Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep it to 1–3 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they made me feel refreshed and happy. For example, I often played on the swings and ran around with my friends, which made those afternoons very joyful.

Sugestão: State your position clearly, use correct grammar and avoid unclear words. Provide one brief reason with a linking word (e.g., "because"), and avoid irrelevant or confusing names. Keep to 1–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really, because as I have grown up I have become more introverted and feel uncomfortable talking to strangers in parks. As a result, I prefer quieter activities at home or meeting a few close friends instead.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct repetitions and unclear phrases. Use a linking phrase to give a specific reason and a concrete example of benefit. Keep it concise and natural (1–3 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide children and families with safe places to play and relax. For instance, a new park near my neighborhood would give local children space to exercise and neighbours somewhere to socialise.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repeating the same reason. State your future intention clearly and give one brief explanation or alternative activity. Use correct prepositions and singular/plural forms.

Exemplo: Although there are many parks in my country, I probably won't visit them much in the future because I feel self-conscious going alone as an adult. Instead, I might choose to meet friends at cafés or go for walks in quieter neighbourhood streets.

× Yes, I would love to go on a park as a child because it is it will make me refreshing and it is refreshing, makes me happy and joyful.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they made me feel refreshed and happy.

The original sentence has several issues: incorrect preposition 'on a park' (use 'to a park' or 'to parks'), tense mismatch ('would love' for habitual past should be 'loved'), repetition and incorrect form 'make me refreshing' (should be 'make me feel refreshed' — 'refreshing' is a present participle used as adjective incorrectly), and subject-reference agreement ('it' referring to 'parks' should be 'they'). Suggestion: Use past tense for childhood habits, use 'to' with 'go', use 'feel refreshed' or 'refreshed' as adjective, and ensure pronoun agrees with plural 'parks'.

× I don't because as a child, I was so much delightful, amport, but now as I'm growing up, I don't want to go on a party because I'm becoming more and more introvert and I can't even express my feelings to anyone and I can't even talk to anyone like EJ.

✓ I don't, because as a child I was very delighted, but now as I grow up I don't want to go to parties because I'm becoming more and more introverted and I can't express my feelings to anyone or talk to anyone like EJ.

Errors fixed: 'so much delightful' is incorrect adjective use — use 'very delighted' (adjective) or 'so delighted' (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'amport' appears to be a nonsense word and was removed. 'go on a party' uses wrong preposition — use 'go to parties' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'I'm growing up' can be simplified to 'I grow up' for general present change (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'introvert' should be adjective 'introverted' (Grammar Problem Type 13). Combined clauses were repetitive; simplified for clarity. Suggestions: choose correct adjective forms, use 'to' for attending events, and use consistent verb tense for ongoing change (present continuous acceptable: 'I'm becoming more introverted').

× Yes, I love to see many more parks in my city because it makes it makes people and children so much joyful when I crush around from the park, I can see the sparks in the in the many people's face so I love to have many more parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to see many more parks in my city because they make people and children very happy; when I walk around a park I can see the joy on many people's faces, so I would like there to be more parks.

Multiple problems: 'love to see many more parks' is acceptable but 'would like to see' is more polite for preferences (Grammar Problem Type 6/4). 'it makes it makes' duplicated phrase removed. 'so much joyful' uses incorrect adverb/adjective; use 'very happy' (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'crush around from the park' is incorrect; likely intended 'walk around the park' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'sparks in the in the many people's face' incorrect metaphor and article/pronoun usage — corrected to 'joy on many people's faces' and fixed plural agreement (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 17). Suggestion: use correct verbs for movement (walk), avoid duplicated words, use 'happy' not 'joyful' awkwardly, and ensure noun/pronoun agreement and articles are correct.

× There are many parks in my country but I don't think I will go to any parks in the future because I don't really like going to the parks because as an adult I feel it's embarrassing for me to go on a park

✓ There are many parks in my country, but I don't think I will go to any of them in the future because I don't really like going to parks; as an adult I feel it's embarrassing to go to a park.

Errors addressed: repetition and article/preposition misuse. 'go to any parks' should be 'go to any of them' or 'go to any parks' with clearer reference (Grammar Problem Type 1/27). 'going to the parks' unnecessary 'the' when speaking generally (Grammar Problem Type 22/17). 'go on a park' uses wrong preposition — use 'go to a park' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Also improved sentence flow and punctuation. Suggestion: use 'go to' with locations, use 'any of them' for referring back, and omit 'the' when speaking generally about parks.