Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase if needed. Avoid redundancy ("enjoying my company" repeated later).

Exemplo: Not really. I was very shy as a child, so I preferred staying at home where I felt comfortable. For example, I liked reading books and playing with model cars instead of joining other children at the park.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, fix small wording issues, and provide one or two specific activities as reasons. Use a linking word to connect idea and example, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. I still prefer staying at home because I enjoy quiet hobbies. For example, I spend time restoring model cars and watching online tutorials to learn new skills, which I find more relaxing than going to a park.

Sugestão: This answer is clear and relevant. Improve by starting with a direct topic sentence, using one linking word, and adding a specific example of how parks help the community to make it more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would help maintain greenery and provide safe spaces for exercise. For example, a new park near residential areas would encourage families to walk and children to play outdoors, improving public health.

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: give a clear topic sentence and then offer a specific alternative plan. Use a linking word to contrast and provide one concrete example of a place or activity you want to try.

Exemplo: Not really. I don't have a specific park in mind; instead, I want to try more adventurous outings. For instance, I'd like to go trekking in the nearby hills next spring to experience nature more actively.

× No, I did not like going to the park as a child because I was very shy person and I preferred staying at home enjoying my company.

✓ No, I did not like going to the park as a child because I was a very shy person, and I preferred staying at home and enjoying my own company.

The sentence omits the indefinite article 'a' before 'very shy person' — a singular countable noun requires an article (Grammar problem type ID 22). Also add 'and' between clauses for clarity and use 'my own company' which is the more natural phrase. Use 'and' before the second gerund to connect actions. Grammar problem type ID:22

× No, I still prefer staying at home enjoying my own company, like spending on hobbies on cars or just learning something new.

✓ No, I still prefer staying at home and enjoying my own company, like spending time on hobbies related to cars or just learning something new.

The phrase 'spending on hobbies on cars' misuses prepositions and lacks an object; 'spending time on hobbies' is correct and 'related to cars' clarifies meaning (Grammar problem type ID 12). Also add 'and' to connect actions. Rephrase for natural collocation: 'spending time on hobbies related to cars.' Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, adding more parks to the city would actually help in maintaining the greenery, and it will also encourage people to walk and be healthier.

✓ Yes, adding more parks to the city would actually help maintain the greenery, and it would also encourage people to walk and be healthier.

Mixing 'would' and 'will' in the same conditional context is inconsistent. Use the same modal for parallel outcomes: either 'would... and would...' for hypothetical situations (Grammar problem type ID 4). Also 'help maintain' is the correct collocation; omit 'in'. Grammar problem type ID:4

× No, I do not have anything on my mind as such, but I definitely want to explore more adventurous places or going on a trekking.

✓ No, I do not have anything on my mind as such, but I definitely want to explore more adventurous places or go trekking.

After 'want to' use the base form 'go' not the gerund 'going' (Grammar problem type ID 8). Also 'go trekking' is the natural phrase; 'a trekking' is incorrect because 'trekking' is an uncountable activity or use 'a trek' if a noun is intended. Replace 'going on a trekking' with 'go trekking' or 'go on a trek.' Grammar problem type ID:8