Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I did), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and unclear words (e.g., "spurs" and "let you breathe") and correct vocabulary like "green scenery" or "fresh air." Keep to at most 3–4 short sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I loved going to parks because of the green scenery and the fresh air, which made me feel relaxed. I also enjoyed watching squirrels and other small animals play, which was always entertaining.

Sugestão: Give a clear present-tense statement and a specific reason. Fix tense consistency and reduce repetition. Use a linking word like "because" to explain why you enjoy parks abroad and mention a concrete observation (e.g., people exercising, picnicking). Keep answers to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still do. I especially like visiting parks when I travel abroad because I can observe local people exercising or socializing, which gives me insight into their daily life.

Sugestão: Provide a direct answer (Yes) and state one or two clear reasons using linking words such as "because" or "so." Be specific about problems (e.g., overcrowding, lack of green space) and suggest a simple benefit of more parks (health, relaxation). Avoid hesitation and incorrect grammar.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. Because there are very few parks in our city, public spaces are overcrowded; more parks would relieve congestion and provide places for exercise and relaxation.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use one clear example. Avoid filler words and repetition. If unsure, say you have a specific place you want to visit and explain why with concrete details (e.g., viewpoints, attractions). Use linking words like "because" to clarify your reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Mount Ta (Tad) Park in Chengdu because it has a high viewpoint similar to the London Eye; I want to see panoramic views of the city from above.

× Yes, and for now, I really like going to parks 'cause I, I really enjoy the green sights and, umm, the spurs and those animals like squirrels.

✓ Yes, even now I really like going to parks because I enjoy the green sights, the spurs, and animals like squirrels.

The original sentence has informal filler words and uses 'for now' awkwardly; 'for now' implies temporary. 'Even now' or 'even now I' fits better for continuity. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. Remove repeated fillers 'I, I' and 'umm'. Commas are needed to separate list items. Suggestion: practice removing fillers and using appropriate prepositions and conjunctions.

× I really like to see them playing around me.

✓ I really like to see them playing around me.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable but 'around me' is slightly unnatural; better alternatives are 'around me' or 'near me'. No grammatical change required if keeping meaning; ensure preposition 'around' is appropriate for proximity.

× And yeah, and I let you breathe.

✓ And yeah, it lets me relax and breathe.

Original 'I let you breathe' is unclear and likely a misuse of pronouns and verb meaning. Context suggests the park lets the speaker relax; correct subject and object and verb form. This fixes sentence structure and meaning.

× Yeah, definitely. I love going to parks when I, when I was, when I am in another countries and in a, in a in another cities, everything that's in the park, I really can, umm, know what people's what people do all the time.

✓ Yeah, definitely. I love going to parks when I am in other countries and in other cities; everything in the park lets me see what people do.

Mixed tenses 'when I was, when I am' are inconsistent; use present simple 'when I am' for habitual action. 'Another countries' and 'another cities' are incorrect: use 'other countries' and 'other cities'. 'I really can... know what people's what people do' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to 'lets me see what people do'. Remove fillers 'umm'.

× Right. I really liked it cause a current currently, I really think that this so few, uh, parks in our city and sit and everything that people really gathered into a very small space.

✓ Right. I really like it, but currently I think there are so few parks in our city, so people gather in very small spaces.

Original mixes past 'liked' with present 'currently'; use present 'like' for current opinion. 'cause a current currently' is redundant; use 'but currently'. 'this so few' is ungrammatical; use 'there are so few parks'. 'people really gathered into' uses past tense and wrong preposition; use present 'gather in'.

× And I, I really think that's a park will be very fine.

✓ And I really think having more parks would be great.

Original 'that's a park will be very fine' is ungrammatical and misuses articles and tenses. Use a modal or conditional 'would be' and a natural phrase 'having more parks would be great'. This fixes article and sentence structure issues.

× Hmm. Currently I don't, I don't know, 'cause yeah, like in Chengdu, I really like to go to the Tad Mountain Park, 'cause I know this, uh, something like the London Eye, something, uh, I really want to see the sky, see the see the city in the sky I see.

✓ Currently I don't know, but in Chengdu I really like to go to Mount Taishan Park because it has something like the London Eye; I really want to see the sky and the city from above.

Remove filler repetition 'I don't, I don't know'. Use correct park name/order 'Mount Taishan Park' or 'Ta Mountain Park' consistently. 'cause' -> 'because'. Clarify 'something like the London Eye' and express purpose with infinitive 'to see the sky and the city from above'. Fix repetition 'see the see the' and tense consistency.