Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be careful with grammar (past tense and verb forms) and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep sentences concise (max 5). For example, use past continuous/simple: “we used to” or “we would,” and correct verbs: “bring” → “brought,” “lie a bike” → “ride a bike.”

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I used to go to the park with my family every weekend, and we often brought food for a picnic. Also, my parents taught me how to ride a bike there, which I remember fondly.

Sugestão: Improve accuracy and clarity: correct awkward phrases and grammar, and give a specific reason with linking words. Use correct prepositions and gerunds (e.g., “because I like running and walking”). Name the park clearly and avoid unnecessary words like “louder.”

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy parks because they are calm and relaxing, and they help me clear my mind. I usually go to Frag Star Garden because I like running and walking there for exercise.

Sugestão: Work on verb forms, sequencing and specificity. Use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “after that”) and correct verbs: “got to” → “went to,” “go learning” → “study” or “learn,” “get lunches” → “had lunch.” Mention why you want more parks (benefits).

Exemplo: Yes, I would. For example, I often went to Rumpini Park with friends to study together, and afterwards we had tuna sandwiches for lunch. I would like more parks so people have quiet places to relax and meet friends.

Sugestão: Improve tense consistency and vocabulary: use present perfect or simple present for hearsay (“I’ve heard the park has a beautiful and ...”), correct adjectives (“gratiate” unclear — use “gracious,” “tranquil,” or “picturesque”), and fix phrasing about plans (“wake up early and go in the morning with my friends during a holiday”). Add a reason for visiting.

Exemplo: I want to visit Benzugi Park because I’ve heard it has a beautiful and tranquil environment. I plan to wake up early and go there in the morning with my friends during the holidays to enjoy the scenery and take photos.

× As a child I always went to the park with my family, sometime we bring the food to picnic and sometimes my parents teach me how to lie a bike.

✓ As a child I always went to the park with my family. Sometimes we brought food for a picnic, and sometimes my parents taught me how to ride a bike.

The sentence mixes past and present verbs. 'bring' and 'teach' should be past tense 'brought' and 'taught' to match 'went'. 'sometime' should be plural 'Sometimes'. 'to picnic' is incorrect phrasing; use 'for a picnic'. 'lie a bike' is incorrect verb choice—use 'ride a bike'. Use separate sentences or commas correctly to avoid run-ons.

× I like going to parks because it's calm and relaxed.

✓ I like going to parks because they are calm and relaxing.

The description of parks should use plural agreement 'they' and an adjective that describes the parks' effect 'relaxing' rather than 'relaxed' (which describes a person). 'It's' is singular and mismatches 'parks'.

× I usually go to frag starfarden because of I like to run and walking louder.

✓ I usually go to Frag Star Garden because I like to run and walk there.

'because of I like' is incorrect; use 'because I like'. 'walking' should be base form 'walk' after 'to run and'. 'louder' is irrelevant and incorrect; likely meant 'outdoors' or 'there'—here 'there' is appropriate. Proper noun capitalization fixed.

× Previously I got to Rumpini Park to go learning with my friends.

✓ Previously I went to Rumpini Park to study with my friends.

'got to' is incorrect for simply 'went to'. 'go learning' is ungrammatical; use 'to study' or 'to learn'. Past simple 'went' matches 'Previously'. Reduced wordiness improves clarity.

× After that we get lunches at our tuna meal sandwiches.

✓ After that we had lunch with our tuna sandwiches.

Tense should be past 'had' instead of 'get'. 'lunches' is plural unnecessary; use 'lunch'. 'tuna meal sandwiches' is awkward—'tuna sandwiches' is correct.

× But sometime I would like to go to Bentubi.

✓ But sometimes I would like to go to Bentubi.

Use 'Sometimes' plural adverb. The rest is grammatical; keeping 'would like' expresses desire appropriately.

× I heard this park had beautiful and gratiate environment.

✓ I heard this park has a beautiful and pleasant environment.

Use present 'has' for reported present state. 'a' article needed before 'beautiful'. 'gratiate' is incorrect word; likely 'gracious' or 'pleasant'—'pleasant' fits. Maintain correct adjective order: 'beautiful and pleasant environment'.

× I would like to wake up early and go morning with my friends when it holiday

✓ I would like to wake up early and go in the morning with my friends when it's a holiday.

'go morning' is incorrect; use 'go in the morning'. 'when it holiday' needs 'it's a holiday'. Added articles and correct contraction. The verbs 'wake up' and 'go' are correct infinitive forms after 'would like'.