Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and use a clear topic sentence. Limit to 3–4 sentences, use correct tense and linking words (e.g., “Yes, I did.” “For example,” “Also”). Include one specific memory to make it vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I used to go to the park almost every day to play football with my friends. For example, I remember climbing the big oak tree near the pond and admiring the colourful flowers while my friends and I raced around the playground.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and awkward phrases, keep it concise and provide one clear reason plus a linking word. Avoid unnecessary details about status unless relevant. Replace incorrect phrases like “relaxed my mountain body” with “relax and clear my mind.”

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after studying. For example, I often take a 30-minute walk in the evening to clear my mind and reduce stress.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating previous content. Say clearly whether you would like more parks and give one specific reason plus a supporting detail, using linking words such as “because” or “so”.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces make urban life healthier. For instance, more small parks near schools would give students a nearby place to relax between classes.

Sugestão: Be precise and grammatical: state the location, give a reason and add a brief detail or example. Use linking words like “because” and avoid plural/verb agreement errors (“there are more”).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks in the south of China because they are famous for their lush trees and colourful flowers. For example, I hope to see the botanical gardens in Guangzhou and photograph the seasonal blooms.

× Of course I like as a child I love to go into the park.

✓ Of course I liked it as a child; I loved going to the park.

The sentence describes past habits, so present-tense verbs are incorrect. Use past tense 'liked' and 'loved' and the gerund 'going' for activities. Also add 'it' after 'liked' and punctuation to separate clauses.

× I used to go almost everyday to play with my friends and I also like to admire the beautiful flowers and lovely trees.

✓ I used to go almost every day to play with my friends, and I also liked to admire the beautiful flowers and lovely trees.

'Everyday' (adjective) is incorrect here; use the adverbial phrase 'every day'. The sentence describes past habitual actions, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'liked' instead of 'like'.

× Also I enjoyed taking long walks there.

✓ I also enjoyed taking long walks there.

This is a past-event sentence and is already mostly correct; only word order and punctuation were adjusted for naturalness: place 'also' after the subject or include a comma. No tense change needed.

× Yes, I like going to parks now, although I am a Senior High School student, but I think park is a good place where I can relaxed my mountain body and I like to take a walk now.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now. Although I am a senior high school student and often busy, I think the park is a good place where I can relax my body and I like to take walks now.

Remove the redundant 'but' when using 'although'. 'Senior High School' should be lowercased as a common noun phrase. Use the definite article 'the park' when speaking generally about parks in this context. 'Relaxed' is past tense/adjective; use base form 'relax' after modal-like structure 'can'. 'Mountain body' is unclear; replaced with 'body' (keep literal meaning). Use plural 'walks' for habitual action.

× Yes, I still enjoying going to parks, although I'm a Senior High School student and often busy with my study works.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I'm a senior high school student and often busy with my studies.

'Still enjoying' is incorrect here because the main verb should be 'enjoy' in present simple: 'I still enjoy'. 'Study works' is uncountable/misphrased; use 'my studies'.

× But parks help me relaxed and unwind so I often go there for work or to sit and clear my mind.

✓ But parks help me relax and unwind, so I often go there to study or to sit and clear my mind.

'Help' is followed by the base verb, not past participle, so use 'relax' not 'relaxed'. 'For work' is vague; context suggests studying, so 'to study' fits better. Added comma before 'so' and parallel infinitives.

× Yes, I want to go to the parks in the South of China because there have more lovely trees and colorful flowers and I want to see them.

✓ Yes, I want to go to the parks in the south of China because there are more lovely trees and colorful flowers, and I want to see them.

Use 'there are' for existence of plural nouns; 'there have' is incorrect. 'South' as a region is lowercased when used generally. Added comma before conjunction for clarity.