Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答切题，也提供了童年活动和家庭出游的细节。注意过去经历要统一使用过去时，例如把“play”改为“played”；避免边说边重复或自我修正“take took”。建议拆成两三句，并用“also”或“as a result”等连接细节。

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played hide-and-seek with my friends there, and my parents sometimes took me for family outings. We enjoyed spending time together in the fresh air.

Sugestão: 你直接表达了喜欢去公园，也说明了原因，但回答中有较多重复、停顿和未完成的词句。把“heavy study burden”换成更自然的“academic workload”，并将“release my stress”与“enjoy the scenery”清楚地组织成两三句。注意“scenery”通常不可数，不说“sceneries”。

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. My academic workload can be quite stressful, so I often go to a park at the weekend to clear my head. I also enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and the beautiful scenery.

Sugestão: 回答观点明确，理由也比较充分。注意主谓一致：“more parks”后用“mean”；“citizens”不需要重复；通常说“a closer connection with nature”，而不是“a closer contact with the nature”。可以删去重复的“and also”，让表达更流畅。

Exemplo: Yes, I’d like to see more parks in my city. They would give people more green space to relax, exercise, and spend time with their families. More parks could also help residents connect with nature and improve their well-being.

Sugestão: 目前的回答没有回应考官的问题。“Good job!”是评价语，不是关于未来想去的公园的回答。请直接说出想去的公园或地点，再补充一两个具体理由，例如那里有什么景色、可以做什么活动。

Exemplo: Yes, I’d love to visit a national park near my city in the future. I’ve heard it has scenic hiking trails and quiet roads, so I could enjoy a peaceful walk and spend time surrounded by nature.

× I often play hide and seek with my little friends or neighborhood friends in parks.

✓ I often played hide and seek with my little friends or neighborhood friends in parks.

这句话讲的是童年时的经历，属于过去时间，因此应将一般现在时 play 改为一般过去时 played。描述过去反复发生的习惯或活动时，也要使用过去时。

× My parents usually take took me to parks to enjoy our happy family time in fresh air.

✓ My parents usually took me to parks to enjoy our happy family time in the fresh air.

句子讲的是过去的童年经历，应使用过去时 took。原句中的 take took 是重复且时态混用，应保留 took。另外，fresh air 前通常加定冠词 the，表示“新鲜空气”。

× My parents usually take took me to parks to enjoy our happy family time in fresh air.

✓ My parents usually took me to parks to enjoy our happy family time in the fresh air.

这里应说 in the fresh air。fresh air 指具体语境中的新鲜空气，通常在 fresh air 前使用 the。

× We all felt really happy and. And relaxed.

✓ We all felt really happy and relaxed.

原句把 and 与 relaxed 分割成了不完整的句子。and 应连接并列的形容词 happy 和 relaxed，不能单独放在句首形成残句。

× Because of the heavy study burden and the pressure in in normal weekdays, I often choose to go to parks on the weekends.

✓ Because of the heavy study burden and the pressure on normal weekdays, I often choose to go to parks on the weekends.

表示“在工作日”，应使用 on weekdays，而不是 in weekdays。原句中的 in 重复出现，改正后只保留 on。

× I love Jo, enjoy the beautiful scenery, beautiful natural sceneries.

✓ I enjoy the beautiful scenery and natural landscapes.

scenery 是不可数名词，通常没有复数形式，因此不应使用 sceneries。可以说 beautiful scenery，也可以用可数名词 landscapes 表示不同的自然景观。

× More parks in our cities means more fresh air and larger public space for people to relax, exercise and to have family outings.

✓ More parks in our cities mean more fresh air and larger public space for people to relax, exercise and have family outings.

主语中心词 parks 是复数，因此谓语应使用 mean，而不是 means。并列动词 relax、exercise 和 have 使用相同形式即可，第二个 to 可以省略。

× This would definitely allow allow citizen citizens to have a closer contact with the nature and improve our overall well beings.

✓ This would definitely allow citizens to have closer contact with nature and improve our overall well-being.

allow 后面指许多市民时，应使用复数 citizens。well-being 在这里表示整体健康状况，是不可数名词，通常不写成复数 well beings。

× This would definitely allow allow citizen citizens to have a closer contact with the nature and improve our overall well beings.

✓ This would definitely allow citizens to have closer contact with nature and improve our overall well-being.

泛指自然环境时，nature 前通常不加 the，应说 contact with nature。