy' is adjective, so use 'to be tidy' or 'a tidy person'. 'Never forgets is discipline' should be 'never loses discipline'. Suggestions: use correct adjective/adverb collocations ('very important'), avoid unnecessary fillers, and choose the correct noun/verb forms ('lose discipline').