Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Remove repetitions and small grammar errors, use a clear topic sentence then one specific supporting detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid plural mistakes (family → family).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because I often played football and tag with my friends there. I also liked spending time with my family on picnic blankets, which made those visits feel special.

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and correct repeated words. Start with a direct topic sentence about current preference, then explain reason briefly with a linking word (but/however) and one specific example of what you do when you visit.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I don’t have much free time because of work. However, when I am free I usually take a short walk or read a book on a bench to relax.

Sugestão: Avoid fillers (uh, umm) and grammatical errors. Provide one clear reason with a linking phrase (because/so) and a specific benefit or example. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would, because more parks would provide quiet green spaces for relaxation and exercise. For example, extra parks would make it easier for families to go for walks without travelling far.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence naming the park or its location, then one or two precise reasons using linking words (because/so). Correct phrasing (nearby, peaceful environment) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to visit the small community park near my home because it is quiet and has lots of trees. Because it’s nearby, I can go there after work for a short walk to unwind.

× Yes, I really enjoy enjoyed going to parks as a child because I used to play different games there with my friends.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed going to parks as a child because I used to play different games there with my friends.

The sentence mixes present ('enjoy') and past ('as a child', 'used to') tenses. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'as a child' and 'used to'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently when describing past habits.

× I also love spending time with my families in the park.

✓ I also loved spending time with my family in the park.

'Families' is incorrect because 'family' as a group is usually singular here; the sentence refers to the speaker's family in the past, so use past tense 'loved' and singular 'family'. Suggestion: use 'my family' for the household or 'my families' only when referring to multiple separate families.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now, but due to my busy schedule I really do not have any have proper time to go to the park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now, but due to my busy schedule I really do not have proper time to go to the park.

The phrase contains a duplicated word 'have any have' and a slight mismatch of articles. Remove the extra 'have' and use 'proper time' without 'any' for natural phrasing. Tense (present) is fine; ensure no duplication.

× But definitely when I'm free I go to the park and spend some quality time there.

✓ However, when I'm free I go to the park and spend quality time there.

Starting with 'But definitely' is informal and redundant. Use 'However' or omit 'definitely' for smoother structure. 'Spend some quality time' is acceptable but 'spend quality time' is more natural. Maintain present habitual tense for current routine.

× Yes, definitely. I love to see the more parks in my cities because uh, umm, because uh, parks are more peaceful and uh, quite uh, environment and umm.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to see more parks in my city because parks are peaceful and the environment is quiet.

Errors: 'the more parks' should be 'more parks' (no 'the'); 'my cities' likely should be singular 'my city'; awkward repetition and filler words removed; 'more peaceful' compared to what is unclear, so 'peaceful' suffices; 'quite' misused—use 'quiet' to describe noise level; include article 'the' before 'environment' when specifying it: 'the environment is quiet.' Suggestion: remove fillers and keep concise statements.

× Yes, a park near my home because it is very quiet and it has very peaceful environment and as well as it is very near by my home so I'll go there.

✓ Yes, the park near my home because it is very quiet, has a peaceful environment, and is very near my home, so I'll go there.

Problems: missing article before 'park' ('the park near my home'); 'very peaceful environment' needs 'a' or rephrase to 'has a peaceful environment'; 'near by' should be 'near' (one word 'nearby' as adjective/adverb); sentence is run-on—combine clauses with commas and conjunctions. Suggestion: use 'the park' for a specific park, 'has a peaceful environment', and 'near my home' for correct preposition and form.