Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct vocabulary; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct word choice (e.g., "path" instead of "foot") and avoid repetition. Use a linking phrase to connect points.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were close to my apartment and full of other children to play with. For example, we used to meet on the park path every afternoon to play football and ride bikes, which made those visits fun and memorable.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize reasons with linking words. Fix grammar and unclear phrases ("far from the place Amber" unclear). Limit to two or three concise sentences and give specific examples of pollution or distance.

Exemplo: Not really. I rarely visit parks now because the nearest one is quite far from where I live, and it has become polluted with litter and damaged plants. As a result, I prefer spending time at indoor cafes or shopping malls instead.

Sugestão: Start with a direct statement and give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague or awkward phrases ("in my seat"). Mention concrete benefits such as recreation, meeting people, or green space improvement.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would give people a pleasant place to relax and socialise, especially on weekends. For example, I would spend Sundays in a local park joining community activities or talking to neighbours, which would help reduce loneliness.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and offer a brief reason or alternative plan. Correct grammar ("There are no parks"), and avoid repeating previous points. Suggest a specific alternative or plan to explore parks despite poor sense of direction.

Exemplo: Not at the moment — I don't know many parks in my city and I struggle with directions. However, I might visit a new park in future if I plan a visit using a map or go with a friend, or I might choose a nearby café or game centre instead.

× Yes, I did like going to parks as a child as there were many kids to play with and many activities to do.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because there were many kids to play with and many activities to do.

Use simple past 'liked' rather than 'did like' for a simple affirmative past statement; also replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer causal connection. Suggestion: use 'I liked' for direct past statements and 'because' to explain reasons.

× And I also liked the park very much because of the foot there as it was easy to walk by as it was in front of my apartment and I also liked spending time there with my friends.

✓ I also liked the park very much because of the footpath there; it was easy to walk to since it was in front of my apartment, and I enjoyed spending time there with my friends.

Original has unclear noun 'foot' and awkward phrasing. Replace 'foot' with 'footpath' or 'path', use 'walk to' not 'walk by', and simplify clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and split long sentences for clarity.

× No, I don't like going to parks anymore as I don't have any more friends to go out with and it is also very far from the place Amber and also these days it is a lot polluted and the greenery is dead.

✓ No, I don't like going to parks anymore because I don't have friends to go with, and the parks are far from my place. These days they are very polluted and the greenery is gone.

Original mixes phrases and has unclear reference 'the place Amber'. Use 'because' for reason, plural agreement 'parks are', and clearer expressions ('gone' or 'dead' for plants). Suggestion: remove extraneous words, ensure subject-verb agreement and clear references.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city as there are times where I would feel lonely and have no place to go.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are times when I feel lonely and have no place to go.

Use 'when' instead of 'where' for time clauses and present simple 'feel' rather than conditional 'would feel' because the speaker states a general situation. Suggestion: use correct temporal conjunctions and tense for habitual or general feelings.

× So if there are more parks, I would probably visit and spend my Sundays there and will also make new friends there, which is precisely why I would like parks in my seat.

✓ So if there were more parks, I would probably visit and spend my Sundays there and might also make new friends, which is precisely why I would like parks in my area.

Mixes conditional forms and future/modal inconsistently. For an unreal or hypothetical condition use 'if there were' + 'would'. Use 'might' for possibility rather than definite 'will'. Also correct 'seat' to 'area' and avoid repeating 'there'. Suggestion: keep conditional forms consistent and choose appropriate modal verbs for likelihood.

× There is no parks that I would like to visit in the future as I don't know many parks in my city and I'm very bad with the location sense.

✓ There are no parks that I would like to visit in the future because I don't know many parks in my city and I'm very bad with a sense of direction.

Subject-verb agreement: use 'there are' with plural 'parks'. Also improve wording: 'because' for reason and 'sense of direction' for 'location sense'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and prefer natural collocations.

× And as I've already said about it, I have no friends to go out with and I would prefer other places like a restaurant or any game zones.

✓ As I have already said, I have no friends to go out with, and I would prefer other places like a restaurant or a game zone.

Remove unnecessary 'about it' and keep present perfect 'have already said' correct. Use singular 'a game zone' or 'game zones' consistently and add articles as needed. Suggestion: avoid redundant phrases and ensure noun forms and articles are consistent.