Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct noun forms (park equipment), and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my cousins and we enjoyed playing on the swings and slides; for example, we used to race each other down the big slide every weekend.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear reason without hesitations. Use correct collocations (drink coffee, eat cake) and avoid unnecessary self-deprecating remarks. Offer one contrasting detail with a linking word to show clarity.

Exemplo: Not really. I prefer going to cafés now because I enjoy drinking coffee and chatting with friends; besides, I no longer feel comfortable using playground equipment.

Sugestão: Answer directly and politely, correct grammar (has four parks), remove fillers, and give a specific reason or suggestion about park quality. Use a linking word to connect reason to opinion.

Exemplo: Not really — our city only has four small parks, and they are rather basic, so I've already visited them all; therefore, I wouldn't mind more well-designed parks with playgrounds and seating areas.

Sugestão: Provide a smooth, fluent description with corrected grammar (a park, I'd like to visit), avoid hesitant sounds, and explain why it appeals to you with a specific detail. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a park in Seoul that features a large central waterfall. It looks beautiful and peaceful, with extensive green spaces and quiet paths, which would be perfect for relaxed walks rather than energetic activities.

× Yes I did. I went to the park a lot, most of the time with my cousins and we had a lot of fun playing with parks equipments and as a kid I really enjoyed it.

✓ Yes, I did. I went to the park a lot, most of the time with my cousins, and we had a lot of fun playing with park equipment; as a kid I really enjoyed it.

The sentence mainly uses past tense which is appropriate, but contains incorrect pluralization and word choice: 'parks equipments' is ungrammatical. 'Equipment' is an uncountable noun and should be singular without 's'. Also add commas for clarity and replace the conjunction structure for smoother flow. Suggestion: use 'park equipment' and punctuation to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Actually I don't think so because I prefer to go to the cafes and drink at coffee or eat some cake and I'm not young anymore so I can't play with slides or.

✓ Actually, I don't think so because I prefer to go to cafes to drink coffee or eat some cake, and I'm not young anymore so I can't play on slides.

Problems: 'the cafes' implies specific cafes; use 'cafes' generally. 'drink at coffee' is incorrect; use 'drink coffee' or 'have coffee' and the preposition 'on' is used with 'play on slides' not 'play with slides'. Also the sentence was incomplete ending with 'or.' Reword to complete thought and correct prepositions. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Our city doesn't have a lot of parks. It, it just have, has, uh, four parks And I, I've already seen them and it's not that much fun. I don't like them.

✓ Our city doesn't have a lot of parks. It just has, uh, four parks, and I've already seen them, so it's not that much fun; I don't like them.

Error: 'It ... have' is subject-verb disagreement. The singular subject 'It' requires 'has'. Also punctuation and filler words were cleaned up. 'And I, I've' is redundant; combine clauses for clarity. Maintain present simple 'doesn't have' and 'has' for present facts. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× Yes. One of the parks I really like to go is in Seoul. It's park with a big waterfall in its, uh, center. It's really beautiful and it has a lot of green spaces. Uh, it's for older people like me, not teenagers.

✓ Yes. One of the parks I really like to go to is in Seoul. It's a park with a big waterfall in its center. It's really beautiful and has a lot of green space. It's for older people like me, not teenagers.

Issues: missing preposition 'to' after 'go' ('go to a place'). 'It's park' needs article 'a park'. 'Green spaces' can be 'green space' as a general uncountable idea; either is acceptable but 'green space' is smoother. Removed filler words. Ensure verb forms and articles are correct for present-tense description. Grammar problem type ID: 10