Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate, reduce fillers (uh), and produce a concise response with clear tense and one or two supporting details. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then add a specific reason or example using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”).

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they helped me relax and feel comfortable. For example, I used to spend afternoons playing under the trees and watching birds, which made the atmosphere peaceful.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and filler words, use present tense clearly, and link ideas with connectors (e.g., “so” or “because”). Provide a specific supporting detail about current habits or frequency to make the answer more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me unwind after walking or working. For instance, I often visit the park nearby twice a week to sit by the pond and read, which helps me relax.

Sugestão: Use plural/singular correctly and avoid unnecessary words. Give a clear topic sentence, then a specific reason with an example or consequence, using linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and improve air quality. For example, additional parks could give families places to exercise and children safe areas to play, benefiting public health.

Sugestão: Be specific and fluent: name the park correctly and give a brief reason or detail about what you want to see or do there. Avoid fillers and combine sentences to sound natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit Yellowstone National Park in the United States because of its geysers and wildlife. I hope to see Old Faithful erupt and hike some of the trails to observe the park’s landscapes and animals.

× Yes, I really like and enjoying going to park as a child because uh, it will make me relax and uh, feel comfortable Uh, and the environment and atmosphere are wonderful.

✓ Yes, I really liked and enjoyed going to parks as a child because it made me relax and feel comfortable, and the environment and atmosphere were wonderful.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs with a past time frame 'as a child'. Use past tense consistently: 'liked' and 'enjoyed'. 'Going to park' needs plural or article: use 'going to parks' or 'going to the park'. 'Will make me relax' is future and should be past 'made me relax'. Also remove filler words and duplicate 'Uh'. Improve fluency by joining clauses with commas.

× Yes, of course. Uh, I uh, really like going to parks still right now, uh, because after I walk for a while I want to go to some place where it makes me feel relaxed and a few few ease.

✓ Yes, of course. I still really like going to parks now, because after I walk for a while I want to go to a place that makes me feel relaxed and at ease.

The original uses awkward word order and unnecessary fillers. 'Still right now' is redundant; use 'still' or 'now'. 'A few few ease' is incorrect; idiomatic expression is 'at ease'. Use 'that makes' (relative clause) rather than 'where it makes' for clarity. Keep present tense 'like' since question asks about now.

× Yes, I think park, uh, play a very important and essential role in every city because park is a place that will make people enjoying the beautiful view and, uh, some nature, uh, that's very important for a city's environment.

✓ Yes, I think parks play a very important and essential role in every city because parks are places that allow people to enjoy beautiful views and nature, which is very important for a city's environment.

Use plural 'parks' to match 'every city' and subject-verb agreement 'parks play'. 'Park is a place' should become 'parks are places' for consistency. 'Will make people enjoying' is incorrect: use base verb 'allow people to enjoy' or 'help people enjoy'. 'Some nature' is unnecessary; use 'nature'. Use 'which' to connect the importance clause.

× Yes, uh, I know that is a really famous and the biggest park in America called the Yellowstone. I want to go there in the future. That's my dream.

✓ Yes, I know that there is a really famous and the biggest park in America called Yellowstone. I want to go there in the future. That's my dream.

The sentence structure is slightly off: insert 'there is' (There be issue overlaps but use structure correction) to state existence: 'I know that there is a...'. 'the Yellowstone' is usually 'Yellowstone' without 'the' when naming the park; if using 'the', say 'the Yellowstone National Park'. This keeps present tense for future intention 'want to go' is correct.