Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is direct and includes a personal detail, but there are several grammar and word-choice problems. Say “go to the park” and “in the evening,” rather than “went to park” and “at the evening.” Also, “build my ability” is vague and unnatural; explain the specific benefit, such as developing social skills or spending quality time with your parents. Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your reason clearly.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I usually went to the park with my parents every evening. I enjoyed it because I could play with other children and develop my social skills. It was also a great way to spend quality time with my family.

Sugestão: You answer the question clearly and give a specific routine, but there are pronunciation or word-choice issues, such as “Perk,” which should probably be “the park.” Use “four-year-old” before the noun, and avoid repetition such as “It it.” The phrase “reconnect with my son” is possible, but “spend quality time with my son” sounds more natural in this context. Add one specific activity to make the answer more effective.

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. I go to the park every Sunday with my four-year-old son. We usually play on the swings or ride our bicycles together. It gives us a chance to spend quality time together and get some fresh air.

Sugestão: Your opinion is clear, and you provide a relevant reason. However, “green space for the city” should be “green spaces in the city,” and “play around with other children” is less natural than “play with other children.” The final “and” makes the answer incomplete. Use a complete sentence and explain the result more precisely, such as giving children safe places to exercise and socialize.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. I think my city needs more green spaces because many neighborhoods are crowded and lack places for children to play. More parks would give them a safe environment to exercise, socialize, and spend time outdoors. They would also make the city more pleasant for adults.

Sugestão: You give a clear intention and a reason, but the answer is difficult to follow because the park names are unclear and there are several incomplete or repeated phrases. Check the names carefully and use “my four-year-old son,” not “my for all year old son.” Replace the vague phrase “play around” with a specific activity, and finish the sentence. You could also explain what makes these parks attractive, such as their scenery, facilities, or large open spaces.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. I would like to visit Shinjuku Gyoen National Garden in the future because it has beautiful scenery and plenty of open space. I would like to take my four-year-old son there so that he could run around, enjoy nature, and play in a safe environment.

× When I was a child, I usually went to park every day at the evening with my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I usually went to the park every day in the evening with my parents.

The singular countable noun park needs the definite article the because you are referring to a specific type of place you regularly visited. The phrase in the evening is the correct time expression, not at the evening.

× When I was a child, I usually went to park every day at the evening with my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I usually went to the park every day in the evening with my parents.

Use in with parts of the day, such as in the morning, in the afternoon, and in the evening. Use at for specific times, such as at 7 p.m.

× It it is beneficial for me to reconnect with my son.

✓ It is beneficial for me to reconnect with my son.

The subject pronoun it is repeated unnecessarily. A sentence should contain only one subject pronoun in this position.

× I suppose we need more green space for the city, otherwise it is difficult for children to play around with other children there and.

✓ I suppose our city needs more green space; otherwise, it is difficult for children to play with other children there.

The conjunction and at the end is unnecessary and leaves the sentence unfinished. Remove it, or add another complete clause after it. Also, play with other children is sufficient in this context; play around with other children is less precise.

× I suppose we need more green space for the city, otherwise it is difficult for children to play around with other children there and.

✓ I suppose our city needs more green space; otherwise, it is difficult for children to play with other children there.

The original sentence ends with an incomplete phrase, there and, so its structure is unfinished. Use a semicolon before otherwise to separate the two complete ideas, and end the sentence after the complete clause.

× It's beneficial for my for all year old son to play around and.

✓ It would be beneficial for my four-year-old son to play there.

The correct adjective phrase is four-year-old when it comes before a noun, and it should be hyphenated. The phrase for all year old is not grammatically correct. Also, play there completes the intended meaning more clearly than the incomplete phrase play around and.

× It's beneficial for my for all year old son to play around and.

✓ It would be beneficial for my four-year-old son to play there.

The original sentence contains the repeated preposition for and ends with the incomplete phrase play around and. The corrected sentence has a complete structure with a subject, verb, complement, and infinitive phrase.